Talk:Hollyleaf

Style Concerns

 * Needs mentor citations
 * History should be checked over for verb tense, flow, and clarity Shadowshine 01:40, July 25, 2010 (UTC)
 * Needs Reference for "sleek" in description.
 * Most of The Power of Three could be shortened and be summarized more so they don't take up so much space. I did as much as I could. Its hard to shorten it much more.Shadowshine 14:39, August 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * Sorry Shadowshine, like you said it is hard but it still needs to be shortened more. I will work on it this evening. 17:39, August 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks I did the best I could when I could. Shadowshine 01:29, August 3, 2010 (UTC)

*Needs Citation for Erin Hunter Chats

Top Quote
I think the quote on the top of the page should be this:

"I can't stay here. I know I did the right thing, but no cat will ever understand."

Anybody have comments? I wanted to see what other people thought. Of course, we'd have to take the one below off. Dapple claw  02:20, September 28, 2010 (UTC)

I think that sounds good, but there is probably something else in Sunrise that seems better. Once my Kindle comes in, I'll download Sunrise and check, but if you can before that go ahead. 02:35, September 28, 2010 (UTC)

Thanks! I thought that might be a good way for her to be seen, misunderstood. Dapple claw  02:38, September 28, 2010 (UTC)

Hmm, is this a good one? It's on page 91 of The Fourth Apprentice:

Cinderheart - "It's not okay, oh Jayfeather, I miss Hollyleaf so much!"

I don't know if we could do multiple speakers, if so then add this:

Jayfeather - "So do I."

Cinderheart - "Yes, you must. Losing a littermate is the worst thing ever."

I know theirs more but then it loses its relevence to Hollyleaf, let me know what you think. =) Dapple  claw  03:29, October 1, 2010 (UTC)

I think hers is fine as it is right now; it shows her personality really well. 11:01, October 1, 2010 (UTC)

Well then does anyone mind if I put this one here under her quotes section? Dapple claw  21:17, October 1, 2010 (UTC)