Warriors Wiki talk:Books

Canon
Hey so I found this page floating around with no project on it, and it seemed more PB oriented than anything so I thought to pop it in here. Ik it's with the category of Role Play Phenomenon, and everything else from there has been deleted, but... couldn't it be revamped? I wanted to pose the question here of whether it should be deleted like the rest of the category, or made a part of PB and revamped/ add new stuff and such. Thoughts?

Yea, I agree with that. It is information for the reader and it should be in PB. 14:55, 4/22/2017 14:55, April 22, 2017 (UTC)ggC1ND3R_STR1P3

Me too. It does contain many PB-related articles. --  17:35, April 29, 2017 (UTC)

I think it should be revamped and made part of PB. 16:14 Sun May 7

It looks like everyone supports the page being revamped. Any other comments? 23:34 Sun May 14

Okay, looks like everyone agrees to revamping it. How should we go about it? I say we keep what's there + add the facts that we now take stuff from Kates blog and Vicky + add cites for the definition of canon from wikipedia, and maybe include a dropdown or some kind of image/graphic/template depicting the series, the canon books, or just something else significant. Just something book related to tie it to PB.

Head's up, I got a nice idea for this, but I'm at work and can't type it up. I'll comment more after my doctor's appointment later. Just letting y'all know to hold off for a little bit so I can chime in.

OKAY a few days late, but sorry, things came up. I think we could revamp the page, but I'm not totally sure what exactly we'd be taking from Kate's blog or Vicky's Facebook pages? Would we take them saying what information is canon and all of that? Because honestly, it wouldn't hurt to at least mention the role play aspect, but mention that this is a place for strict canon information only? Having a definition of what canon is, what counts as a valid canon source, ect, would be an excellent idea. I'm not sure, though, exactly how big you'd want this page to be? We could actually tie it into all projects and just keep it as a general "canonical information" page, or something along those lines... it doesn't have to be just for PB if all projects can benefit from it.

Ah yeah, I meant saying on the page that we take info from Kate's Blog/Vicky's Facebook as canon, and all of that. It'd almost act as a cite guide, even though it isn't really one. I like the idea of tying it into all of the projects, but I also think it should be linked to one project in particular to receive a silver grade. Perhaps that project should be PR instead of PB, though, if we're including more real life aspects than not.

Yes, that's basically what I meant. Although, if we're going to shift this to PR, I would highly suggest having everything ready first, due to PR often being forgotten and too small to get maybe more than a comment or two. A page like this should...really have more than one or two agreeing comments and an actual discussion. Icy is also without a computer for a little while, so I'd suggest also going to poke her once you've decided what to do with it, that way she knows to comment. Does anyone have a rough draft of what they'd want it to look like, or are we going to follow the layout used on other pages?

July FA
Any ideas?

Escape from the Forest?

That would work. ^ 19:19, June 13, 2017 (UTC)

Just gonna pop in and agree, since really only having two comments is probably not the best thing ever. =P PB's always been tiny though, so this isn't anything new. I mean, I could go for a more expanded summary, but that's me liking expansion, expansion, and more expansion, and always thinking there's room to extend an article's length.

CBV? 15:55 Tue Jun 20

Midnight (Book)/Chapter 10 - Silver Nomination
21:10, June 16, 2017 (UTC)

CBV?

Midnight (Book)/Chapter 11 - Silver Nomination
21:10, June 16, 2017 (UTC)

CBV?

Outcast/Chapter 10 ~ Silver Nomination
Man it's been a long time since I've nominated anything. Comments? 21:27 Fri Jun 16

CBV?

Tallstar's Revenge/Chapter 2 - Silver Nomination
Credit to those who worked before me. I just kinda added some stuff to finish it.
 * " Heatherstar gives Aspenfall, Larksplash, and Cloudrunner the new apprentices, much to the tunnelers' anger, as they were promised an apprentice. " I'm a bit confused when you said "much to the tunnelers' anger". From reading on more it made a bit more sense but is it that Aspenfall, Larksplash, and Cloudrunner are the not-tunneler warriors or something? I just found that part kinda confusing.
 * "Plumclaw angrily asks why Heatherstar didn't tell them that they were not getting an apprentice, asking why they didn't respect them. Reedfeather responds, asking if they would have taken it more easily if they had told them." Why is it they, shouldn't it be "she" for Heatherstar? Or is it talking about a different group of cats?  13:34 Mon Jun 19

I'll make the top part more clear, but for the second part the first they is Heatherstar, Reedfeather, and just WindClan in general, I guess, and when Reedfeather says they, he is referring to both him and Heatherstar.

Fixed the first suggestion.

Actually, on the second point of Maple's in the first sentence - would you consider changing 'them' to 'the tunnelers' or something more descriptive? When you explain it, it makes sense, but at first read it isn't clear on who's referring to who. Then, you could make it ' Plumclaw angrily asks 'the WindClan deputy' ' to clarify that. If I remember correctly, it's only the tunnelers that were miffed at Heather and Reed. Also, 'asking' is kinda redundant there too, since it's used two sentences in a row in the same way.

Fixed?? I hope??

Outcast/Chapter 3 - Silver Nomination
Lord, it's been ages since I've done one of these.

I think ya forgot the endspoiler template

Whoopsy. It's been fixed. Can't remember for the life of me where it goes though, so if someone else finds issue with where I put it, they can move it.
 * In this sentence: ":After the ceremony, Hollypaw is approached by Brackenfur, who says that Firestar wants Hollypaw and Brackenfur to join the Clan leader on the evening patrol." both Hollypaw and Brackenfur sound redundant imo, maybe just say 'them' instead of 'Hollypaw and Bracenfur'.
 * In the 3-rd-to-last paragraph, could you link 'lake' to The Lake or The Lake Territories? 13:48 Mon Jun 19

Leafpool's Wish/Chapter 5 - Silver Nomination
Why is Leafpool so problematic + credit to those who worked on it before me.


 * "The tabby acts like that was her motive, but Brightheart declines her offer and leaves her den, leaving Leafpool feeling alone." when it says 'her motive', whose motive is it referring to, Brightheart or Leafpool? Is leafpool asking brightheart to be her apprentice, since Brightheart declines her offer? I found it a little confusing.
 * "Leafpool notices a swelling on the white cat's face, and she asked if the hare had struck her. Thornclaw revealed that it had," idk if it's a mistake and supposed to be "Thornclaw reveals" or if Cloudtail is explaining how Thornclaw told him that earlier,
 * In the 2nd half of the 3rd paragraph, 'Whitepaw' is redundant,
 * Also, throughout the chapter there were a lot of short "choppy" sentences that could have been combined, could you combine some of these? 16:57 Mon Jun 19

Also, Nightcloud and Yellowfang need to be added to the characters list as minor and mentioned. And I'm not sure if Whitepaw dislocating her tail would be an important event... 16:59 Mon Jun 19

Fixed, and I swear I added Nightcloud and Yellowfang, I don't know what happened? Blah

Outcast/Chapter 15 ~ Silver Nomination
Let's see if I can finally finish up the rest of these Outcast chapters. Comments? 18:56 Sun Jun 18

The bold shows corrections. 20:44, June 19, 2017 (UTC)
 * [[ Lionblaze|Lionpaw ]]
 * "The others had finished resting and are getting to their paws, and Lionpaw leaps down from the outcrop to join them."
 * "The cats come to the edge of the forest as the sun sets; ahead, Lionpaw can see a stretch of grass sloping down into a narrow valley, with trees on the far side, and mountains farther beyond."
 * "The two toms come back and settle down to share their prey."
 * "Lionpaw pulls away, embarrassed at the clumsy kill, and pads back to the edge of the trees."
 * "Hollypaw and Jaypaw are all ready to eat (or already ate), and the former wishes they could stay there longer, as there is a lot of prey."
 * "However, his ears prick as he hears Breezepaw's voice, coming from a dip in the ground just beyond the tree branches."
 * "The black apprentice objects that the Clans seemed to have helped them enough already, but his father sighs that Breezepaw will never understand loyalty."

Updated Thanks for pointing all of those out. btw if you would rather edit it and change it yourself I'm fine with that, I'd guess it's annoying to write down all the mistakes. 21:09 Mon Jun 19

Outcast/Chapter 21 ~ Silver Nomination
I wonder where I'm getting the motivation and inspiration to write all of these from lol... Comments? 20:21 Sun Jun 18

Shattered Sky/Chapter 4 - Silver Nomination
Apparently everyone decides to appear on page 49.

Remove the stub template, and could you add a main quote?

Fixed
 * "Alderheart assures Briarlight that Twigpaw would go back and visit," Wouldn't it be come back and visit? I'm not sure, but since they are in the medicine den as that is happening I think it would be come back.
 * "She recites the kits' names, Stemkit, Eaglekit, Plumkit, and Shellkit, and says that they had such beautiful names"  I think there would be a : after names instead of a comma since it's listing the kits but I'm not sure
 * "Alderheart steps outside the medicine cat den and spots Purdy and remembers that Purdy had a bellyache." Purdy is redundant
 * "His vision begins to blur, and he realizes that he is tired, and tells Jayfeather that he is wanted, going over to the apprentices' den to sleep." This sentence is a bit long imo, I think it would sound better if split into 2 sentences.
 * Change 'unknown gray tom' in the characters list to 'hawkwing (Unnamed)'
 * Add Violetpaw and Needletail as a mentioned character
 * Maybe add Pebbleshine as a mentioned character (Unnamed) because it says "Excitement rushes through the ginger tom, thinking that even though Twigpaw and Violetpaw's mother are assumed dead, " 12:54 Tue Jun 20

Fixed

Outcast/Chapter 22 ~ Silver Nomination
22:23 Mon Jun 19


 * Now, stars glitter overhead and Stoneteller stands a tail-length away, back to Jaypaw. I feel like it should be "his back to Jaypaw," so as to not cause confusion.
 * Jaypaw is surprised at how the Tribe of Endless cat recognizes him, but the cat tells him to follow. It's supposed to be Tribe of Endless Hunting.
 * He easily jumps and sees that he is in a silent stone hollow, similar to the ThunderClan camp, except for that its sides are sheer and much taller. "for" isn't needed, and makes the sentence sound weird.
 * The former doesn't answer, and a different, brighter spirit from farther around the pool demands the tabby cat why he brought the apprentice. I feel like there's something missing here, can you add something in?
 * Two cats who bare recent wounds rise and pad around the pool to Jaypaw. "Bear", not "bare"
 * The other wounder cat takes a pace forward, his neck fur bristling, and disagrees that the only way to do that is to make the Tribe more Clan-like, which isn't their wish. "Wounded"
 * He questions where the trespassers are taking prey, where they are fighting with eh Tribe, and where there camp is. "the"

I think that's it. Don't worry, I don't mind doing this.