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Tallstar's Revenge/Chapter 43 ~ Silver Nomination
Credits to Snek who worked on this before me. I'll check who worked on it before me in a second. Anyways, comments? 02:07, 10/08/2017


 * Can you add a quote?
 * This is also missing some links in the main summary. The ones I found missing were: Raggedpaw, WindClan, ShadowClan, cat, Aspenfall, Reedfeather, deputy, Hareflight, Redclaw, Shrewclaw, Cloudrunner, Brackenwing, battles, leader, Thunderpath, Barkface, mentor, the moors (to link to The Forest Territories), and apprentice.
 * Can you cite the deaths?
 * The ShadowClan warriors flee after their leader, following his wail. Talltail watches their enemies retreat, but he then hears a groan. Recognizing it as Shrewclaw, he turns around, exclaiming his name. - Can you combine that with the paragraph below it? Just having a two sentence paragraph seems a little short-ish.

fixed. did I get them all? 23:36, 10/12/2017

ye missed half the links, but I just added them now so CBV?

This is minor, but can you please credit the people who worked on it before you by username, and not just "credits to those?" 05:33, October 14, 2017 (UTC)

I would really have preferred it if you added it under here instead of just changing the message simply, so if you could do that next time, that would be great, but I guess it is all right for now. Re-CBV. 05:42, October 14, 2017 (UTC)

Thunder Rising/Chapter 8 - Silver Nomination
This is my first time writing an article on here... comments? 00:38, October 9, 2017 (UTC)

I've gtg but I'll go through the rest of it later
 * In the first paragraph, "He hopes they had the heard the last of the argument, believing it was all so stupid." There shouldn't be a "the" before heard.
 * Gray Wing admits that Thunder was still having trouble" Second paragraph, 'was' should be 'is'
 * Thunder and Gray Wing are redundant in the second paragraph, maybe switch their names up with some pronouns or descriptions here or there.
 * Turtle Tail is redundant in the beginning of the third paragraph
 * Third paragraph, "Gray Wing could see Turtle Tail" "could" should be 'can'
 * Same sentence, there's no subject after the 'and', so there shouldn't be a comma.
 * Same paragraph, stood should be stands
 * "but Gray Wing pushes past them, and enters the tunnel" There shouldn't be a comma.
 * "Rainswept Flower was outraged" 'was' should be 'is'

Fixed 00:22, October 13, 2017 (UTC)


 * 6th paragraph, "Gray Wing protests that Tall Shadow is their leader, with Stoneteller responding who can tell what lies ahead in the seasons to come, and tells him to be ready and to walk his new path with courage." Maybe break this into two sentences?
 * 7th paragraph, "He spots Thunder emerging from the tunnel he shared with Lightning Tail and Acorn Fur, and the young cat bounds over to him" 'shared' should be shares
 * Gray Wing is redundant in the 8th paragraph
 * 9th paragraph, "To Gray Wing's surprise, Jagged Peak was sitting beside her," 'was' should be is
 * 10th paragraph, "As his gaze gradually grew distant, Gray Wing guesses he was remembering his mother, Storm and his littermates." 'grew' should be grow, 'was' should be is
 * 11th paragraph, "He notices that Turtle Tail still looked exhausted" 'looked' should be looks
 * 12th paragraph, "He feels warmth surge through him to see how close his brother was to the kits." 'was' should be is
 * Same paragraph, "Rainswept Flower and Hawk Swoop also observes them from a little farther away." 'observes' should be observe
 * Same paragraph, "Tall Shadow is grooming herself in her dead," Pretty sure dead should be den

Fixed. I feel like grew should stay the way it is but I changed it since I can't really ignore that. 21:27, October 13, 2017 (UTC)

I'm so sorry I meant grows lmao but if you think grew is okay, then keep it. I can see how it works.

Fixed. grows sounds better actually, now that I think about it. 14:07, October 14, 2017 (UTC)

Comments before vote? 20:04, October 14, 2017 (UTC)

Path of Stars/Chapter 21 - Silver Nomination
All writing creds go to Broken. All I did was give her the page numbers.

Done
 * Can you add a main quote?
 * Perhaps also split the mentioned characters list
 * There's past tense dotting the summary; try and tweak that some. If you Ctrl+F the verbs 'was' and 'were' that'd probably catch most of it
 * In the 6th paragraph, 'Early Settlers' shouldn't be capitalized, as it was never stylized that way in the book.
 * He blinks, as a cold wind buffets him at the top of the slope. He winces as snow stings his eyes. - Dunno if the first sentence really needs a comma... didn't read smooth for me imo. Also, since he is slightly redundant, swap one out with a description or name maybe?
 * I think you're missing Swift Minnow and Reed Tail in the characters list; they appear in the summary but aren't listed.

Did you check if Broken wanted this nomination? She did work on it, and she is active. If you did ask her, then excuse me, but perhaps you could check in with her? She has not claimed it now, but it would probably be good to give her a heads up. 05:43, October 14, 2017 (UTC)

With all due respect Icy, she did actually ask me in chat if I wanted to nominate it. I did not take it without her permission.

Okay, just checking. Comments before vote? 05:45, October 14, 2017 (UTC)

Sunset/Chapter 22 ~ Silver Nomination
Phew..finally. 05:18, 10/14/2017

Can you link Brambleclaw in the Brambleclaw POV section? Also maybe bump Hawkfrost up into the major category section. 05:45, October 14, 2017 (UTC)

fixed. 05:51, 10/14/2017


 * Split the character lists?
 * Might be worth putting an important events section for the fulfillment of the blood will spill blood prophecy.

fixed. was sorta confused on the split the character lists part. 19:05, 10/14/2017

November FA
Well, it is that time of the month again, and I cannot believe it is moving so fast. Time flies, I guess. Any ideas? 05:38, October 14, 2017 (UTC)

Maybe The Rescue?

Looks good to me. Nice and SkyClan-y for DN release month.

Agreeing with Jaysnow's comment. 14:05, October 14, 2017 (UTC)

Tigerclaw's Fury/Chapter 8 ~ Silver Nomination
17:10, 10/14/2017


 * Can you add a quote?
 * It might be worth putting in an important events section that Tigerclaw and his cats are now officially staying back in ShadowClan (since it's an allegiance change)
 * And also include the ceremonies for Snag and Mowgli's warrior names
 * In the character list, I'm fairly sure they should also be listed as Nightwhisper and Jaggedtooth, since that's their name as of the end of the chapter.

fixed. 19:01, 10/14/2017


 * Actually... Nightstar died in chapter 7, so can you remove the death listing?
 * I also think it would be better if you did a separate ceremonies subsection under the important events for their ceremonies. Both have ceremony templates that you can copy over from their articles. (or just use one for both).
 * Tangleburr, Fernshade, Tallpoppy, and Flintfang are missing from the characters list.

fixed. 19:14, 10/14/2017

A Dangerous Path/Chapter 15 ~ Silver Nomination
Broken wrote the first few sentences; I wrote the rest.

Dovewing's Silence/Chapter 9 ~ Silver Nomination
Last DS chapter!

The 3rd, 4th, 5th, and 6th paragraps seem a little text wall-y, maybe split them?