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Honeypaw (VS) (A) ~ For Approval
I screwed up on the splotches and eyes, I'll fix them when I can. Also, morale: don't close down your computer without closing your tabs, as you could lose important work...like this post. --

Neon, you're supposed to wait until the image you had first is archived before putting another one up. 11:53, 9/08/2016

It's fine, everyone is allowed one time. That being said, this should be "for approval", since you already posted at least one image before.

Smudge the earpink, smudge the shading and lighten it?  ~ Silver Cloud ~   14:51, September 8, 2016 (UTC)

Alright, in that case, could you smooth out the yellow splotches some? 15:07, 9/08/2016 15:07, September 8, 2016 (UTC)

Darken the stripes just a little bit? They are very hard to see. They aren't incredibly dark on the kit, but they are more visible than they are here if that makes any sense. 15:14 Thu Sep 8

needs a white pixel in each eye. 18:37, September 8, 2016 (UTC)

Re-ups I tried putting the lines on another layer so I could attack the splotches with my blurring tool viciously make more blurs without ruining the stripes. --

Can you blur the shading more? 06:42 Fri Sep 2016

Just curious as to know why there's tabby fur in her ear? 22:28, 9/09/2016

Because... | does? Reupload --

Smooth out the shading you have, and add some to the front leg closest to us and the tail. 18:11, September 10, 2016 (UTC)

Add/define tail shading. --  22:58, September 10, 2016 (UTC)

The ear pink seems really neon so maybe darken it a little? — Minkclaw River is Beauty, Beauty is Everything. 01:58, September 11, 2016 (UTC)

Re-upload Me: "I'll try to watch some of ZSlyzer's Spirit of Justice Playthrough!" >27 20-30 minute episodes in 4 days Me: "crap I have loads of time-wasting to do" And that, my friends, was the story of why I wasn't working. --

The shading still needs to be smoothed out quite a bit more, imo, as well as the yellow splotches. They all seem too defined still. 16:33, 9/11/2016

Re-upload When I accidentally turned up the shading to 100.0 I panicked and turned it down and I found 50.0 looks really good compared to 35.0. So yeah that's the shading right now BACK TO BINGE WATCHING SOJ -- and if someone knows how to code the timestamps that'd be great because I have no idea of how to code size and font

For lack of better words, the shading seems really dense/thick, so could you maybe make it blend more in a gradient with the image?

Re-uploaded Finished watching Spirit of Justice's case 2, decided to take a grace period so I work on other things also I feel very sorry for my lovable spineless cinnamon roll, apollo at the end of the case --

(apollo needs a break lmao) anyway can you define the tail shading? 14:00, September 14, 2016 (UTC)

Re-upload Yes poor Apollo. I love the music that plays during that scene though I need to find it --

Could you blend the shading some more?  08:29 Fri Sep 16 

Re-ups Nothing much to say except I'm really sleepy. Neon's discipline period of no watching SoJ ends tomorrow, so at least I can watch Rite to Turnabout (or whatever they called it my memory is very bad today cause sleep deprived I had to finish an essay about london 2012 only slept at 11:30 PM ((11:30 is a very big strain on Neon's poor body clock BTW))) when I wake up. report report the song was called troupe gramarye 2016 guys now I can listen to it to my heart's content --

Could you smooth out the shading a little on her main body and haunch? Nice image, by the way. 20:51, September 16, 2016 (UTC)

Maybe make the stripes a bit sharper to match the kit.

Re-upload Thanks, Ivy. Really proud on the tail. *kisses tail* fear the perfection of the bee kitten's tail. This time on "it really sucks to be a japanfornian lawyer/work for a japanfornian lawyer", I'm rethinking if Benjamin Franklin REALLY meant there were only two certain things in life. This third thing...is Maya getting accused of murder. --

Could you make the line of shading on the rump follow the lineart a bit more, if that makes sense? It seems to be leaking away from the lineart and more onto the rump. Jayie Unwritten words~ 00:06, September 18, 2016 (UTC)

The line of shading on the rump could also be blurred or smudged a little. Can you define the shading on the two forelegs as well? 23:45, September 18, 2016 (UTC)

Re-upload got a bit lazy and also went on a school trip to this place called the Australiana Pioneer Village. It's a really authentic place, also it's really old. (My mother says she went there as a ten-year-old. That was 1976.) I have to go somewhere at 5:00 so I went on this super super fast. Zoom zoom. --

Define the light on the back legs? 13:45, 9/20/2016

The line of shading is still leaking away from the lineart of the rump a lot. Jayie Unwritten words~ 21:36, September 20, 2016 (UTC)

Roach (Ro) ~ For Approval
Must get this one approved ;) --  21:13, September 11, 2016 (UTC)

lighten him up some, he looks more grey right now. 21:16, September 11, 2016 (UTC)

Smooth and define shading? 21:17, 9/11/2016

Add more shading on head and have it some forward a bit more, and also define your light source.

Re-uploaded --  22:58, September 11, 2016 (UTC)

Waste in a ring around the image. 18:21, 9/12/2016

I can't see it...--  22:08, September 12, 2016 (UTC)

It's definitely there -- around most areas of the image.

If possible, could anyone give me a redline on where the waste is so I can pinpoint it? --  02:01, September 13, 2016 (UTC)

Yeah, here you go. I made the backdrop white too, so the waste is easier to see. This should be pretty accurate -- used color-select to pick it up. Anyway, can you define the light source again? It seems a tad bit randomly placed in some spots. I can draw that up too for you if need be

Re-uploaded. Is this better? --  21:05, September 13, 2016 (UTC)

Better, but here's the updated red-line with the stuff that's still there. Also, the image looks really gray -- could lighten the base to make him more silver? And I still can't make out the light source.

Re-uploaded.--  01:47, September 14, 2016 (UTC)

Almost,, but not quite. You also might've erased a little too much on the back of the head, since it appears to be leaking away from the lineart.

Re-uploaded --  23:22, September 15, 2016 (UTC)

You're literally so close to getting all of it -- just this left.

Re-uploaded --  00:47, September 16, 2016 (UTC)

Could you darken the shading just a tad? 05:59 Fri Sep 2016

^Except for the two lines of shading between the shoulder/haunch and the belly, those are about the darkness you should probably aim for on the rest of the shading. Those two lines seem fairly blocky and look somewhat like blurry markings - I think that could be fixed by thinning them out and making them curve a little to the shape of the body, and perhaps making them reach a little less far up. Since I'm bad at explaining, I think this is a little closer to what you should be going for with that.  08:27 Fri Sep 16 

Re-uploaded --  12:35, September 17, 2016 (UTC)

Define the light on the legs? Also, the tail seems to be leaking shading. 12:47, 9/17/2016

Re-uploaded --  16:11, September 17, 2016 (UTC)

Could you try to contour the shading to be more realistic with the cat's body? Kinda just follow that redline Shinx gave you a bit more...

Erm. I don't understand how to do that....--  15:50, September 18, 2016 (UTC)

Basically, follow the redline Shinx gave you earlier. The shading goes up in two very straight lines thick lines and it doesn't quite look natural as a light source. Cats are not blocky really, so the shading should bend with the curves of a cat's body. For lack of better words, see how this looks like a pin straight line? Probably should curve more. Also, shading's leaking away from the lineart on the back of the head and tail.

Re-uploaded (Re-did shading hooopppee this is better) --  22:57, September 18, 2016 (UTC)

Can you smooth out the shading on the belly haunch just a tiny bit? Also, define the light on the legs a little? 23:47, September 18, 2016 (UTC)

Maybe define the tail shading and there also seems to be a few white pixels at the top of the ear that should be gray. Much better though :)

Could you erase a bit of the shading at the top of the lower back/hip? I don't think it would be all shadow that high up, with your light source. Jayie Unwritten words~ 18:57, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

Re-uploaded--  22:14, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

There's waste up by the ears, forming a ring around the tail, and by the paws. Ear lineart appears to be blurred, too.

Define your lightsource. I can't seem to see where it may be coming from, as it appears to be coming from both directions? 13:44, 9/20/2016

Brindlepaw (WC) (A) - CBA
00:29, September 17, 2016 (UTC)

I don't think Brindelpaw Son of Breezpelt and nephew of Lionblaze and Jayfeather needs 2 B edited. I think it's perfect the way this charart is!Bluedragon64 (talk) 12:52, September 17, 2016 (UTC)

Bluedragon, you have been warned countless times for posting comments that aren't critique. :/

Also, Ivy, this is very beautiful! Idk if it's just me or what, but it appears the shading from <== that ear is leaking onto her forehead a little? Also, could you define the shading on both paws closest to us, so both her left paws, front and back? And possibly smooth out the shading a little bit more on the haunch/hind end area leading down her back left leg? <span style="">12:54, 9/17/2016

Re-uploaded. Thanks! 13:41, September 17, 2016 (UTC)

The ear color looks a little too dull compared to the kit - could you saturate it a bit? Jayie Unwritten words~ 19:09, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

Re-uploaded. This to me looks too saturated, but I guess it has to match the kit. 20:31, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

CBA?

Lynxkit (Star) ~ For Approval
This is one of my best chararts o-o. Also, is it just me, or is this spoopy kitty reminding anyone else of Halloween? <span style="">01:18, 9/17/2016

Oh wow this is looks just like my cat named Spooky that I adopted last haloween.... Anyway, define the shading on the tail a touch? Really great kitty

What does Spooky look like? Anyways add just a touch more shading on the paw closest to us. Adowable pumpkin kitty. --

Could you define the shading on the main body as well, please?  <span style="">10:18 Sat Sep 17 

Re-uploaded *Yawns* This is about as much as I can define body shading, as the lightsource is shining nearly right on it. Also defined depth as well. <span style="">12:27, 9/17/2016

I feel like you should lighten the shading a little bit, that's just my opinion though.

I can't see the ear pink at all, and should there at least be some shading on the lower half of the main body? Because I really can't tell there's shading on --> half of the cat.

Re-uploaded Lightened shading a smidge, and added some more shading on the ==> half of the cat. But like I said before, my lightsource is shining nearly directly onto it, and I'd rather not add anymore shading there. Also, the earpink you can't see because it's all in shading. Tried to make it a little lighter. <span style="">14:13, 9/18/2016

Ooo, I love this pattern. :D I think the shading on <--- half of the body is making the chest and shoulder looking a little flat. Could you lighten the shading on the right part of the chest and shoulder, not to make it look like there's light there, but to show that those parts of the body aren't flat. I hope that made sense. Jayie Unwritten words~ 19:11, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

I feel like a fool for saying this, but I don't quite understand what you mean? Do you mean to lighten all the shading on the chest area only, or like including the front legs? <span style="">02:56, 9/20/2016

Ohh, I think I know what you're saying. I have darker shading there for shading depth, right as of the moment. <span style="">13:46, 9/20/2016

Re-uploaded Hopefully this is what you meant. I defined/darkened the shading depth to make it look less flat. If I got rid of some shading there, it would go against my light source. <span style="">19:23, 9/21/2016

Sparkpelt (W) - For Approval
The old reservation on the table doesn't have a date so I think I'm good to take this...? All the colors were pulled from her apprentice 06:16, September 17, 2016 (UTC)

I think it's purrfect the way it is but you might want to make her ears a little pinker unless thats too pink for this character. Bluedragon64 (talk) 12:50, September 17, 2016 (UTC)

I feel as if this is a little darker than the kit and apprentice images? Forgive if I'm wrong. Also, I think the stripes need to be a little thicker and smudged to match the other images. <span style="">12:58, 9/17/2016

the pale colour scattered throughout her body should be brightened considerably, and the stripes should be....oranger for lack of a better word, thicker, and squigglier like firestar's. (the stripes will be on multiply of the base pelt) 14:30, September 17, 2016 (UTC)

Re-uploaded art iz hard 07:34, September 18, 2016 (UTC)

yeah it is rip, can you define the pale belly and face a lot and reduce the opacity on the texture some? 20:00, September 18, 2016 (UTC)

Re-uploaded 07:29, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

This looks gorgeous. :D I feel like the pale belly and face still aren't light enough compared to the kit and apprentice images, though. Jayie Unwritten words~ 19:13, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

Re-uploaded 22:15, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

There's a pixel of waste at the tip of the tail, on the bottom of the cat, and under the tail. Nice job on this :)

Re-uploaded 22:35, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

Define the light on the back legs? <span style="">13:37, 9/20/2016

The pixels of waste near the base of the tail and on the bottom are still there, if I'm seeing it correctly

Re-uploaded 06:04, September 21, 2016 (UTC)

Swampkit (Star) - For Approval
<span style="">15:49 Sun Sep 18

...Can someone fix the file name? It needs a ( . ) after Swampkit...not the that is currently there. I just noticed this. <span style="">01:22 Mon Sep 19

Re-named. Didn't notice it until you said something. Problem fixed.

I think the texture on the white patches is making them look a little gray - could you lighten that, or erase away some of it where the light should be hitting the white patches? Just a thought. Jayie Unwritten words~ 19:17, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

His eyes look blue. Make them more green.  ~ Silver Cloud ~   23:06, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

They're technically turquoise, which is blue-green, and unless it specifies which shade of green, then it's artist's choice. <span style="">13:38, 9/20/2016

Bluebellkit (Ki) ~ For Approval
I hate the shading. I couldn't get it to look right.

Hm..have you looked at the shading placement on the tutorial page? I have it pulled up and the shading for that is actually on the right side of the kitten image having the light source come from the left. Maybe try using that as an example. For an admin, this needs renamed to File:Bluebellkit.kit.png — <font face="Vivaldi" size="1" color="#08088A>Minkclaw River is Beauty, Beauty is Everything. 03:17, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

that's only a general guide. there's multiple usable sources, and this source is fine. 06:19, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

Smooth the neck shading and define the light on the tail

It's a little hard to tell since the image is so small, but I think I spy a bit of waste next to that right front paw. Jayie Unwritten words~ 19:23, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

reuploaded *Face palm* Shading still looks weird.

No, it doesn't. Just smooth it out a little bit near the edges of it and you'll be just fine. Also, be sure to sign with four ~'s, as you haven't been leaving a timestamp with your messages. You have a signature, but I can't tell what time you left said message, and that wouldn't be good for comments, CBAing, reuploading, ect.

reuploaded I think it looks better. 02:36, September 20, 2016

Shading looks nice, but some is leaking outside of the lineart(above the tail and some on the head). Songfire (talk) 15:14, September 20, 2016 (UTC)

reuploaded I think this looks good.

Define the light on the legs? <span style="">15:25, 9/21/2016

The file is named incorrectly -- should be named File:Bluebellkit.kit.png with two 'l' 's in Bluebell.

blur(?) the body shading some more. 22:03, September 21, 2016 (UTC)

Silvermask (D) ~ For Approval
god bless — <font face="Vivaldi" size="1" color="#08088A>Minkclaw River is Beauty, Beauty is Everything. 16:37, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

Define the shading on the legs, and have the light be more rounded on the belly, the shape looks a bit off, if that makes sense. Jayie Unwritten words~ 19:25, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

Re-Upps, I probably don't know about critizing my own work, but is the little "mask" alright? — <font face="Vivaldi" size="1" color="#08088A>Minkclaw River is Beauty, Beauty is Everything. 01:44, September 20, 2016 (UTC)

The mask seems a little sharp up at the top, so maybe smooth it just up there in the left side :)

Re-Upps, had to do two uploads forgot to remove the waste the first time — <font face="Vivaldi" size="1" color="#08088A>Minkclaw River is Beauty, Beauty is Everything. 14:08, September 20, 2016 (UTC)

Blur the stomach shading; it cuts off abruptly.

Elderkit (Star) - For Approval


This is my first one so please share your comments. Waterclaw135 (talk) 23:35, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

Pretty impressive for your first one! That means this can say "For Approval" instead of "For Evaluation", since you know what you're doing. As for the image itself, define the depth in the shading a wee bit. It's very obviously there, but looks a tad flat.

Maybe just my screen but the eyes look extremely orange - could you perhaps make them more yellow? Also smudge the earpink. Great job :3

Actually, smudging ear pink isn't mandatory. That's just a matter of preference that many users like to use here. No one is required to smudge 'anything; ear pink, texture, shading, ect.

Re-Upload: Defined the depth of the shading, made eyes yellower, sumdged the earpink. Waterclaw135 (talk) 01:54, September 20, 2016 (UTC)

Could you define your light source? <span style="">15:26, 9/21/2016

Re-Upload: Defined the light source. --Waterclaw135 (talk) 22:17, September 21, 2016 (UTC)

Elderkit (Ki) - For Approval
Mistyped the name it, could someone please change it? Thanks. Songfire (talk) 23:36, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

This needs a date on the reservation table, and also, match the star image since it was posted before yours :).

Reuploaded. Date added, took new colors from StarClan version. Songfire (talk) 23:52, September 19, 2016 (UTC)

Smooth out the chest highlight, please. It stands out a bit more than it should. And since you also know what you're doing, this will be changed to "For Approval".

Reuploaded. Tried to smooth shading/highlights out. Thoughts? Songfire (talk) 04:38, September 20, 2016 (UTC)

Perhaps make the earpink color match a tad more to the star image, and light on the --> back paw.

Tulipkit (Kit) - For Approval
looks just like one of my ocs. Kits are hard. ~P  a   t   c   h    f   e   a   t   h   e   r~   01:08, September 20, 2016 (UTC)

Can you please change your signature to a subpage instead of adding all of this extra coding onto the approval page? It's unnecessary and a bit untidy? Anyways, back to the image. Define the light on the tail, if there is any, and define the overall shading. I can tell there's shading, but it's hard to see, although that could just be my eyes.

Reuploaded.How do I make a sup-page? I knew how to make one, but it's been awhile now... ~Patchfeather

You'd make a subpage called User:Patchfeather14/Sig (which appears to already exist], and then change your preferences to read, which shows your signature:   ~P   a   t   c   h    f   e   a   t   h   e   r~   It's pretty easy, actually, and makes everything much cleaner and allows us to easily track who leaves what messages in a very tidy fashion.

Oh, duh (can't believe i forgot how to make those). Anyway, i looked at my preferences and it already says that. Could I make a personal template for it instead? I've made them in the past and they've worked well at keeping pages clean. ~P  a   t   c   h    f   e   a   t   h   e   r~   01:44, September 20, 2016 (UTC)

Blizzardwing (DF) - For Approval
I am super proud of this. If Lynxkit, Elderkit, Swampkit, and Tulipkit get pages and chararts, then what Su revealed about the cats from Tallstar's Revenge and Crookedstar's Promise are just as valid.

You forgot his toesies :p <span style="">20:28, 9/20/2016

Yep, I already reuploaded with that after you pointed it out.

Ashheart (Star) - For Approval
All colors from kit and warrior images. Comments? 20:51, September 20, 2016 (UTC)

Smooth out the shading a bit, please.

Reuploaded. 00:30, September 21, 2016 (UTC)

The tail shading looks a little too overblurred, could you define that? Also, could you define the shading depth on the front half of the cat? <span style="">01:00, 9/21/2016

There also appears to be a bit of shading leaking by the chin area. <span style="">07:54 Wed Sep 2016

Reuploaded. 15:26, September 21, 2016 (UTC)

Maybe smooth the earpink a bit - seems a lil' sharp.

Reedtail (Star) ~ For Approval
going to kick my own ass for thinking this pattern was ok 22:07, September 20, 2016 (UTC)

reuploaded just fixed several things  22:26, September 21, 2016 (UTC)

Brackenfoot (Star) - For Approval
Is this reserved? If it is I'm sorry, just decline it. I'm still a noob. And if I may ask, how do I reserve something? Jose1106 (talk) 23:11, September 21, 2016 (UTC)

No, this is not reserved, but in order to continue this you need to add a reservation yourself. You've got the option to join the project here, but isn't mandatory. And then, just add yourself a slot on the chart and find your spot in alphabetical order, then add reservation and date. Since this is your first art, though, please change the heading to "~For Evaluation" instead of "~For Approval", until a lead deems it ready to be "~For Approval" Nice job, though

Thanks a lot for the help! Will do! Jose1106 (talk) 23:12, September 21, 2016 (UTC)

This is pretty good! Could you define the shading depth some more? Also, don't forget to sign with ~ after everything you say on a talk page from now on! Like so: <span style="">23:09, 9/21/2016

Honestly, this can stay at For Approval, since this is more than what's needed to become an apprentice in the project. Nice job!

lighten the stripes not on the legs a bit, they're a little too dark. 23:12, September 21, 2016 (UTC)

Reuploaded Thanks SnowedLightning. Jose1106 (talk) 23:29, September 21, 2016 (UTC)