Warriors Wiki talk:Books

June FA
Can't wait for school to be over, and also I need to lose weight for summer. ¯\_(ツ)_/¯ So, what should June's FA be? I know it's a tad early, but eh. I was thinking Dovewing's Silence or Goosefeather's Curse. Comments? 15:30, May 1, 2016 (UTC)

I think either is fine. If I had to pick though I'd probably say DS because it came out a while ago. But again I'm fine with either of them. 15:34 Sun May 1

Yeah let's do DS

Yeah I agree with DS.Stealth f🔥re ❤Warriors Forever!❤  21:48, May 1, 2016 (UTC)

I agree with Dovewing's Silence too.

Comments before vote? 18:02, May 15, 2016 (UTC)

The Apprentice's Quest/Chapter 4 ~ Silver Nomination
Comments?

There's quite a few fragmented sentences in the 1st paragraph, could you go through and fix them? Just a few more things, I'd also recommend going through and just combining a few sentences, which should help with some minor redundancy issues.
 * "He" sounds a little redundant in the 2nd paragraph towards the middle
 * There's also some fragments in the last 2 paragraphs of the summary
 * Would you mind detailing the last paragraph?
 * Might also wanna read through for some past-tense stuff too

Fixed

Could you go through one more time for fragmented sentences? There's quite a few particularly in the last paragraph, as well as spread through the summary

Fixed Hopefully, I didn't miss anything.

There are some short, 'choppy', sentences in the last paragraph, could you try combining some of those? Also, I don't know if Sparkpaw could be considered a major character for this chapter, since she didn't do much, but that's your choice. 21:00 Sun May 8

Still working? 01:05, May 22, 2016 (UTC)

Russian Cover
So there's this russian cover that's for both Into the Wild and Fire and Ice. Does it go on both gallery pages? Sorry that I'm so lost and don't know lol

If it's used for both books, then I would think it should be displayed on both pages, with some kind of note saying it's for both Into the Wild and Fire and Ice.

But there are lots of books like that that combine all the books in one of the series or something and they don't get covers? imo I think it shouldn't be in the gallery, but that's just what I think. 14:24 Fri May 6

Idk, I think it needs to go somewhere but I don't know where. I'm gonna go look into if there are any other ITW and FAI combos, to see if we could look into a section somewhere or something.

It could possibly go in the box set page. 17:43, May 6, 2016 (UTC)

There is a German combo too. And I think putting it in the box set is a good idea, and it could go in the book's publication history too. 18:00 Fri May 6

So what are we doing with this? Box set and publication page? 18:02, May 15, 2016 (UTC)

Forest of Secrets/Chapter 13 ~ Silver Nomination
Quite short though so is the chapter. It is also all that is there.

The summary is very short, choppy, and vague. Can you expand it a decent bit, because I've written chapters with shorter lengths than this and the summaries are still longer. I'd also say don't start the chapter with 'The chapter starts off'; it should start 'Fireheart wakes up Graystripe in the warriors' den' or something like that.

Okay, updated a bit, though it still seems somewhat short.

Still too short. Forest of Secret's  summary Chpater 10 is easily twice the length, even though it's a shorter chapter than this so the summary still needs to be expanded.

Updated (Do I need to add every single detail? -Just wondering-)

Nah, it looks fine in length now pretty much. Adding every single detail is quite tedious -- it only needs to have amply nore than the cliff notes and be descriptive

Any more comments?

"Fireheart also feels a stab of guilt as he knows, he is betraying his Clan." Can you get rid of the comma? It's not needed.

"The young, white furred kit pleads to them to allow him to come, upset when Graystripe refuses that he needs to be an apprentice in order to leave camp." Why not "The young, white furred kit pleads to them to allow him to come, becoming upset when Graystripe tells him that he needs to be an apprentice in order to leave camp." Right now it seems as if he's already upset when Graystripe didn't tell him anything.

"Cloudkit continues pestering them, until Fireheart finally convinces him by telling him they were on a private mission. The kit is astonished, and he agrees to leave, when Fireheart promises to give him hunting practice. Finally Fireheart and Graystripe leave camp. Graystripe wonders if Cloudkit will tell the whole clan, but Fireheart decides to worry about that later." Add what he's doing to pester them - I know that he doesn't sit there for an hour begging them. Also, capitalize Clan.

Maybe you can see if you can add a bit more detail? I think it could definitely use some more. 01:02, May 22, 2016 (UTC)

Forest of Secrets/Chapter 6 ~ Silver Nomination
Comments?
 * It might be me but this sentence in the 2nd paragraph: "they would've never lived to see sunrise if no one cared for them." sounds a bit strange, I think it's missing a word before sunrise but it could just be me.
 * Maybe link crow in the 3rd paragraph? Also in the 3rd paragraph, in this sentence: "Fireheart feels something prick in his mind, and he feels what Graypool just said should mean something to him," 'feels' sounds redundant imo.
 * This sentence, "Bluestar stiffens, and growls to Fireheart that that is over because she has reasons enough satisfied it isn't true." sounds a bit off with the 'enough reasons satisfied'.
 * The last paragraph is quite long, maybe make a new paragraph when Fireheart leaves the den? 23:53 Wed May 11

UpdatedTy, and I think the one in the 2nd paragraph sounds okay but that's just me so I'll wait on that

Comments before vote? 18:02, May 15, 2016 (UTC)

Forest of Secrets/Chapter 11 ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? this is my fav book out of all of them

I don't think there's anything to critique here, great job!

Fire and Ice/Chapter 17 ~ Silver Nomination
Second to last FAI chapter that needs to become silver! Comments? now there's only chapter 25 left

Fire and Ice/Chapter 25 ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? last FAI chapter

Forest of Secrets/Chapter 8 ~ Silver Nomination
Welp, that's another nomination and by far the looooooongest article I had to type out, think I did that...for an hour? Oh well. Comments? Also, the quote breaks my heart :P

There's some past tense in the 1st paragraph, and also 'He' is redundant in the second paragraph.

Reuploaded