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Brambleberry (MC) - Declined


I drew Brambleberry i know it's not perfect. critism and tips welcomed dearly. --brambleberry 17:07, 17 August 2009 (UTC)

Brambleberry, sorry but were closing this section. We are getting ready for Tweak Week and clearing up the page. No new art is allowed at this time. You can put this back up after Tweak Week. Hawkfire ♫  Go Aggies! 17:13, 17 August 2009 (UTC)

Tadpole - Declined
ok, since scourge didn't work out, i made an easier one:tadpole. how did i do? rainpelt

add/darken shading... -- MU MB LE 785  23:46, 24 July 2009 (UTC)

Add a tad bit of shading under the chin, head, sides, and lightly on the pars. Blend the ears some more and there's a darker line of pink running through it. Lighten the eyes, as they are hazel, and add a highlight to them. He looks very cute. =)--Warrior♥ Warrior's Den 00:20, 25 July 2009 (UTC)

(M) - Also, judging by what you said on Scourge you are using paint, right? Try using www.pixlr.com to edit your images. (Use the burn tool for shading and the blur tool for ...blurring.) ₪   MosswhiskerAndStealthfire   00:33, 25 July 2009 (UTC)

ok, i used gimp to fix shading.-rainpelt


 * I can hardly see the shading and there's a part gray background..Theres look like some gray near his left foreleg close to the line art. There's also some near his ears and where his two paws meet his chest.-- ♪Shimmer ♫ 01:40, 25 July 2009 (UTC)

i added shading and lightened the eyes and i have fixed the background rainpelt

i worked on shading more, and made the BG transparent, if it dosent show up for you guys tell me. and i also noticed the line art was lightened when i was doing shading, so i fixed that problem, have i fixed it all? rainpelt worked on shading and ears more, no comments in a while, so, i dont know what to do next.

Well, he needs shading on the other side of his body, his front legs and top of head, and your current shading needs to be blurred in more. There's also an extra bit of gray stuck in between the tail and side, get rid of that. -- Bramble My Realm 02:08, 26 July 2009 (UTC)

fixed. rainpelt


 * It looks like you smudged it more than you blurred.-- ♪Shimmer ♫ 15:54, 26 July 2009 (UTC)

blurred instead of smudged


 * The little picks of gray are still there in between the paws and his hind leg.-- ♪Shimmer ♫ 22:06, 26 July 2009 (UTC)

did that, and lightened the ears. rainpelt

The shading needs to be blurred into the pelt, to make it look more natural, and less like patches. Plus, he's supposed to be black. Right now, he looks more like a dark gray. Maybe make him a little darker. Other then that, good! Jaypaw189 21:21, 30 July 2009 (UTC) aka Jayie

done-rainpelt

He doesn't have a pupil in his eyes. Fix that and he's looks good. --Blackclaw09 20:51, 5 August 2009 (UTC)

he has one.rainpelt 23:35, 5 August 2009 (UTC)

anything else? rainpelt

Add a white pixel into each eye for a highlight, then you need to redo the shading. It just doesn't look right. Here is exactly where: A thin line of shading on both of his cheeks and on top of his head. A slightly increased size of shading down both of his sides, a thin line of shading along the bottom of his tail, and two lines of shading up one side of each of his forelegs. -- Bramble My Realm 20:36, 8 August 2009 (UTC)

the origonal shading was lost when jaypaw asked me to darken thepelt so i will work on regaining that. ok, working on that. original shading was lost when jaypaw wanted me to darken it.-rainpelt

worked on shading a bit.-rainpelt

Okay. Firstly Rainpelt, please sign with 4 ~s as no-one can tell when you last edited. Now for the image: The ear pink is way too big for the ears and is too pale for a black kit. The shading needs to be more of a line as Bramble said above. Look at some of the approved kits (Mosskit, Applekit, Runningkit and Wolfkit are some good examples) to see how are where to put shading. Blend it in and this looks good to go. Sandy ~Dragonkit's Forest 19:03, 13 August 2009 (UTC)

I've always had a hard time with kits, I like the color you chose, and Sandy pretty much covered it, the only other thing is that the nose pink is too red.-- Darkhallows Lair 17:28, 17 August 2009 (UTC)

This has been here for well over a week (can't tell for sure just by looking as you didn't timestamp your last message, rainpelt). Please work on this or it will be declined. Sandy ~Dragonkit's Forest 13:13, 19 August 2009 (UTC)

Declined due to lack of work. Please feel free to make improvements and resubmit after Tweak Week! Sandy ~Dragonkit's Forest 09:31, 20 August 2009 (UTC)