Warriors Wiki talk:Characters

Morningflower - Silver Nomination
Aahhhh... the thrill of nominating again. :) I went through her article, and expanded history where I could, and found some good quotes. I will still look for some more, but for the time, being it looks fine. 23:12, September 14, 2011 (UTC)

Great work! If you can find more quotes, great, but if not, then thats good. Can the last sentence of Dawn be expanded? Does Morningflower say anything to show that she is satisfied? Sorry, but I don't have the book, so I can't check. 22:11, September 15, 2011 (UTC)

Its been over a week. Are you still working on this? 23:01, September 22, 2011 (UTC)

Three weeks now. Anyone want to take over? 00:54, October 7, 2011 (UTC)

Meep, I shall since I feel like I've been kind of lazy in PC. :P 02:56, October 8, 2011 (UTC)

Also, a quote has been added and Dawn has been expanded. 21:32, October 9, 2011 (UTC)

Can you expand Rising Storm? 19:37, October 11, 2011 (UTC)

Done. Comments? 20:51, October 16, 2011 (UTC)

Could you maybe expand Dark River aswell? 19:53, October 18, 2011 (UTC)

No, I checked through the book and there really isn't anymore detail I can add. 15:52, October 29, 2011 (UTC)

I changed a typo and also added a little to Stalight. I hope you don't mind! Everything else looks fine to me.

Fleck - Silver Nomination
Ok, I had written most of his history a few weeks ago, and I just added a few quotes to his page. This would be my first real nomination since Milkfur was so minor, so, any suggestions? 02:48, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

Could you elaborate more on when Crookedkit leaves? Nice work. 02:53, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

Alright done. I just hope I didn't stray too far away from Fleck himself, and I can always reword it if need be. Thanks =) 02:59, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

Brilliant! I don't mean to hammer you with critiques, but I just noticed that the last quote is not in a dialogue template. Otherwise it's amazing ;) 03:04, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

Well it is but I wasn't exactly sure how to code it. Do I just need to make it in bold? I'm sorry, I should know how to do this ^^; 03:07, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

No, you're fine ;). All you need to do is add a different template which if you search, "Dialogue a-b" it should give you the correct formatting. List the speaker, then their quote and continue. Then when done, scroll all the way to the bottem and put in your reference, and description. 03:19, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

Thank you! Done =) 03:32, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

Looks great! Can you add more to the description of the second quote in the quote section? It doesn't really show his personality unless you tell more about it. 23:13, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

Done, how's that? 21:31, September 30, 2011 (UTC)

Can you expand the history more? 02:12, October 1, 2011 (UTC)

Alright, there were only a few more things I could add. Anything else? 03:43, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

This looks great! Could you add more history on when Crookedjaw remembers Fleck (i.e When he hunts mice and he remembers how Fleck taught him how do it)  Owl   X    G    l    itt    er   4LIFE..    The colors of fall 00:29, October 5, 2011 (UTC) I think the end spoiler tag needs to be below the quotes section. 14:52, October 16, 2011 (UTC)

Ok I'll try but I don't have my book with me right now, and I'll do the spoiler tag thing now. 01:52, October 17, 2011 (UTC)

Can you break up the first paragraph of Crookedstar's Promise under History? DJCandyBud 08:12, October 26, 2011 (UTC)

For the main quote, can you find something that really brings out his personality? Gh ou  lp  eb  bl  e! '''Trick? Or Treat?'''  12:26, October 31, 2011 (UTC)

Snipe ~ Silver Nomination
He is a very minor character, since, of course, he was only mentioned/seen in one or two books. So I thought it would be okay for a Silver Nomination. ^-^ Thoughts? M i  s  t  y  p  e b  b  l  e   00:01, October 2, 2011 (UTC)

Expand A Clan In Need if possible, other than that, it looks good. Maybe see if he is mentioned in any other books? S w  E  e  T  f  L  o  W  e  R  I'm SwEeTeR tH  aN yOu ThInK! 17:31, October 2, 2011 (UTC)

I'll get on to that, but to answer your question, no he is not mentioned or seen in any other books. :)  M  i  s  t  y  p  e b  b  l  e   00:38, October 3, 2011 (UTC)

Since he is a very minor character, I added just a bit more. I then kind of fixed the paragraph to make it kind of flow more. M i  s  t  y  p  e b  b  l  e   01:00, October 3, 2011 (UTC)

Could you add more of a description to the quotes. Looking good! 03:46, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

Done. How is it? 19:48, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

Is it possible for you to break up the first paragraph in the History?  Owl  <font color="#CC0000"><font face="Elephant"> X   <font color="#CC9933"><font face="Elephant"> G   <font color="#CC6633"><font face="Elephant"> l   <font color="#CC3300"><font face="Elephant"> itt   <font color="#CC3333"><font face="Elephant"> er   <font color="#993300"><font face="Elephant">4LIFE..    The colors of fall 00:37, October 5, 2011 (UTC)

Done, is that what you mean? Sorry if its not. xD 19:08, October 5, 2011 (UTC)

Looks nice so far, but to me, it seems like "he/his/him" is used too much, so maybe change it to "Snipe" at least once or twice in each paragraph? Holly dapple798  21:42, October 6, 2011 (UTC)

It looks good, and that was a good comment Hollydapple! S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r  Calling all  the monsters! 23:12, October 6, 2011 (UTC)

Changed it a bit, but I didn't want to overuse Snipe either. How does it look? :3 00:06, October 7, 2011 (UTC)

Can you take out the: "he is mentioned when" 's?  S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r  Calling all  the monsters! 02:45, October 8, 2011 (UTC)

Alright, fixed that. :^-^ 14:48, October 8, 2011 (UTC)

Good, that looks better :)   S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 18:27, October 8, 2011 (UTC)

Could you change it where it says, "Snipe is used to be one of Scourge's closest guards" please? Sorry, I just noticed that. :3 <font color="orange" style="background:Black">Hollydapple798 Life's no fun without a good scare... 21:07, October 10, 2011 (UTC)

Fixed! Thanks for pointing that out, Hollydapple! ^-^  M  i  s  t  y  p  e b  b  l  e   21:17, October 10, 2011 (UTC)

Can you expand A Clan in Need anymore? S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 21:24, October 17, 2011 (UTC)

Possibly flesh out the beginning of it as well. 04:11, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Blargh, sorry for not responding soon enough. >.< Nobody was really comment so I kind of wandered off... Hehheh... I'll do those things as soon as I can!

Gh ou  lp  eb  bl  e! '''Trick? Or Treat?'''  19:23, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

I fixed the first paragraph, though I don't think I can add anymore to A Clan in Need since he was quite a minor character.

Gh ou  lp  eb  bl  e! '''Trick? Or Treat?'''  19:44, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

That's better. 21:59, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

CBV? 22:10, October 25, 2011 (UTC)

Vote is up! (Must've missed this one O.o) 15:53, October 29, 2011 (UTC)

Dewstar ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? S w  E  e  T  f  L  o  W  e  R  I'm SwEeTeR tH  aN yOu ThInK! 23:29, October 3, 2011 (UTC)

Can you add any quotes? Like when he was mentioned by the other cats? 23:57, October 3, 2011 (UTC)

Can you elaborate on the Code of the Clans section? If not, I understand. 00:00, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

Um sure Misty if I find what chapter he's in xD And Cloudy, sorry I really don't think I can xD he's just mentioned that he dies in a battle. I think *Goes to check book*  S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r  Calling all  the monsters! 00:23, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

It's fine if you can't. I don't mind. =) 03:49, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

I did, like by 5 or 6 words, but that's literally all I could expand the article xD  S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r  Calling all  the monsters! 23:20, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

Could you make The History flow better? Sorry if it's just me but it seems to choppy <font color="#CC9900"><font face="Elephant"> Owl  <font color="#CC0000"><font face="Elephant"> X   <font color="#CC9933"><font face="Elephant"> G   <font color="#CC6633"><font face="Elephant"> l   <font color="#CC3300"><font face="Elephant"> itt   <font color="#CC3333"><font face="Elephant"> er   <font color="#993300"><font face="Elephant">4LIFE..    The colors of fall 00:42, October 5, 2011 (UTC) Done. S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r  Calling all  the monsters! 21:20, October 6, 2011 (UTC)

Adding to CBV list. 21:46, October 9, 2011 (UTC)

CBV? 22:18, October 25, 2011 (UTC)

Vote is up! 03:09, October 27, 2011 (UTC)

Brightheart ~ Silver Nomination
I've been working on her and I think she's ready. Comments? 03:32, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

Could you expand Fire and Ice, Forest of Secrets, Moonrise, Sunset, and Secrets of the Clans? It's okay if you can't for some of them. :) 03:46, October 4, 2011 (UTC)S

Swap her name changing ceremony and warrior ceremony around. <font color="#CC9900"><font face="Elephant"> Owl  <font color="#CC0000"><font face="Elephant"> X   <font color="#CC9933"><font face="Elephant"> G   <font color="#CC6633"><font face="Elephant"> l   <font color="#CC3300"><font face="Elephant"> itt   <font color="#CC3333"><font face="Elephant"> er   <font color="#993300"><font face="Elephant">4LIFE..    The colors of fall 00:45, October 5, 2011 (UTC)

How come I should switch it around? And I'll have this done in a day or two. 13:59, October 5, 2011 (UTC)

Keep the ceremonies how they are, Ivy. Those are in the order in which they happened. Can you extend Dark River, if possible? 22:14, October 8, 2011 (UTC)

I thought the name of the ceremony had to have the name of the cats name before they got their new name, thats probally why I got confused. <font color="#CC9900"><font face="Elephant"> Owl  <font color="#CC0000"><font face="Elephant"> X   <font color="#CC9933"><font face="Elephant"> G   <font color="#CC6633"><font face="Elephant"> l   <font color="#CC3300"><font face="Elephant"> itt   <font color="#CC3333"><font face="Elephant"> er   <font color="#993300"><font face="Elephant">4LIFE..    The colors of fall 04:35, October 9, 2011 (UTC)

She was named Lostface by Bluestar. Then, later one, Firestar renamed her Brightheart. The order it's in now is just fine. =) 04:40, October 9, 2011 (UTC)

Got it. And I think I'm almost done, guys. 14:11, October 10, 2011 (UTC)

Can you expand Sign of the Moon? 16:43, October 10, 2011 (UTC)

Done. I tried. 04:06, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

CBV? 22:32, October 25, 2011 (UTC)

Vote is up! 03:09, October 27, 2011 (UTC)

Lilyfur ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r  Calling all  the monsters! 00:28, October 5, 2011 (UTC)

Could you add another quote? <font color="#CC9900"><font face="Elephant"> Owl  <font color="#CC0000"><font face="Elephant"> X   <font color="#CC9933"><font face="Elephant"> G   <font color="#CC6633"><font face="Elephant"> l   <font color="#CC3300"><font face="Elephant"> itt   <font color="#CC3333"><font face="Elephant"> er   <font color="#993300"><font face="Elephant">4LIFE..    The colors of fall 00:49, October 5, 2011 (UTC) Done, and I added descriptions for the second and third quote. S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r  Calling all  the monsters! 21:14, October 6, 2011 (UTC)

Is there a better main quote you could give her? Like something describing her personality, or something. Also, make a space between the two quotes in the section. 01:44, October 11, 2011 (UTC)

Could you add more detail to the last sentence of CotC? 17:27, October 11, 2011 (UTC)

Nope, those are the only things that are longer than 3 words she said. I added the space, and I'll detail in a sec. (Sorry if I sound confusing at on epoint, I can't think straight, casue someone ran over my kitty about an hour ago :/ )   S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 00:20, October 12, 2011 (UTC)

Detailed. S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 00:32, October 12, 2011 (UTC)

Anything else? S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 23:47, October 16, 2011 (UTC)

Nope. CBV? 22:34, October 25, 2011 (UTC)

Vote is up! 03:09, October 27, 2011 (UTC)

Jake ~ Silver Nomination
Comments <font color="#CC9900"><font face="Elephant"> Owl  <font color="#CC0000"><font face="Elephant"> X   <font color="#CC9933"><font face="Elephant"> G   <font color="#CC6633"><font face="Elephant"> l   <font color="#CC3300"><font face="Elephant"> itt   <font color="#CC3333"><font face="Elephant"> er   <font color="#993300"><font face="Elephant">4LIFE..    The colors of fall  01:25, October 5, 2011 (UTC)

Sorry, but you'll need to find more quotes. The last quote in the quote section is the same as the main quote, and the second-to-last quote doesn't show his personality. Also add a description to his first quote in the quote section. 22:12, October 5, 2011 (UTC)

Thats okay, but when I searched Bluestar's Prophecy harpercollins I could only see sentences when Bluefur was rememering Pinestar joining the kittypets and wondering if he was seeing Jake, and I'm not sure if those show his personality. I added a description for the first quote. <font color="#CC9900"><font face="Elephant"> Owl  <font color="#CC0000"><font face="Elephant"> X   <font color="#CC9933"><font face="Elephant"> G   <font color="#CC6633"><font face="Elephant"> l   <font color="#CC3300"><font face="Elephant"> itt   <font color="#CC3333"><font face="Elephant"> er   <font color="#993300"><font face="Elephant">4LIFE..    The colors of fall 06:37, October 7, 2011 (UTC) Would you mind adding spaces between the paragraphs in the Bluestar's Prophecy section? Thanks. <font color="orange" style="background:Black">Hollydapple798 Life's no fun without a good scare... 21:02, October 10, 2011 (UTC)

Did Bluestar's Prophecy spacing <font color="#CC9900"><font face="Elephant"> Owl  <font color="#CC0000"><font face="Elephant"> X   <font color="#CC9933"><font face="Elephant"> G   <font color="#CC6633"><font face="Elephant"> l   <font color="#CC3300"><font face="Elephant"> itt   <font color="#CC3333"><font face="Elephant"> er   <font color="#993300"><font face="Elephant">4LIFE..    The colors of fall 05:38, October 12, 2011 (UTC) I have suggestions for quotes if you still need them. 21:56, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Oh yes please 22:39, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

1."It sounds like hard work, what do you do when it's cold? Don't you freeze?" - Jake to Bluepaw when he is pestering her with questions page 196

2." You don't live around here. Are you one of those forest cats?" Jake to Bluepaw when he starts talking to her. Page 196

You only need 3 quotes and he already has 3 (including the main one) so just pick one of those ;) 23:29, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Thank you Sweetflower, that helped a lot. I already had the second quote you suggested there, so I just added the first one. 23:19, October 22, 2011 (UTC)

Could you find a reference for the first trivia? 17:34, October 24, 2011 (UTC)

Your welcome Owl. I'm always happy to help, I could help you with that first reference too. 18:19, October 25, 2011 (UTC)

Thanks but no thanks. I already added it in. 05:39, October 26, 2011 (UTC)

Can you add another reference in the first listed trivia? DJCandyBud 08:16, October 26, 2011 (UTC)

Added another reference 05:53, October 27, 2011 (UTC)

Can you make Bluestar's Prophecy a bit more? There are a lot of periods when they could be commas. (Hope that made sense xD)  Gh  ou  lp  eb  bl  e! '''Trick? Or Treat?'''  12:30, October 31, 2011 (UTC)

Stormkit (SC) ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? 21:41, October 11, 2011 (UTC)

Looks good. Although I think we should wait for Beyond the Code so her history is bigger. 21:45, October 11, 2011 (UTC)

Looks good. Maybe break up The Rescue <font color="#CC9900"><font face="Elephant"> Owl  <font color="#CC0000"><font face="Elephant"> X   <font color="#CC9933"><font face="Elephant"> G   <font color="#CC6633"><font face="Elephant"> l   <font color="#CC3300"><font face="Elephant"> itt   <font color="#CC3333"><font face="Elephant"> er   <font color="#993300"><font face="Elephant">4LIFE..    The colors of fall 05:32, October 12, 2011 (UTC)

There's no reason to wait. Firekit got nominated as well, Silver. xD 05:35, October 12, 2011 (UTC)

And guess who nominated them? xD Definitely not me. :P jk. I broke up the Rescue, and expanded it, since I've actually read the book now. Any other comments? 21:36, October 13, 2011 (UTC)

It looks great to me so far. Maybe say "she was nameless" or something along the lines of that at the beginning of the The Rescue section instead of "Stormkit was nameless". It seems a little self-contradictory the way it is. :P <font color="orange" style="background:Black">Hollydapple798 Happy Halloween! 19:45, October 16, 2011 (UTC)

Done. 22:32, October 25, 2011 (UTC)

Maybe you could separate the first listed trivia to two different listed trivia's? i.e, do this maybe: And you could also change the wording around a bit, such as: Instead of this: That way it makes it more specific to other people. DJCandyBud 08:25, October 26, 2011 (UTC)
 * (She is named after Sandstorm, the prefix of her name being Sandstorm's suffix. <sup class="reference" id="cite_ref-ss186_0-1" sizcache="589" sizset="276">[1]
 * Her sister, Firekit and her brother, Harrykit, are named after Firestar and Harry. <sup class="reference" id="cite_ref-ss186_0-2" sizcache="589" sizset="277">[1]
 * She has kittypet blood, as her father is a daylight warrior, cats who go to the gorge during the day and stay with their Twoleg owners at night.<sup class="reference" id="cite_ref-sd49_2-0" sizcache="589" sizset="280">[3] )
 * Her sister, Firekit, is named after Firestar and her brother, Harrykit, is named after Harry. <sup class="reference" id="cite_ref-ss186_0-2" sizcache="589" sizset="277">[1]
 * Her sister, Firekit and her brother, Harrykit, are named after Firestar and Harry. <sup class="reference" id="cite_ref-ss186_0-2" sizcache="589" sizset="277">[1]

Ivystar ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 13:48, October 15, 2011 (UTC)

Find another quote if possible, and see if you can elaborate on Code of the Clans a bit. 03:26, October 16, 2011 (UTC)

Could you change "some WindClan kits that fell into the gorge" to "the three WindClan kits that fell into the gorge", or something like that? And could you say "...she wondered if some cat has fallen ill", to "Ivystar wondered if some cat had fallen ill", in the second paragraph? I thought you meant Graywing the first time I read that. XD But really, good job so far. :) <font color="orange" style="background:Black">Hollydapple798 Happy Halloween! 19:40, October 16, 2011 (UTC)

Done   S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 20:38, October 17, 2011 (UTC)

Is it possible for you to add a description for the last two quotes? 22:43, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Done. 23:16, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

I think you should try to reword the following sentence: "She permits Graywing to take a patrol out to look for the dead kits although the information that the patrol will look for the dead kits is unknown to her." I personally think it's a contradictory statement. Also, the captions for the second and third quotes under the Quotes section look too similar to me; I think that some variation would be better. But it's a minor issue, so I'm not sure if you should change it.

Rowanfur~Silver nomination
Excuse me. I may be somehow doing this wrong. xD I'm nominating him because his page isn't a stub and it seems all the info that can be added on him is added. I cna't find any good quotes for him, but his main quote looks good. . 01:24, October 17, 2011 (UTC)

Bahaha your not doing it wrong ;) Can you expand SkyClan's Destiny at all?   S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 22:58, October 17, 2011 (UTC)

I'll see if i can. :) . 22:59, October 17, 2011 (UTC)

Ok! S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 23:09, October 17, 2011 (UTC)

Hm, I've fixed some sentences and at elast attemped to expand, but there isn't much to expand, he doesn't appear very often. :3 . 23:10, October 17, 2011 (UTC)

That's better ;)   S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 23:42, October 17, 2011 (UTC)

Looks great! Can you find one or two more quotes? 19:28, October 18, 2011 (UTC)

Hm, I looked through the pages where he talk and appears, but nothing is good enough for a quote. Unless, "Of course." Is a good quote. O.o. 22:14, October 18, 2011 (UTC)

Well, the quotes don't have to be spoken by him. They can always be from a narrator or a dialogue quote. The transitions between paragraphs, like "He is not seen for a while" or "he first appears". Could you possibly rephrase those sentences so you don't include those words? If not, it's fine. Nice work! 00:40, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Other than that it looks a lot better than when you started! S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 23:03, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Thanks guys! And I've fixed everything you stated, Atelda. . 23:36, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Your welcome, I think there's basically nothing wrong with it. S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 23:43, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

You should fix this sentence: "He comes back to camp with eight other warriors, he is injured shredded ears."

Brightspirit ~ Silver Nomination
A special character such as Brightspirit shouldn't be left unnoticed. Comments? 23:20, October 17, 2011 (UTC)

Very true Cloudy. Can you expand Brightspirit's Mercy at all? It looks kinda ... stubby :P If not than it looks really good. Very good choice. S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 23:49, October 17, 2011 (UTC)

I'm going to rewrite that entire section, actually. 23:54, October 17, 2011 (UTC)

Done, and now I'm going to add quotes. I just noticed the article was missing them. I'm blind, I tell you. 01:06, October 18, 2011 (UTC)

Quotes have been added. There isn't much from Long Shadows to put, so most of mine came from Brightspirit's Mercy. 01:30, October 18, 2011 (UTC)

You don't have to, but I think the article would be better off without the last quote as it doesn' t tell much if anything at all about Brightspirit's personality. Also, could you possibly lead into Long Shadows a bit better rather than "first seen". It's okay if you can't, sometimes it's unavoidable. :P Hehe, epic work! 23:23, October 18, 2011 (UTC)

Well, the only reason the last quote is in there is because it plays a key part in Long Shadows. If you feel I should remove it, then I shall. Also, I fixed the first sentence, although I think I made it worse. 23:28, October 18, 2011 (UTC)

I think it looks fine like that ;) Very good job Cloudskye.   S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 23:33, October 18, 2011 (UTC)

I honestly think it should be deleted as although it plays a key part in Long Shadows, it doesn't describe the character's personality very well. 22:28, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Can you add another reference in the introduction? DJCandyBud 08:32, October 26, 2011 (UTC)

Wait, what? No. I think the introduction is fine how it is. Not all characters have two or three refs in the intro. 14:50, October 26, 2011 (UTC)

Could you mention who "they" are in the first sentence, after it mentions Brightspirit visiting StarClan in the Long Shadows section? <font color="orange" style="background:Black">Hollydapple798 Happy Halloween! 15:26, October 27, 2011 (UTC)

It says who "they" are. StarClan. 15:46, October 27, 2011 (UTC)

Sorry, extreme fail on my part. XD I meant mention the StarClan cats that were present by name. I know Jaypaw, Bluestar, and Whitestorm were there, but I don't know if there were any others. <font color="orange" style="background:Black">Hollydapple798 Happy Halloween! 18:57, October 27, 2011 (UTC)

I personally liked how it was, but, whatever. >.>;;; 21:53, October 28, 2011 (UTC)

This sentence: "Her and her parents, Braveheart and Shiningheart, are treated with great respect within StarClan." should obviously be changed to "She and her parents, Braveheart and Shiningheart, are treated with great respect within StarClan."

Wow. That was kinda snobby. Next time, be a little nicer about it. 01:41, October 31, 2011 (UTC)

I apologize if I sounded a little pompous and irritating. I didn't realize it until now, and I will consider your advice. Everything looks nice except that in the third quote, one of Brightspirit's sentences is not punctuated.

It wasn't advice. I was telling you to be nicer. Being snobby doesn't go far here. Also, I fixed the issue you addressed. 02:01, October 31, 2011 (UTC)

Leopardfoot ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? Dew st  ar  Don't judge me!   23:07, October 18, 2011 (UTC)

Expand Crookedstar's Promise.   S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 23:32, October 18, 2011 (UTC)

Could you also expand Code of the Clans? 18:09, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Ok guys. How do i do that?? Sorry! Dew st  ar  Don't judge me!   21:35, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

You either add more detail or more history. Also, could you possibly find a better main quote? Awesome. 21:45, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

No, you switch out the main quote for something else. Preferably a quote that shows her personality. 22:02, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Basically what Atelda said. ;)   S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 22:12, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Well i don`t have Bluestar`s prophecy and Crookedstar`s promise and i don`t no if Leopardfoot is even in Code of the clans -_- Im trying my best but still i no that Leopardfoot has Pinestar`s kits but i don`t no what Leopardfoot is like nothing explains it???????? And i dont no what expand means like do i take parts from the book? -_-  Dew  st  ar  Don't judge me!   22:43, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Woah, ok, let's slow down. First, it doesn't matter if you have neither of the books, that's what Harper Collins Browse Inside is for ;). Second, If she is mentioned in Code of the Clans, it would be mentioned in her article. Third, If you want to know what she is like, just read her article, most of the time, the stuff in an article, shows her personality, by her actions and words. Fourth, Expand means to make it bigger, so basically, it's detailing it ;) Fifth, you can take parts from the book, and add it too her article if it's nessicary. You try to avoid taking direct quotes, meaning typing word for word of what she says. I hope this helped. S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 22:54, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

So do i go into her articale and detail it more??/ i dont get it cuz im getting frustrated  Dew  st  ar  Don't judge me!   14:24, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Yes, but first you need what she is saying in front of you. Than you take the information from it and detail it. Please don't get frusterated, it get's easier, but only if you let it. S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 20:04, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

I suggest you check out the guidelines. 22:28, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Dew, is this still being worked on? It's been over a week. 15:59, October 29, 2011 (UTC)

Molepaw ~Silver Nomination
Anybody know some places he appears? I looked int he books he was in, but I dont know the page numbers, so I cant look into great detail at the moment. Also, if I knew there might be a chance I can add a quote or two. Other than that, his page looks good. . 00:10, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Could you really elaborate on when it's said "he makes minor appearences"? Or possibly add more detail and rephrase the sentence to avoid those phrases^. Awesome so far! 00:43, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Could you add a few quotes (including a main one). 21:30, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Arg. *Facepalm* :3 Did you read my paragrpah up there? I quote: "I dont know the page numbers, so I cant look into great detail at the moment. Also, if I knew there might be a chance I can add a quote or two." I don't know so i can't at the moment. . 22:27, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Hmm, maybe you can detail it with words, instead of stuff used exactly in the book. Like changing the words around, thus expanding the sentence. S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 22:43, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

I tried doing that once or twice, but users kept reverting it. . 22:48, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Oh, well it was worth a try. Maybe they think it was unnessicary, which means you might as well wait to get the book(s) before you expand or detail it. So that your not wasting your time adding and undoing what they are doing. Thanks, for trying! S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 22:58, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

I have the books, I have the whole series, in fact. -- I just don't know the pages where Molekit/paw is exacily mentioned. :3 . 23:17, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Oh, silly me :3. Maybe you could skim through the book? S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 23:27, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

I've already tried that, but if he appears minorly, I doubt i'd be able to spot it. :S. 23:35, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Hmm, true, we'll maybe when your not busy, you could re-read the whole book :P So you can find it :)   S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 23:41, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Is it absoulutly nessecary? O.o I'm already reading about six books. xD. 05:45, October 20, 2011 (UTC)

No, it's not, but I just thought if you had free time on your hands you could ;)   S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 17:49, October 20, 2011 (UTC)

Thicken out Fading Echoes some, possibly add in more details to the minor appearance. 04:14, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Is the style template ment to be there when you're nominating it? DJCandyBud 08:37, October 26, 2011 (UTC)

In the Fading Echoes section, it says, "...about what they argued about." Take out the first "about", and maybe un-italicize the "what". <font color="orange" style="background:Black">Hollydapple798 Happy Halloween! 15:22, October 27, 2011 (UTC)

The style template is only a guideline telling the reader or such that this article needs work. Once voted and if made silver, then I'll delete it. 15:55, October 29, 2011 (UTC)

Fuzzypelt ~ Silver Nomination
Fuzzypelt's page is pretty good. Comments? 13:28, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Looks great! But the last paragraph in BP could use a little more deatail if possible. :) . 13:31, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Just if you can expand all of BP than your good. Other than that, it looks good! S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 23:06, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

I just expanded his history and put it in detail. How's this? 11:50, October 20, 2011 (UTC)

Could you take out and refrase this direct quote: "We'll defend the camp with our lives, if necessary" Thanks,   S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 21:32, October 20, 2011 (UTC)

Expand BP more. It still looks as if it could be expanded a lot. And I think the main quote should be switched with this quote: "From now on you'll be called Patchpaw, and I give you Fuzzypelt as your mentor. Listen to him carefully because, though he is young, he is clever enough to teach you how to use your courage wisely." 11:01, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Hm, I like your suggestion Rainwillow. S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 20:00, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

The bottem quote should be changed because it does not describe him as well as another quote you could probably find. Also, as I was looking in the references, there are several references that do not specify which book. I suggest you correct those references too. ;) 22:28, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Can you add another reference for the introduction? DJCandyBud 08:40, October 26, 2011 (UTC)

I changed the quote. 02:36, October 27, 2011 (UTC)

Can you take out the direct quote: "We'll defend the camp with our lives, if necessary" and re-word it so it isn't a direct quote? 15:57, October 29, 2011 (UTC)

Did it ever say why he had to move into the elders den early? If so, add that in. ^-^  Gh  ou  lp  eb  bl  e! '''Trick? Or Treat?'''  12:07, October 31, 2011 (UTC)

I wanted to let you know
I have been nominated to be a SW! S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 20:16, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Really Sweet! That is totally awesome :)  Dew  st  ar  Don't judge me!   21:42, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

That's wonderful, Sweetflower, but seriously, you don't need to announce it on the whole talk page beca. use people KNOW. So seriously. 01:10, October 20, 2011 (UTC)

Yeah. All you have to do is place it on your user page or something. XD 01:17, October 20, 2011 (UTC)

Sorry, just excited :P   S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 17:47, October 20, 2011 (UTC)

Oatwhisker (TC) ~ Silver Nomination
If I can't comment properly on nominations, i'll just be one of the people making them ~ Anyway, this is my third and final nomination I can have up at the moment. He has plenty of quotes, and his section is plentiful. . 18:24, October 20, 2011 (UTC)

Who says you can't comment well? - Anyways, can you fix his dialogue quote, and possibly detail his appearance. S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 21:13, October 20, 2011 (UTC)

Rainwillow already has nominated this one. Sorry. 01:29, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

When I nominated it it said Bronze Status. o3o Oh well. Theres still plenty I can go nominate. . 03:20, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

It was bronze status because it was still up for vote. 22:28, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Lapping Wave ~ Silver Nomination
THIS one isn't being voted for or nominated, and it's bronze. And no, I didn't go over my three nomination limit, becuase Oatwhisker was already silver statused. :3 . 03:37, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

If not can you try to expand ''Sign of the Moon. S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters!'' 19:57, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Looks pretty nice so far! Maybe break up the SoTM section up into two paragraphs, after, "He begins to wail along with the rest of his siblings because she runs out of milk and they are still hungry." <font color="orange" style="background:Black">Hollydapple798 Happy Halloween! 15:06, October 27, 2011 (UTC)

Shiningheart ~ Silver Nomination
I feel the need to fix up all three of these articles, as they're for three wonderful people. Comments? 04:28, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

I rewrote both sections in her history, and expanded as much as I could. 05:42, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Same as below, her page looks awesome. :P 10:55, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

I see nothing wrong with this article, you rewrote it very well! 21:44, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Shouldn't her article include a family tree? 22:28, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

I found the template so I just added it in. ;) 23:22, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Excellent. I can see nothing wrong except that "Both her and Braveheart are shown to be very proud of their daughter, despite the troubles that each cat faces, including Jaypaw." should be "Both she and Braveheart are shown to be very proud of their daughter, despite the troubles that each cat faces, including Jaypaw."

Fixed. 01:45, October 31, 2011 (UTC)

Braveheart ~ Silver Nomination
Same as Brightspirit and Shiningheart. Comments? 04:29, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

I rewrote both sections in his history, and expanded as much as I could. 05:43, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

The page looks awesome. It looks better than before. :D 10:53, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Again, I see nothing wrong with his article, good rewriting :) 21:47, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Shouldn't his article include a family tree even if it's small? 22:28, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

I think it should, if he has family that we know of, it's still a family, therefor he should have a tree. 23:23, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

I found the template, so I just added it in. :P 23:22, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Once again, "Him and his family are treated with great respect and honor among the ranks of StarClan, and are welcomed warmly by Whitestorm and Bluestar." should be "He and his family are treated with great respect and honor among the ranks of StarClan, and are welcomed warmly by Whitestorm and Bluestar." Also, for the third quote's caption, "then" should be "than", because you're introducing the second element in comparison and you're not saying something is after another.

Fixed. >.>;;; 01:48, October 31, 2011 (UTC)

My apologies if my lengthy explanations sound arrogant. If you'd like, I can try to keep them shorter next time. I can't see anything else wrong with this.

Prickleface ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? 19:30, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Are there any more quotes that can be added? Remember, they don't just have to be someone speaking, if they show personality. 19:34, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Done. 20:22, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Are there any more quotes that you could use? 21:50, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Probably, I'll search the book for some. 22:06, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Thanks, if you need any suggestions I'll try to find some. 23:36, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

I added one quote, I couldn't find any others. 14:33, October 22, 2011 (UTC)

One more is better than no more. 14:51, October 22, 2011 (UTC)

I reread the whole book, and I couldn't find any quotes. 12:28, October 26, 2011 (UTC)

You should change the sentence "After all the medicine cats dream the same message, and they come to a decision about what must be done." to either "After all the medicine cats dream the same message, they come to a decision about what must be done.", omitting the "and", or also as "All the medicine cats dream the same message, and they come to a decision about what must be done."

Rosetail ~ Silver Nomination
I've been working on this for a while I guess. Comments? 23:27, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Can you re-write these direct quotes because your supposed to avoid direct quotes: "brave Rosetail, and that their kits were safe thanks to Yellowfang." (In the Into The Wild section) and "Poppydawn! No! Don't leave me!" (In Cats of the Clan section) 23:34, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Expand BP please. 02:15, October 22, 2011 (UTC)

Done, I also realised I forgot the main quote, so I added that in. 03:51, October 23, 2011 (UTC)

Wow, it looks great! :D 03:55, October 23, 2011 (UTC)

Thanks XD! 07:41, October 25, 2011 (UTC)

Expand Secrets of the Clans please. 18:16, October 25, 2011 (UTC)

Expanded Secrets of the Clans. 05:44, October 27, 2011 (UTC)

Put what codes she was mentioned in, it doesn't say in the Code of the Clans section. 17:21, October 29, 2011 (UTC)

Can you make the Code of the Clans section flow a bit more? Gh ou  lp  eb  bl  e! '''Trick? Or Treat?'''  12:01, October 31, 2011 (UTC)

Greenflower ~ Silver Nomination
I expanded her history and added all of the quotes relevant to her. Comments? 10:04, October 24, 2011 (UTC)

I fixed a few mistakes. Looks great though! 11:26, October 25, 2011 (UTC)

I added a couple links. Other then that minor issue, this looks excellent for such a minor character. Job well done, Speckle. 15:53, October 27, 2011 (UTC)

Should the "c" in "half-clan" be capitalized in the second paragraph? Otherwise, looks nice!

Done 16:08, October 31, 2011 (UTC)

Pip ~ Silver Nomination
I expanded the history and added in the history for the allegiance-only books. 22:45, October 25, 2011 (UTC)

Is the information on him barking at cats and chasing them necessary to put in the introduction? DJCandyBud 08:48, October 26, 2011 (UTC)

Are there any narrator quotes you could use? 13:06, October 27, 2011 (UTC)

Instead of saying, "There have also been mentions of a dog chasing cats in the other books, which most likely was him," in the Dark River section, do you think you could make a trivia section, and add that in there? That way the Dark River section would be more relevant to his appearance in DR. <font color="orange" style="background:Black">Hollydapple798 Happy Halloween! 15:01, October 27, 2011 (UTC)

I fixed the trivia thing, but narrator quotes about him don't really describe his personality... 16:21, October 31, 2011 (UTC)

Pinestar ~ Silver Nomination
I expanded the history a lot. Comments? 22:57, October 25, 2011 (UTC)

Expand CP if you can please. 00:23, October 26, 2011 (UTC)

I already did...I don't have the book right now. 00:30, October 26, 2011 (UTC)

Does he have a better quote for a main quote? 04:08, October 31, 2011 (UTC)

I don't know, but I'll try to find one. 16:27, October 31, 2011 (UTC)

Onestar - Silver Nomination
Only certain parts of the history needed to be expanded. Since it was the content drive, I fixed what was needed. DON'T tell me to expand Dawn, because I will hurt you. Comments? 23:39, October 28, 2011 (UTC)

His page is really good, expand Fire and Ice a bit. 15:42, October 29, 2011 (UTC)

Outcast too please! 16:13, October 29, 2011 (UTC)

If possible could you expand Long Shadows and Sunset? 21:35, October 29, 2011 (UTC)

I couldn't really expand POT, but I was able to expand Fire and Ice. 21:45, October 30, 2011 (UTC)

Is there a way you could expand Fading Echoes? Maybe he said something important when he was "unconvinced." But I'm not sure. 04:06, October 31, 2011 (UTC)

I'm Still Here
I'm still here, everyone. I needed a hiatus, and I apologize for my absence. Now that I'm in high-school, I can't be on as often as I once was, but I promise to try my hardest to edit at least once a day. I feel really bad for abandoning you guys for a while, but I'm done with that. I'm going to be more active, okay? :) 13:42, October 29, 2011 (UTC)

We all know how hard it is when school starts, it's not your fault you couldn't get on. You didn't quite "abandon" us, you couldn't help it. Your back and active and that's what matters most :) So welcome back Moonflight. 15:16, October 29, 2011 (UTC)

Don't worry Moonflight. Welcome back, and you didn't abandon us anyway. 15:41, October 29, 2011 (UTC)

Yeah, it's hard being on the wiki everyday, once school starts. There's homework, and projects, plus real life stuff. But don't worry Moonflight, everything's still fine on here. Welcome back. :D 06:47, October 30, 2011 (UTC)

We understand, Moonflight. Everyone here has lives of their own. Welcome back. ;) 01:44, October 31, 2011 (UTC) Shadewing

Its okay, Moonflight. I haven't been the most active this year either, since higher grades bring more homework. Welcome back! :) 16:17, October 31, 2011 (UTC)

Hazelfoot - Join Request
Hello, I would like to join Project:Characters. Thanks!

Welcome, I'll add you in momentarily. Please look at the FAQ for any questions. 23:17, October 30, 2011 (UTC)

zinniakit- join request
can i join 08:26, October 31, 2011 (UTC)

Of course, please look at the FAQ if you need any help. Welcome! 12:03, October 31, 2011 (UTC)

Swallowtail ~ Silver Nomination
Yes, in fact, I am still alive. Sorry for my sudden absense, but I still have a lot school work and I'm on the PCA to. But here I am! I edited her page a bit more, to make it flow and fixed some errors. What do you think? Gh ou  lp  eb  bl  e! '''Trick? Or Treat?'''  12:37, October 31, 2011 (UTC)