Warriors Wiki talk:Books/Discussion Archive 27

Mapleshade's Vengeance/Chapter 1 ~ Silver Nomination
[wipes off sweat] comments? I worked damn hard on this. 09:13, March 25, 2015 (UTC)

There is a bullet point error in the characters list and you should check the placement of some commas in the 1st and 3rd paragraphs. Also, in the infobox, for chronology (the bottom bit of the infobox) you can link to Chapter 2 even though it's a redlink right now. That's all I see at the moment, nice work Fox :) 13:09, March 25, 2015 (UTC)

Updated could you fix the chapters template for me? It's not really working, therefore I can't do the preceded thing either. 13:31, March 25, 2015 (UTC)

There you go 00:55, March 26, 2015 (UTC)

The overall phrasing of the article feels a bit choppy, the comma placement in particular. Try reading the whole article out loud to yourself so you can get a feel of how it sounds and then just change it so that it flows better (I'll point out specifics that need it most if you want) 06:46, March 28, 2015 (UTC)

Updated There were many errors too, I'm not sure if I fixed everything 10:38, March 28, 2015 (UTC)

I went through and fixed the comma placement and the flow in a few spots, but in general it still feels awkwardly phrased and the comma placement is still iffy. 02:47, April 1, 2015 (UTC)

Updated I fixed it 06:44, April 4, 2015 (UTC)

Check the spelling/grammar again, and then this should be good! 04:23, April 19, 2015 (UTC)

Updated 05:05, April 19, 2015 (UTC)

Poke 03:32, May 4, 2015 (UTC)

Since there were no comments, and I'm an idiot, I put this up for a vote.

Fire and Ice/Chapter 22 ~ Silver Nomination
Boy I hope this goes well. How many silver nominations can we do at a time? I can't find anything in the guidelines about that. 03:00, April 14, 2015 (UTC)

I don't believe there is a limit. I mean we need as many articles to silver as we can get, so... Anyway check for spelling, and remember to not directly quote from the book in the summary (i.e. dialogue). Otherwise, this looks quite good! 03:46, April 14, 2015 (UTC)

Updated. 04:57, April 14, 2015 (UTC)

Pretty good, but it's a little bit too text-heavy, as in the paragraphs drag on a bit much. Also, keep it in a consistent present tense what else would you expect from me lmao. 12:33, April 20, 2015 (UTC)

Updated. 03:08, May 4, 2015 (UTC)

Since there were no comments, and I'm an idiot, I put this up for a vote.

Dovewing's Silence/Cliffnotes ~ Silver Nomination
Wow that was fun. I'm going to give it another crack with a different book. 06:58, April 15, 2015 (UTC)

This looks pretty good, just spotted a few grammatical errors. I haven't read this one, so someone who has should check it for content. 04:30, April 19, 2015 (UTC)

Updated 05:55, April 19, 2015 (UTC)

Still a lot of grammatical errors, put it through a spellcheck or something maybe? 12:38, April 20, 2015 (UTC)

I've done that already when I wrote it. 03:08, May 4, 2015 (UTC)

Just give it another check, it won't take ten minutes. These things can slip by the spellcheck. 03:31, May 4, 2015 (UTC)

I did it with two different spell checks and I only changed one word. 04:18, May 4, 2015 (UTC)

Since there were no comments, and I'm an idiot, I put this up for a vote.

Cloudstar's Journey/Cliffnotes ~ Silver Nomination
Finally done. Comments? 06:18, April 18, 2015 (UTC)

Same as above 04:36, April 19, 2015 (UTC)

Updated 05:55, April 19, 2015 (UTC)

Since there were no comments, and I'm an idiot, I put this up for a vote.