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Honeypaw (VS) (A) ~ For Approval
I screwed up on the splotches and eyes, I'll fix them when I can. Also, morale: don't close down your computer without closing your tabs, as you could lose important work...like this post. --

Neon, you're supposed to wait until the image you had first is archived before putting another one up. 11:53, 9/08/2016

It's fine, everyone is allowed one time. That being said, this should be "for approval", since you already posted at least one image before.

Smudge the earpink, smudge the shading and lighten it?  ~ Silver Cloud ~   14:51, September 8, 2016 (UTC)

Alright, in that case, could you smooth out the yellow splotches some? 15:07, 9/08/2016 15:07, September 8, 2016 (UTC)

Darken the stripes just a little bit? They are very hard to see. They aren't incredibly dark on the kit, but they are more visible than they are here if that makes any sense. 15:14 Thu Sep 8

needs a white pixel in each eye. 18:37, September 8, 2016 (UTC)

Re-ups I tried putting the lines on another layer so I could attack the splotches with my blurring tool viciously make more blurs without ruining the stripes. --

Can you blur the shading more? 06:42 Fri Sep 2016

Just curious as to know why there's tabby fur in her ear? 22:28, 9/09/2016

Because... | does? Reupload --

Smooth out the shading you have, and add some to the front leg closest to us and the tail. 18:11, September 10, 2016 (UTC)

Add/define tail shading. --  22:58, September 10, 2016 (UTC)

The ear pink seems really neon so maybe darken it a little? — Minkclaw River is Beauty, Beauty is Everything. 01:58, September 11, 2016 (UTC)

Re-upload Me: "I'll try to watch some of ZSlyzer's Spirit of Justice Playthrough!" >27 20-30 minute episodes in 4 days Me: "crap I have loads of time-wasting to do" And that, my friends, was the story of why I wasn't working. --

The shading still needs to be smoothed out quite a bit more, imo, as well as the yellow splotches. They all seem too defined still. 16:33, 9/11/2016

Re-upload When I accidentally turned up the shading to 100.0 I panicked and turned it down and I found 50.0 looks really good compared to 35.0. So yeah that's the shading right now BACK TO BINGE WATCHING SOJ -- and if someone knows how to code the timestamps that'd be great because I have no idea of how to code size and font

For lack of better words, the shading seems really dense/thick, so could you maybe make it blend more in a gradient with the image?

Re-uploaded Finished watching Spirit of Justice's case 2, decided to take a grace period so I work on other things also I feel very sorry for my lovable spineless cinnamon roll, apollo at the end of the case --

(apollo needs a break lmao) anyway can you define the tail shading? 14:00, September 14, 2016 (UTC)

Re-upload Yes poor Apollo. I love the music that plays during that scene though I need to find it --

Could you blend the shading some more?  08:29 Fri Sep 16 

Re-ups Nothing much to say except I'm really sleepy. Neon's discipline period of no watching SoJ ends tomorrow, so at least I can watch Rite to Turnabout (or whatever they called it my memory is very bad today cause sleep deprived I had to finish an essay about london 2012 only slept at 11:30 PM ((11:30 is a very big strain on Neon's poor body clock BTW))) when I wake up. report report the song was called troupe gramarye 2016 guys now I can listen to it to my heart's content --

Could you smooth out the shading a little on her main body and haunch? Nice image, by the way. 20:51, September 16, 2016 (UTC)

Maybe make the stripes a bit sharper to match the kit.

Re-upload Thanks, Ivy. Really proud on the tail. *kisses tail* fear the perfection of the bee kitten's tail. This time on "it really sucks to be a japanfornian lawyer/work for a japanfornian lawyer", I'm rethinking if Benjamin Franklin REALLY meant there were only two certain things in life. This third thing...is Maya getting accused of murder. --

Could you make the line of shading on the rump follow the lineart a bit more, if that makes sense? It seems to be leaking away from the lineart and more onto the rump. Jayie Unwritten words~ 00:06, September 18, 2016 (UTC)

The line of shading on the rump could also be blurred or smudged a little. Can you define the shading on the two forelegs as well? 23:45, September 18, 2016 (UTC)

Re-upload got a bit lazy and also went on a school trip to this place called the Australiana Pioneer Village. It's a really authentic place, also it's really old. (My mother says she went there as a ten-year-old. That was 1976.) I have to go somewhere at 5:00 so I went on this super super fast. Zoom zoom. --

Define the light on the back legs? 13:45, 9/20/2016

The line of shading is still leaking away from the lineart of the rump a lot. Jayie Unwritten words~ 21:36, September 20, 2016 (UTC)

Pretty minor, but the kit image doesn't have any tabby markings over it's nose, while this one does. 23:52 Thu Sep 22

Re-upload --

Perhaps smooth the shading line above the haunch a tad. Nice job!

Re-ups Thanks, Spook! GIMP tells me I spent a minute on smoothing out the haunch. Woah I'm fast. --

The shading is still leaking away from the lineart. With your light source, there should not like light on top of the rump. Jayie Unwritten words~ 00:45, September 26, 2016 (UTC)

I...honestly don't know whatever the hell you mean in the second sentence. *sweat sweat sweat* --

She means remove the light that's on top of the hind end by the base of the tail. There shouldn't be any there. 14:14, 9/27/2016

Blur the shading a bit, especially on the haunch. 15:08, September 27, 2016 (UTC)

Roach (Ro) ~ For Approval
Must get this one approved ;) --  21:13, September 11, 2016 (UTC)

lighten him up some, he looks more grey right now. 21:16, September 11, 2016 (UTC)

Smooth and define shading? 21:17, 9/11/2016

Add more shading on head and have it some forward a bit more, and also define your light source.

Re-uploaded --  22:58, September 11, 2016 (UTC)

Waste in a ring around the image. 18:21, 9/12/2016

I can't see it...--  22:08, September 12, 2016 (UTC)

It's definitely there -- around most areas of the image.

If possible, could anyone give me a redline on where the waste is so I can pinpoint it? --  02:01, September 13, 2016 (UTC)

Yeah, here you go. I made the backdrop white too, so the waste is easier to see. This should be pretty accurate -- used color-select to pick it up. Anyway, can you define the light source again? It seems a tad bit randomly placed in some spots. I can draw that up too for you if need be

Re-uploaded. Is this better? --  21:05, September 13, 2016 (UTC)

Better, but here's the updated red-line with the stuff that's still there. Also, the image looks really gray -- could lighten the base to make him more silver? And I still can't make out the light source.

Re-uploaded.--  01:47, September 14, 2016 (UTC)

Almost,, but not quite. You also might've erased a little too much on the back of the head, since it appears to be leaking away from the lineart.

Re-uploaded --  23:22, September 15, 2016 (UTC)

You're literally so close to getting all of it -- just this left.

Re-uploaded --  00:47, September 16, 2016 (UTC)

Could you darken the shading just a tad? 05:59 Fri Sep 2016

^Except for the two lines of shading between the shoulder/haunch and the belly, those are about the darkness you should probably aim for on the rest of the shading. Those two lines seem fairly blocky and look somewhat like blurry markings - I think that could be fixed by thinning them out and making them curve a little to the shape of the body, and perhaps making them reach a little less far up. Since I'm bad at explaining, I think this is a little closer to what you should be going for with that.  08:27 Fri Sep 16 

Re-uploaded --  12:35, September 17, 2016 (UTC)

Define the light on the legs? Also, the tail seems to be leaking shading. <span style="">12:47, 9/17/2016

Re-uploaded --  16:11, September 17, 2016 (UTC)

Could you try to contour the shading to be more realistic with the cat's body? Kinda just follow that redline Shinx gave you a bit more...

Erm. I don't understand how to do that....--  15:50, September 18, 2016 (UTC)

Basically, follow the redline Shinx gave you earlier. The shading goes up in two very straight lines thick lines and it doesn't quite look natural as a light source. Cats are not blocky really, so the shading should bend with the curves of a cat's body. For lack of better words, see how this looks like a pin straight line? Probably should curve more. Also, shading's leaking away from the lineart on the back of the head and tail.

Re-uploaded (Re-did shading hooopppee this is better) --  22:57, September 18, 2016 (UTC)

Can you smooth out the shading on the belly haunch just a tiny bit? Also, define the light on the legs a little? 23:47, September 18, 2016 (UTC)

Maybe define the tail shading and there also seems to be a few white pixels at the top of the ear that should be gray. Much better though :)

Could you erase a bit of the shading at the top of the lower back/hip? I don't think it would be all shadow that high up, with your light source. Jayie Unwritten words~ 18:57, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

Re-uploaded--  22:14, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

There's waste up by the ears, forming a ring around the tail, and by the paws. Ear lineart appears to be blurred, too.

Define your lightsource. I can't seem to see where it may be coming from, as it appears to be coming from both directions? <span style="">13:44, 9/20/2016

Re-uploaded --  00:52, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

Define the shading. There is also waste above the lower back and behind the back legs. 00:58, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

Ear lineart appears to be blurred.

There's waste under the underbelly and in the space below that as well. <span style="">01:30, 9/25/2016

Re-uploaded--  16:04, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

Can you define the light on the paws, tail, and head? Also the ear lineart still appears to be blurred.

Re-uploaded --  03:22, September 27, 2016 (UTC)

Blur the light on the face, chest, front legs, and hind leg farthest from us. 15:12, September 27, 2016 (UTC)

Smooth out the shading everywhere. 17:00, September 27, 2016 (UTC)

Sparkpelt (W) - CBA
The old reservation on the table doesn't have a date so I think I'm good to take this...? All the colors were pulled from her apprentice 06:16, September 17, 2016 (UTC)

I think it's purrfect the way it is but you might want to make her ears a little pinker unless thats too pink for this character. Bluedragon64 (talk) 12:50, September 17, 2016 (UTC)

I feel as if this is a little darker than the kit and apprentice images? Forgive if I'm wrong. Also, I think the stripes need to be a little thicker and smudged to match the other images. <span style="">12:58, 9/17/2016

the pale colour scattered throughout her body should be brightened considerably, and the stripes should be....oranger for lack of a better word, thicker, and squigglier like firestar's. (the stripes will be on multiply of the base pelt) 14:30, September 17, 2016 (UTC)

Re-uploaded art iz hard 07:34, September 18, 2016 (UTC)

yeah it is rip, can you define the pale belly and face a lot and reduce the opacity on the texture some? 20:00, September 18, 2016 (UTC)

Re-uploaded 07:29, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

This looks gorgeous. :D I feel like the pale belly and face still aren't light enough compared to the kit and apprentice images, though. Jayie Unwritten words~ 19:13, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

Re-uploaded 22:15, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

There's a pixel of waste at the tip of the tail, on the bottom of the cat, and under the tail. Nice job on this :)

Re-uploaded 22:35, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

Define the light on the back legs? <span style="">13:37, 9/20/2016

The pixels of waste near the base of the tail and on the bottom are still there, if I'm seeing it correctly

Re-uploaded 06:04, September 21, 2016 (UTC)

Comments? 00:10, September 26, 2016 (UTC)

CBA?

Swampkit (Star) - CBA
<span style="">15:49 Sun Sep 18

...Can someone fix the file name? It needs a ( . ) after Swampkit...not the that is currently there. I just noticed this. <span style="">01:22 Mon Sep 19

Re-named. Didn't notice it until you said something. Problem fixed.

I think the texture on the white patches is making them look a little gray - could you lighten that, or erase away some of it where the light should be hitting the white patches? Just a thought. Jayie Unwritten words~ 19:17, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

His eyes look blue. Make them more green.  ~ Silver Cloud ~   23:06, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

They're technically turquoise, which is blue-green, and unless it specifies which shade of green, then it's artist's choice. <span style="">13:38, 9/20/2016

Reuploaded Sorry for the obnoxious lack of activity -_- I just got a puppy and she is a little attention whore. Anyhow, Winter is right. They are turquoise, as at this age he would be going from having blue eyes to green, so yeah...not changing them. Sorry. <span style="">18:33 Fri Sep 23

Could you define the shading, please?  <span style="">01:08 Sat Sep 24 

Reuploaded <span style="">16:43 Sat Sep 24

CBA?

Bluebellkit (Ki) ~ For Approval
I hate the shading. I couldn't get it to look right.

Hm..have you looked at the shading placement on the tutorial page? I have it pulled up and the shading for that is actually on the right side of the kitten image having the light source come from the left. Maybe try using that as an example. For an admin, this needs renamed to File:Bluebellkit.kit.png — <font face="Vivaldi" size="1" color="#08088A>Minkclaw River is Beauty, Beauty is Everything. 03:17, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

that's only a general guide. there's multiple usable sources, and this source is fine. 06:19, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

Smooth the neck shading and define the light on the tail

It's a little hard to tell since the image is so small, but I think I spy a bit of waste next to that right front paw. Jayie Unwritten words~ 19:23, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

reuploaded *Face palm* Shading still looks weird.

No, it doesn't. Just smooth it out a little bit near the edges of it and you'll be just fine. Also, be sure to sign with four ~'s, as you haven't been leaving a timestamp with your messages. You have a signature, but I can't tell what time you left said message, and that wouldn't be good for comments, CBAing, reuploading, ect.

reuploaded I think it looks better. 02:36, September 20, 2016

Shading looks nice, but some is leaking outside of the lineart(above the tail and some on the head). Songfire (talk) 15:14, September 20, 2016 (UTC)

reuploaded I think this looks good.

Define the light on the legs? <span style="">15:25, 9/21/2016

The file is named incorrectly -- should be named File:Bluebellkit.kit.png with two 'l' 's in Bluebell.

blur(?) the body shading some more. 22:03, September 21, 2016 (UTC)

reuploaded 49:32, September 21, 2016 (UTC)

Smooth out the shading some more. 03:33, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

reuploaded 21:27, September 22, 2016

There's some waste around the image mostly on <== that side. <span style="">21:40, 9/24/2016

The shading could still be smoothed out a bit more. 00:34, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

reuploaded Thats about as much as I can smudge it. 33:36, September 27 2016 (UTC)

Lighten it and define the light on the paws. 17:02, September 27, 2016 (UTC)

Silvermask (D) ~ CBA
god bless — <font face="Vivaldi" size="1" color="#08088A>Minkclaw River is Beauty, Beauty is Everything. 16:37, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

Define the shading on the legs, and have the light be more rounded on the belly, the shape looks a bit off, if that makes sense. Jayie Unwritten words~ 19:25, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

Re-Upps, I probably don't know about critizing my own work, but is the little "mask" alright? — <font face="Vivaldi" size="1" color="#08088A>Minkclaw River is Beauty, Beauty is Everything. 01:44, September 20, 2016 (UTC)

The mask seems a little sharp up at the top, so maybe smooth it just up there in the left side :)

Re-Upps, had to do two uploads forgot to remove the waste the first time — <font face="Vivaldi" size="1" color="#08088A>Minkclaw River is Beauty, Beauty is Everything. 14:08, September 20, 2016 (UTC)

Blur the stomach shading; it cuts off abruptly.

Re-Upps, I redid the stomach shading so hopefully it looks better. — <font face="Vivaldi" size="1" color="#08088A>Minkclaw River is Beauty, Beauty is Everything. 14:08, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

Define the light source; half the shading suggests the light's coming from the front and the other half suggests that it's coming from the back/somewhere behind the haunch 07:11, September 23, 2016 (UTC)

I'm not seeing how it suggests that, the way I did it, it's coming from the front. Could I get some more comments on that possibly? I followed the shading placement, some suggestions from there trying new shading and all. — <font face="Vivaldi" size="1" color="#08088A>Minkclaw River is Beauty, Beauty is Everything. 16:46, September 23, 2016 (UTC)

I personally don't think it looks out of place at all. I also don't see how you think the light source is coming from behind the haunch, Scarlet? <span style="">18:45, 9/23/2016

I used this light source on all of my deputies, which were approved. That's what I based the shading placement example for this blank on. The only reason this looks different is that I smudge my shading to look textured. Although, the shading could be defined on the legs and face some so that it is more obvious that the light is coming from the front. Very nice (: <span style="">23:04 Fri Sep 23

The tail shading looks slightly blotchy, and also the shading seems to cut off a bit oddly here in a line

Re-Upps, thanks! — <font face="Vivaldi" size="1" color="#08088A>Minkclaw River is Beauty, Beauty is Everything. 14:28, September 27, 2016 (UTC)

There's some leaking shading on the underbelly right by the front leg's elbow, or whatever you call it xD <span style="">14:38, 9/27/2016

Re-Upps — <font face="Vivaldi" size="1" color="#08088A>Minkclaw River is Beauty, Beauty is Everything. 16:02, September 27, 2016 (UTC)

Comments before approval? 17:03, September 27, 2016 (UTC)

Elderkit (Star) - CBA
This is my first one so please share your comments. Waterclaw135 (talk) 23:35, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

Pretty impressive for your first one! That means this can say "For Approval" instead of "For Evaluation", since you know what you're doing. As for the image itself, define the depth in the shading a wee bit. It's very obviously there, but looks a tad flat.

Maybe just my screen but the eyes look extremely orange - could you perhaps make them more yellow? Also smudge the earpink. Great job :3

Actually, smudging ear pink isn't mandatory. That's just a matter of preference that many users like to use here. No one is required to smudge anything; ear pink, texture, shading, ect.

Re-Upload: Defined the depth of the shading, made eyes yellower, sumdged the earpink. Waterclaw135 (talk) 01:54, September 20, 2016 (UTC)

Could you define your light source? <span style="">15:26, 9/21/2016

Re-Upload: Defined the light source. --Waterclaw135 (talk) 22:17, September 21, 2016 (UTC)

Could you put a little bit of light on the tops of the arms down to the tops of the paws? There'd be a little light there, very cute! 06:26, September 24, 2016 (UTC)

Re-Upload: Added light to the arms/paws section. --Waterclaw135 (talk) 14:35, September 24, 2016 (UTC)

Comments? --Waterclaw135 (talk) 16:18, September 27, 2016 (UTC)

Could you possibly smooth the shading along the body, below the back area — <font face="Vivaldi" size="1" color="#08088A>Minkclaw River is Beauty, Beauty is Everything. 16:24, September 27, 2016 (UTC)

If they smooth out the shading any further, then there won't be any shading to see. It's fine as it is, and I'd actually like to CBA this.

Elderkit (Ki) - CBA
Mistyped the name it, could someone please change it? Thanks. Songfire (talk) 23:36, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

This needs a date on the reservation table, and also, match the star image since it was posted before yours :).

Reuploaded. Date added, took new colors from StarClan version. Songfire (talk) 23:52, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

Smooth out the chest highlight, please. It stands out a bit more than it should. And since you also know what you're doing, this will be changed to "For Approval".

Reuploaded. Tried to smooth shading/highlights out. Thoughts? Songfire (talk) 04:38, September 20, 2016 (UTC)

Perhaps make the earpink color match a tad more to the star image, and light on the --> back paw.

Reuploaded. I fixed earpink and modified the light on the back paw(not entirely sure what you meant). Songfire (talk) 00:38, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

Hello! May I please have some comments on this? Songfire (talk) 14:37, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

Nah, you can have a CBA though.

Tulipkit (Kit) - For Approval
looks just like one of my ocs. Kits are hard. ~P  a   t   c   h    f   e   a   t   h   e   r~   01:08, September 20, 2016 (UTC)

Can you please change your signature to a subpage instead of adding all of this extra coding onto the approval page? It's unnecessary and a bit untidy? Anyways, back to the image. Define the light on the tail, if there is any, and define the overall shading. I can tell there's shading, but it's hard to see, although that could just be my eyes.

Reuploaded.How do I make a sup-page? I knew how to make one, but it's been awhile now... ~Patchfeather

You'd make a subpage called User:Patchfeather14/Sig (which appears to already exist], and then change your preferences to read, which shows your signature:   ~P   a   t   c   h    f   e   a   t   h   e   r~   It's pretty easy, actually, and makes everything much cleaner and allows us to easily track who leaves what messages in a very tidy fashion.

Oh, duh (can't believe i forgot how to make those). Anyway, i looked at my preferences and it already says that. Could I make a personal template for it instead? I've made them in the past and they've worked well at keeping pages clean. ~P  a   t   c   h    f   e   a   t   h   e   r~   01:44, September 20, 2016 (UTC)

Could you smooth out your shading some? Nice work! <span style="">12:53, 9/22/2016

Reuploaded. Thanks. ~P  a   t   c   h    f   e   a   t   h   e   r~   13:41, September 26, 2016 (UTC)

Blizzardwing (DF) - For Approval
I am super proud of this. If Lynxkit, Elderkit, Swampkit, and Tulipkit get pages and chararts, then what Su revealed about the cats from Tallstar's Revenge and Crookedstar's Promise are just as valid.

You forgot his toesies :p <span style="">20:28, 9/20/2016

Yep, I already reuploaded with that after you pointed it out.

I get that the shading can't go very dark with this pattern, but could you define the belly shading just a little?  <span style="">01:06 Sat Sep 24 

Re-uploaded. You got it, boss.

don't know if it's my screen but his mottles seems to have a slight yellowish tint to them on the warrior, and the mottles themselves seem a bit bigger ad more...clumped together for lack of a better term. 15:27, September 24, 2016 (UTC)

Re-uploaded. I tried a thing.

Could you smooth out the shading a little bit more on the flank area? Like where the shoulders are for both legs? <span style="">13:11, 9/27/2016

Ashheart (Star) - CBA
All colors from kit and warrior images. Comments? 20:51, September 20, 2016 (UTC)

Smooth out the shading a bit, please.

Reuploaded. 00:30, September 21, 2016 (UTC)

The tail shading looks a little too overblurred, could you define that? Also, could you define the shading depth on the front half of the cat? <span style="">01:00, 9/21/2016

There also appears to be a bit of shading leaking by the chin area. <span style="">07:54 Wed Sep 2016

Reuploaded. 15:26, September 21, 2016 (UTC)

Maybe smooth the earpink a bit - seems a lil' sharp.

Reuploaded. How's this? 14:41, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

Could you blur the shoulder shading just a tad?  <span style="">01:05 Sat Sep 24 

Reuploaded. 17:09, September 24, 2016 (UTC)

There's a few pixels of earpink waste off to the right side :)

Reuploaded. 00:18, September 27, 2016 (UTC)

I see one dark pixel between its whiskers could you maybe erase it? --Waterclaw135 (talk) 00:42, September 27, 2016 (UTC)

That's part of the lineart. 00:59, September 27, 2016 (UTC)

Oh, then it my bad. Sorry. --Waterclaw135 (talk) 01:12, September 27, 2016 (UTC)

CBA?

Whiteberry (Star) - CBA


smooth out and lighten the shading? 03:32, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

Reuploaded

Reuploaded Ugh I suddenly got so tired while doing this my god too much homework =/ Defining light

I think possibly with your light source, the light on the end of the tail would be more prominent? Forgive if I'm being confusing lol <span style="">18:47, 9/23/2016

Reuploaded

CBA?

Perhaps you should define shading on the cat's right ear? --Falcon 49 (talk) 13:14, September 26, 2016 (UTC)

Please change the heading if you comment on a CBA'd image. <span style="">13:45, 9/26/2016

I actually am fairly sure there shouldn't be shading there at all with my light source, since light is shining pretty much directly on it. I'd rather not change it without a second opinion.

I agree; it doesn't need shading. <span style="">14:05, 9/26/2016

CBA again?

Brackenfoot (Star) - CBA
Is this reserved? If it is I'm sorry, just decline it. I'm still a noob. And if I may ask, how do I reserve something? Jose1106 (talk) 23:11, September 21, 2016 (UTC)

No, this is not reserved, but in order to continue this you need to add a reservation yourself. You've got the option to join the project here, but isn't mandatory. And then, just add yourself a slot on the chart and find your spot in alphabetical order, then add reservation and date. Since this is your first art, though, please change the heading to "~For Evaluation" instead of "~For Approval", until a lead deems it ready to be "~For Approval" Nice job, though

Thanks a lot for the help! Will do! Jose1106 (talk) 23:12, September 21, 2016 (UTC)

This is pretty good! Could you define the shading depth some more? Also, don't forget to sign with ~ after everything you say on a talk page from now on! Like so: <span style="">23:09, 9/21/2016

Honestly, this can stay at For Approval, since this is more than what's needed to become an apprentice in the project. Nice job!

lighten the stripes not on the legs a bit, they're a little too dark. 23:12, September 21, 2016 (UTC)

Reuploaded Thanks SnowedLightning. Jose1106 (talk) 23:29, September 21, 2016 (UTC)

There's like, one stripe on the right paw that goes down a little further than the warrior image, so could you perhaps remove it? And also maybe trim the stripes on the chest back a few pixels to match the warrior's placement and make sure to add your reservation, since technically an image should be reserved before being on the page anyway

Can you give me a link to the reservation chart please? Jose1106 (talk) 23:44, September 21, 2016 (UTC)

Here ye go

Reuploaded Jose1106 (talk) 00:50, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

I still think you could define the shading depth some more. It looks a little flat, as of the moment. If you need help with shading depth, I'd be glad to help! <span style="">02:37, 9/22/2016

Reuploaded Defined shading. Is it okay now, cause if not I think ill need your help Snowdappple. Jose1106 (talk) 10:33, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

Alright, so forgive for the long wall of text in advance, but here's my help. I've provided you with a couple redlines found here and here that explain what you should do (forgive my handwriting in a small space). Anyway! The first image shows three different problems I'm seeing, other than the shading depth issue. The first one is waste around the whole image, as you can see where I circled in the red. The easiest way to get rid of that is whatever program you use, use the wand select tool, make sure you've selected your lineart layer, select outside the charart in all of the blank spaces, and select each layer in turn and erase outside the image to find that darn dirty waste :p. The green circle is where I believe there's been blurred lineart. That's easily fixable by taking the blank image and putting that over the top of the current lineart. And where I circled in blue, is where I think I see leaking nose-pink. You don't have to necessarily blur or smudge your nose pink, as many an image on here have plain old nose-pink, some without shading - and that's absolutely fine!

The second image shows where to put your shading depth, which I believe I'm still having trouble seeing. I've looked at all of your previous uploads, and all I can see is that you blurred a couple stripes. The purple/violet/pink whatever is where you should put your shading depth. Make a separate layer and put it above your normal shading. Then select a color that's a little darker than your other shading color, or you can select the same color as your other shading and put this layer on multiply. What multiply does is makes it darker anyway. Put the new shading around where you see the pink/purple and then blur or smudge it, but not too much! I hope this helps and sorry about the wall of text ^^; <span style="">13:50, 9/22/2016

Will do! Thanks! Jose1106 (talk) 14:00, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

No idea if this was said but his eyes, pupils mainly, look a little funy. Like he's got a lazy eye. — <font face="Vivaldi" size="1" color="#08088A>Minkclaw River is Beauty, Beauty is Everything. 14:10, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

Pupil placement is artist's choice. Personally, I think they look fine. <span style="">14:20, 9/22/2016

I have to agree with mink, the eyes do look a bit dodgy. 15:06, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

Reuploaded Thanks Snowdapple, that was amazingly helpful. Let me know if anything you said to correct is still there and I'll fix it! Jose1106 (talk) 15:46, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

Reuploaded Jose1106 (talk) 15:56, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

Reuploaded Got rid of all the debris and changed the shading. I also cleared the leaking. Jose1106 (talk) 18:38, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

I think you may have accidentally reverted it? It appears the the two images before the current one were perfectly depth-ed. But this current one looks like it's back to the old image? Forgive, but I'm a bit confused lmao. <span style="">19:04, 9/22/2016

Whoops, meant to say mainly on the front half. It also looks like the shading along the stomach/back whatever you wanna call it is leaking onto the tail-tip? <span style="">19:06, 9/22/2016

Reuploaded Jose1106 (talk) 19:13, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

Could you straighten the eyes as Bracken foot doesn't have a lazy eye and that's what his right eye looks like — <font face="Vivaldi" size="1" color="#08088A>Minkclaw River is Beauty, Beauty is Everything. 19:36, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

Maybe lighten the shading depth judt a tiny bit, by lowering your opacity on that layer. And the tail-tip still has that dark shading on it. <span style="">19:38, 9/22/2016

Reuploaded Jose1106 (talk) 20:06, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

Maybe define the tail shading -- can't see it too well.

the stripes still need to be lightened. 21:13, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

Reuploaded Jose1106 (talk) 21:37, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

This is really minor but the warrior doesn't have any streak above his nose, and it has a few more stripes on the --> side of the face. <span style="">23:48 Thu Sep 22

Yeah I know, I just wanted to add that little touch. I'll remove it if you really want me to. :) Jose1106 (talk) 00:29, September 23, 2016 (UTC)

I mean technically we can't see the bridge of his nose on the charart, but I guess if it were really implemented, you'd be able to see at least a part of it. But since this has to match as close as possible, I'd suggest to remove that. <span style="">14:05, 9/23/2016

On it! Jose1106 (talk) 15:39, September 23, 2016 (UTC)

Reuploaded Removed the streak, and i think it actually looks better now. Jose1106 (talk) 15:46, September 23, 2016 (UTC)

Reuploaded Noticed some waste and removed it. Jose1106 (talk) 20:21, September 23, 2016 (UTC)

Could you define the earpink just a tiny bit? Especially in <== that ear. It looks like it's kind of blending into the head. <span style="">20:33, 9/23/2016

Re-uploaded Defined earpink

Don't forget your signature :P Also, I believe you accidentally blurred the lineart on the ear. And could you brighten the white pixels in the eyes? They look a little dull. <span style="">21:00, 9/23/2016

Re-uploaded Fixed white pixels and fixed the blurry ear. Jose1106 (talk) 21:31, September 23, 2016 (UTC)

Is this blurry or is my computer being weird? I'm inclined to think it's just my screen but I just thought I'd be sure lmao  <span style="">01:22 Sat Sep 24 

Re-uploaded Fixed blurriness Jose1106 (talk) 02:48, September 24, 2016 (UTC)

There's a little speck of waste by the <== ear and by the forehead out a ways. <span style="">02:58, 9/24/2016

Re-uploaded Removed waste Jose1106 (talk) 12:14, September 24, 2016 (UTC)

Re-uploaded Fixed some weird looking shading. Also, what does CBA mean? Jose1106 (talk) 15:00, September 24, 2016 (UTC)

CBA means "comments before approval", which means if a lead - a senior warrior, deputy, or leader - deems your image ready to be put onto the main articles/pages, then it would recieve the CBA. <span style="">17:57, 9/24/2016

Cool, I hope I get one soon! (hint, hint) XD Jose1106 (talk) 18:02, September 24, 2016 (UTC)

Any comments? Jose1106 (talk) 14:47, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

I think you should define the shading a tiny bit. the rest looks perfect to me. --Falcon 49 (talk) 13:26, September 26, 2016 (UTC)

Please don't ask for comments unless it has been a confirmed 72 hours since the last comment. <span style="">13:45, 9/26/2016

My bad, at least I know now. :) Jose1106 (talk) 14:22, September 26, 2016 (UTC)

Re-uploaded Jose1106 (talk) 16:22, September 26, 2016 (UTC)

This is actually fantastic for a first image. Comments before approval? 17:05, September 27, 2016 (UTC)

Marshcloud (DF) ~ CBA
Wonder what he did  <span style="">00:00 Thu Sep 22 

There's one tiny pixel of waste on the left side of the --> stretched paw.

reups  <span style="">12:40 Thu Sep 22 

His back teeth are not colored. Also, his upper tooth has red on it. ~ Silver Cloud ~   16:34, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

reups actually, they are colored. They're just in shadow. Thus, this is the second time I have uploaded for literally one pixel difference :P  <span style="">01:15 Sat Sep 24 

Comments before approval? 17:13, September 27, 2016 (UTC)

Juniperclaw (Ro) - CBA
Comments? <span style="">00:16 Thu Sep 22

Define the shading a tad. 03:29, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

idk if you understand this but possibly darken the nose pink as black cats don't have bright pink/maroon noses more like a dark grey. — <font face="Vivaldi" size="1" color="#08088A>Minkclaw River is Beauty, Beauty is Everything. 14:12, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

the base of his other images appear to be a little darker than what you've got right now. 21:14, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

Re-uploaded <span style="">23:39 Thu Sep 22

Comments? <span style="">00:22 Mon Sep 26

CBA?

Vixenkit (Star) ~ For Evaluation
This is my first charart. I tried my best, but I just have this feeling that I totally failed :P  At least it's hard to fail a solid black cat, it's not too easy to stop the billion flaws in the art :P

If you used solid black to color in the whole charart, I completely suggest not doing that. Put your color a little lighter black but a really dark gray, and that way you can define the shading and the light source, as I cannot see either of those. Also try not to align your images. <span style="">12:56, 9/22/2016

Reuploaded I forgot to save it in layers, so I had to redo the whole thing, oops :P

This looks really nice, but should she even get the image? As far as I can tell, we don't know when she died -- she could have been a warrior or an apprentice, so we don't know whether she'd get a kit or an adult StarClan image. I think this would be like Emberkit (CJ) or Tumblekit, who don't get an image. I apologize if I am mistaken, however. 20:38, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

Technically, if it says 'Vixenkit' on the confirmation, then she would get the StarClan kit blank, imo. <span style="">21:20, 9/22/2016

Whoa whoa whoa!! Beautiful I think I'm gonna fall over ecstatically! :P Wait no actually, can you define the light source? And it'd probably just me but the <== ear seems to be a tad bit darker than the other one. Probably shading but the colors do have to match. This is cool! :D --  21:21, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

What exactly do you mean by define the light source? And yes, it's shading.

Defining the light source means making it more clear where the light is coming from. So yeah, maybe do that a little and also add some eye depth

Reuploaded Not sure if that's right... 21:57, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

Can you smooth out the shading? It seems a little rough. --  21:59, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

Reuploaded

Reuploaded Spotted some waste

Perhaps define the light overall on the image, and also define the earpink on the <-- ear

Lovely kitty. Meow. Anyways, I think the earpink on the ---> ear is leaking onto the back of the ear a bit. --

Re-uploaded Sorry I didn't get to it earlier, Paint.net was being a pain. 19:00, September 24, 2016 (UTC)

The tail tip and the right side of the head look gray -- could you perhaps darken those? Just so she's all black

Reuploaded

Flowerpaw (SC)(Ki) ~ For Approval
I tried? Hollywhisker123 (talk) 20:46, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

Can you define the shading just a tiny bit? This is a very nice image, so I'm going to change your heading to "For Approval". I see that you have asked to join the project on the talk page, so I'll add you in as an apprentice. 21:02, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

this needs to be using the short furred blank. 21:12, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

Whoops! Also added some light on the back paw... I think there was supposed to be some but I forgot to add it the first time.

Wrong section, my bad. so brain dead... So sorry. But also maybe smooth the shading and earpink some

Re-up Did this make it better? I tried to follow a source I saw on another image. And also, how often do you have to upload for it not be declined? I just found out I'll be hiking in the mountains this weekend so I won't be here.... Hollywhisker123 (talk)

Up again Just spotted some waste Hollywhisker123 (talk) 22:09, September 22, 2016 (UTC)

Smudge/blur the earpink some more? Anyway, I think there is a one month limit for the image to be complete. ~Skiddley Riddley ♫ ♪ 17:27, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

Reuploaded Hollyspots (talk) 20:12, September 26, 2016 (UTC)

Sorrelpaw (WC) (Star) ~ For Approval
I like you. Also I'll get rid of that waste by your eye later. 12:28, September 23, 2016 (UTC)

Beautiful ^^ Could you smooth out the shading some more? <span style="">14:02, 9/23/2016

There's some waste to the left of <- eye. <span style="">14:30 Fri Sep 23

She already pointed out the waste, Maple. Also possibly smudge the grey a tad? — <font face="Vivaldi" size="1" color="#08088A>Minkclaw River is Beauty, Beauty is Everything. 16:51, September 23, 2016 (UTC)

Reups 12:58, September 24, 2016 (UTC)

Smooth out the shading more. 17:50, September 24, 2016 (UTC)

do you think you could lighten the shading on the body by the tail and on her closest leg (to us) just a little? 15:42, September 27, 2016 (UTC)

Cloverfoot (Ro) - For Approval
22:23, September 23, 2016 (UTC)

There's some waste under the chin. Pretty kitty :3

Re-uploaded. 22:37, September 23, 2016 (UTC)

Maybe expand the shading on the area between the arms and the legs (what's that called ... ?) 17:50, September 24, 2016 (UTC)

I'm sorry to be so stupid, but I'm actually not sure what you mean. Are you talking about the underbelly or something? That would seem to be between the arms and legs, but the shading is already pretty expanded there. 21:44, September 24, 2016 (UTC)

The shoulder? Well, amyways, she's quite pretty but there's a speck on waste on her back. --Dewsplash (talk) 00:43, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

Re-uploaded. I'm pretty sure it's not the shoulder (I don't think that's between the arms and legs) and my best guess is that it's the underbelly, so I went ahead and expanded the shading a little there, and also removed the waste. 00:52, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

No I'm not talking about the underbelly and you're not stupid I'm just doing a terrible job at explaining - I think I might be looking for "torso" 04:32, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

How about "flank" or "side?" Jose1106 (talk) 12:05, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

Re-uploaded. Oh, I think I know where you're talking about now. Did I expand it in the right spot? 12:43, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

Bluebellkit Star - For Approval


This is my first charart in a long long time, I've never gotten to do a StarClan kit so I came back to try out my shading skills on a smol bean <3  06:23, September 24, 2016 (UTC)

Could you define the shading a tiny bit?  <span style="">08:58 Sat Sep 24 

Define the eye depth just a tad more as well? <span style="">14:26, 9/24/2016

expand the shading. 17:49, September 24, 2016 (UTC)

Could you match this image to the kit version? I don't know if it's me but this seems a bit whiter. --Waterclaw135 (talk) 21:37, September 24, 2016 (UTC)

It does match. =/ It's just the shading, which darkness and tint is not required to match from image to image, unless it drastically throws off the coloring.

As per Skye. Technically, you're supposed to use pure white. <span style="">21:42, 9/24/2016

some people use an off white, so you don't actually have to. anyway the earpink looks just a litle too bright, maybe dull it down just a tad? 03:43, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

Define shading I can't see it. :/ — <font face="Vivaldi" size="1" color="#08088A>Minkclaw River is Beauty, Beauty is Everything. 04:08, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

Reuploaded I used a verrrrrry slight off white and then used pure white for her highlights to create more of the illusion of depth. How's this? 05:06, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

I think there would be shading on the back behind her head if your light source is where I think it is. <span style="">12:40, 9/25/2016

Can you define the shading?

Lynxkit (Ki) ~ For Approval
Why @ me, did you have to create such a difficult pattern? <span style="">14:25, 9/24/2016

Smudge the head stripes a little more? This is gorgeous. ~Skiddley Riddley ♫ ♪ 17:23, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

Re-uploaded Thanks! <span style="">13:07, 9/26/2016

Stumpytail (DF) ~ For Approval
manx cats are my friends 03:36, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

Define the light on the last leg in the bsck please, and this is amazing trolly — <font face="Vivaldi" size="1" color="#08088A>Minkclaw River is Beauty, Beauty is Everything. 04:10, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

not sure what leg you mean? 20:47, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

I think she means our right back leg, dear. Aka the back leg closest to us.

yes, the one near the tail; thanks Skye — <font face="Vivaldi" size="1" color="#08088A>Minkclaw River is Beauty, Beauty is Everything. 21:36, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

reuploaded 05:25, September 26, 2016 (UTC)

Swiftpaw (TPB) (Alt Kit) ~ For Evaluation
first inage on this site ) 10:23, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

There's a bit of darker...for lack of a better word: mass...like on the bottom half of his head by his jawline? Idk if that's shading, but it looks a bit out of place. Mind smoothing it out more, or getting rid of it if it's not supposed to be there? <span style="">23:30, 9/26/2016

The white looks gray on the ---> part of the body. 16:29, September 26, 2016 (UTC)

Reuploaded The white looks gray because of shading 18:57, September 26, 2016 (UTC)

Lilystem (Star) - For Evaluation
--Falcon 49 (talk) 15:31, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

You need to add a lot more stripes to your image in order to match the previous images seen here and here. <span style="">16:08, 9/25/2016

Don't forget to say "re-uploaded" in bold text every time you reupload your image! Also, there's some waste around the image, and a few pixels around the image look out of place, as if they weren't colored in? And there's quite a bit of missing/blurred lineart on the legs and tail. <span style="">16:12, 9/25/2016  Re-uploaded.

Reuploaded again

Please sign your name after leaving a message/saying re-uploaded. Also, the earpink is covered a lot in the --> ear.

Don't forget to sign your name either xD The earpink is covered because that's ear fur. Also, define the shading in <== ear. <span style="">16:39, 9/25/2016

Whoops, and there's also waste next to that ear as well. <span style="">16:39, 9/25/2016

Re-uploaded better now? ;) --Falcon 49 (talk) 16:58, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

There are two uncoloured spots on the right ear (Our right, the cat's left). If you want, I can point them out. ~Skiddley Riddley ♫ ♪ 17:20, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

Re-uploaded. Fixed --Falcon 49 (talk) 18:07, September 25, 2016 (UTC) Re-uploaded. I realized the tail was a bit too dark. --Falcon 49 (talk) 18:15, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

There's some waste below and above the tail, and also by the right ear

Re-uploaded. --Falcon 49 (talk) 19:29, September 25, 2016 (UTC)

Could you define the tail shading?  <span style="">21:44 Sun Sep 25 

Re-uploaded. --Falcon 49 (talk) 13:13, September 26, 2016 (UTC)

There's some odd colored pixels in <== ear? Idk if it's just me. <span style="">23:34, 9/26/2016

Maybe you could smudge a little the stripes on the tail --Waterclaw135 (talk) 23:51, September 26, 2016 (UTC)

Define the eye depth? <span style="">00:07 Tue Sep 27