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Fire and Ice/Chapter 19 ~ Silver Nomination
The beginnings of SandXFire! Couldn't find a quote, sorta a hodge-podge chapter with a lot of different topics... 20:09 Sun Apr 10
 * The very beginning of the summary is confusing, because it doesn't say if Fireheart is in camp, twolegplace, etc. so could you briefly say where he is?
 * In the second-to-last paragraph, "As soon as they get back, Sandpaw immediately tells Bluestar" Having both 'As soon as they get back' and 'immediately' seems unnecssary.
 * Bluestar should be on the minor characters list
 * There were a lot of short, choppy sentences in the summary. You don't need to do this, but I think it would sound much better if you went through the chapter and fixed them.

Updated Ty. I couldn't find very many choppy sentences, but I suppose i can keep looking if I missed them.

Comments before vote? 15:47, April 18, 2016 (UTC)

Crookedstar's Promise/Chapter 4 - Silver Nomination
I hate Rainflower... Comments? 22:18, April 11, 2016 (UTC)

Agreed, she is so cruel and horrible >.< btw, congrats on becoming a head of the apprentice tutorials for PC! 22:33 Mon Apr 11
 * In the 3rd paragraph, "Brambleberry interjects that Stormkit would have to wait longer, because he needs to fill out before becoming one. " I'm confused on what you mean by 'fill out'.
 * In the 5th paragraph, "Stormkit begins to do so, but with his twisted jaw, he finds chewing hard, and he is embarrassed as food dribbles out of the side of his mouth. Realizing how embarrassed Stormkit is of his messy eating, Oakkit finds him a spot where he can finish his meal in private." 'embarassed' sounds a bit redundant.

Updated. Thanks! I reworded both parts - they sounded awkward in any case - but in the case of the first part, I'm not sure if I made it better or worse... 01:24, April 12, 2016 (UTC)

Don't worry, I think it sounds fine now. 02:42 Tue Apr 12

Comments before vote? 15:51, April 18, 2016 (UTC)

Fire and Ice/Chapter 21 ~ Silver Nomination
Fixed this up :P

Clan is not capitalized in the last paragraph. Other than that, great job.

Fixed

The Forgotten Warrior/Chapter 22 ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? It was such a boring chapter; didn't find a quote at first read.

The Sight/Chapter 23 ~ Silver Nomination
I'm almost done with The Sight chapters! Comments? 23:27 Thu Apr 14

The Sight/Chapter 24 ~ Silver Nomination
You guys, can you believe it? This is actually the last of my pre-PB subpages to nominate! The very last one! That took forever to nominate them all, but I feel so accomplished now. Comments? 23:46 Thu Apr 14

Eclipse/Chapter 18 ~ Silver Nomination
Meh, I don't really have anything to say. Comments? 04:12 Sat Apr 16

The Darkest Hour/Chapter 20
Actually... I'm just realizing that this is the first chapter from the original arc that I have written. Comments? 04:12 Sat Apr 16