Warriors Wiki talk:Characters

Flametail ~ Silver Nomination
I am nominating Falmetail becasue he looks good enough to be silver! Comments?

~Brackenfur66~ 15:12, August 25, 2011 (UTC)Brackenfur66~Brackenfur66~ 15:12, August 25, 2011 (UTC)

Do you mean Flametail? His second quote doesn't show his personality; you might want to find a better one. also, expand Night whispers, and Fading echoes. 22:49, August 25, 2011 (UTC)

Expand Outcast, Sunrise, The Fourth Apprentice, and Sign of the Moon. I'm sure there's better quotes somewhere else. 23:43, August 25, 2011 (UTC)

No promblem. Just give me a week.

P.S. my siggie isn't ready yet sorry

~Brackenfur66~

Are you still working on this? 23:52, September 6, 2011 (UTC)

Yep still workin.

☺Brackenfur66☺ 02:24, September 12, 2011 (UTC)Brackenfur66☺Brackenfur66☺ 02:24, September 12, 2011 (UTC)

I'm going to take over this one as Brackenfur says he is leaving the wiki and this hasn't been touched since the 12th. Any objections? 12:52, September 28, 2011 (UTC)

None for me..... 12:54, September 28, 2011 (UTC)

Nope, go ahead. Expand Outcast, Sunrise, The Fourth Apprentice, and Sign of the Moon. Also add better quotes from somewhere else. 21:51, September 28, 2011 (UTC)

I am actually staying but if Atelda is gonna take over thats just fine I'll try another cat. Sorry guys!

Bracken fur  66!

Are you still working on this, Atelda? 22:36, October 3, 2011 (UTC)

They're all expanded. I'll add better quotes a little later tonight. 23:41, October 3, 2011 (UTC)

Ok, it's not that night, but it might be a few days as I need to get a few books from the library. Sorry! :) 02:56, October 8, 2011 (UTC)

Could you mention that Rowanclaw is his father in the first paragraph of the Dark River section? Hollydapple798 Happy Halloween! 19:51, October 16, 2011 (UTC)

Yup, quotes are done, and that ^^ is added. Comments? 20:51, October 16, 2011 (UTC)

CBV? 22:02, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Morningflower - Silver Nomination
Aahhhh... the thrill of nominating again. :) I went through her article, and expanded history where I could, and found some good quotes. I will still look for some more, but for the time, being it looks fine. 23:12, September 14, 2011 (UTC)

Great work! If you can find more quotes, great, but if not, then thats good. Can the last sentence of Dawn be expanded? Does Morningflower say anything to show that she is satisfied? Sorry, but I don't have the book, so I can't check. 22:11, September 15, 2011 (UTC)

Its been over a week. Are you still working on this? 23:01, September 22, 2011 (UTC)

Three weeks now. Anyone want to take over? 00:54, October 7, 2011 (UTC)

Meep, I shall since I feel like I've been kind of lazy in PC. :P 02:56, October 8, 2011 (UTC)

Also, a quote has been added and Dawn has been expanded. 21:32, October 9, 2011 (UTC)

Can you expand Rising Storm? 19:37, October 11, 2011 (UTC)

Done. Comments? 20:51, October 16, 2011 (UTC)

Could you maybe expand Dark River aswell? 19:53, October 18, 2011 (UTC)

Yellowstar - Silver Nomination
Comments? 22:48, September 18, 2011 (UTC)

Can you add a transition to where it says that s/he supports Darkstar's new addition to the warrior code? Since I don't have the book, does it explain or hint why her/his eye's look troubled. If not, don't worry about it. :) 23:38, September 18, 2011 (UTC)

Can you add a quote? It does say that s/he says that there was a fox or something... 01:17, September 20, 2011 (UTC)

Done. She didn't say anything but I added a narrator quote, if that's okay. 00:02, September 26, 2011 (UTC)

Nice. Any more quotes you could add? SleepingAngel  The angel is sleeping... 02:18, October 1, 2011 (UTC) Shadewing

It looks really good. The part where Yellowstar is mentioning the fox on ShadowClan territory and how they were having trouble with it didn't read very smoothly, though. The article looks pretty good otherwise. :) Holly  dapple798  00:03, October 3, 2011 (UTC)

No more quotes. How do yous uggest I fix it, Hollydapple? 16:51, October 8, 2011 (UTC)

Okay, well, since the commenter has not responded. I'm going to CBV this, so CBV? 22:02, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Ottersplash ~ Silver Nomination
I understand she wasn't on the concerns list, but she needed work. Comments? Shadewing  Blades of the Night 23:25, September 18, 2011 (UTC) Shadewing

Good job! Add a few more quotes - I'm going to add one, since I have CP on me right now. Crookedstar's Promise should be expanded, and maybe flesh out Battles of the Clans? Also, is there any trivia? 23:34, September 18, 2011 (UTC)

I'll have to look. I don't own CP or Battles of the Clans, I'll have to rent it, but I think I'm buying CP soon. As for trivia and all, I'll try to find some... Shadewing  Blades of the Night 23:50, September 18, 2011 (UTC) Shadewing 

Also, add in some of the links ;3 23:52, September 18, 2011 (UTC)

Fleshed out Battle of the Clans. I will get to CP, quotes, and links soon. x3 Shadewing  Blades of the Night  00:03, September 19, 2011 (UTC) Shadewing

Quotes have been added, onto links. I won't be able to do CP until I get the book, which I think I'm getting it next week. Unless I can rent it. Shadewing  Blades of the Night 00:40, September 20, 2011 (UTC) Shadewing

Can the beginning of both Bluestar's Prophecy, and Crookedstar's Promise both flow better? The ending of Crookedstar's Promise was ended a bit abrubtly. Nice work. 01:10, September 20, 2011 (UTC)

Do you think you can add the descriptions to the quotes? It just says who said it, and that isn't enough to tell us about her personality. 01:20, September 20, 2011 (UTC)

I will do both of those things asap. Shadewing  Blades of the Night 01:33, September 20, 2011 (UTC) Shadewing

Fixed up Bluestar's Prophecy. I ordered CP, and I should have it soon. Shadewing  Blades of the Night 22:28, September 22, 2011 (UTC) Shadewing

Great, just fix CP, and this can be CBVed once more votes end. You can also use HarperCollins for minor things.. 22:32, September 22, 2011 (UTC)

Thanks for doing this. I was working on this orginally, but I just couldn't get CP. I have a great quote, but I don't know what page it's on... ><  YatzSliversword     Defender of Sacred Grove  22:48, September 22, 2011 (UTC)

P.S. Keep it up!

No problem, Yatz. I'l try HarperCollins, Mistystar, but I'm not sure I'll find much... Shadewing  Blades of the Night 01:08, September 23, 2011 (UTC) Shadewing

Okay, I should have CP in two days at the most. Sorry guys. SleepingAngel  The angel is sleeping... 21:19, September 26, 2011 (UTC) Shadewing

Alrighty, I have CP. I'm almost done getting all the information on her. I'll start expanding tomorrow. Sorry for all the delay everyone. SleepingAngel  The angel is sleeping... 01:54, September 30, 2011 (UTC) Shadewing

Is this still being worked on? S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 18:33, October 8, 2011 (UTC)

Yes. I apologize for my lack of work. I'm almost done. Senbonzakura  Dance of the Cherry Blossoms... 19:43, October 12, 2011 (UTC) Shadewing

Brackenfur ~ Silver Nomination
I have been working on him a little bit and I think its good! 04:02, September 25, 2011 (UTC)

Flesh out Firestar's Quest a little bit. 00:12, September 26, 2011 (UTC)

There's some trivia that needs to be cited. Could The Darkest Hour, The Sight, Outcast, Night Whispers, and Sign of the Moon be fleshed out/expanded? 00:14, September 26, 2011 (UTC)

Are you still working on this? 03:46, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

Fleck - Silver Nomination
Ok, I had written most of his history a few weeks ago, and I just added a few quotes to his page. This would be my first real nomination since Milkfur was so minor, so, any suggestions? 02:48, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

Could you elaborate more on when Crookedkit leaves? Nice work. 02:53, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

Alright done. I just hope I didn't stray too far away from Fleck himself, and I can always reword it if need be. Thanks =) 02:59, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

Brilliant! I don't mean to hammer you with critiques, but I just noticed that the last quote is not in a dialogue template. Otherwise it's amazing ;) 03:04, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

Well it is but I wasn't exactly sure how to code it. Do I just need to make it in bold? I'm sorry, I should know how to do this ^^; 03:07, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

No, you're fine ;). All you need to do is add a different template which if you search, "Dialogue a-b" it should give you the correct formatting. List the speaker, then their quote and continue. Then when done, scroll all the way to the bottem and put in your reference, and description. 03:19, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

Thank you! Done =) 03:32, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

Looks great! Can you add more to the description of the second quote in the quote section? It doesn't really show his personality unless you tell more about it. 23:13, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

Done, how's that? 21:31, September 30, 2011 (UTC)

Can you expand the history more? 02:12, October 1, 2011 (UTC)

Alright, there were only a few more things I could add. Anything else? 03:43, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

This looks great! Could you add more history on when Crookedjaw remembers Fleck (i.e When he hunts mice and he remembers how Fleck taught him how do it)  Owl   X    G    l    itt    er   4LIFE..    The colors of fall 00:29, October 5, 2011 (UTC) I think the end spoiler tag needs to be below the quotes section. 14:52, October 16, 2011 (UTC)

Ok I'll try but I don't have my book with me right now, and I'll do the spoiler tag thing now. 01:52, October 17, 2011 (UTC)

Foxwhisker ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? 02:54, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

The two paragraphs in below the intro have some style issues. Otherwise good job. 02:58, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

Break up the last paragraph if possible. Other then what Atelda suggested, it looks good. 06:35, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

Fixed 02:57, October 1, 2011 (UTC)

Could you add more things about Foxwhisker in the last paragraph? Looks good <font face="Elephant"> Owl  <font color="#CC0000"><font face="Elephant"> X   <font color="#CC9933"><font face="Elephant"> G   <font color="#CC6633"><font face="Elephant"> l   <font color="#CC3300"><font face="Elephant"> itt   <font color="#CC3333"><font face="Elephant"> er   <font color="#993300"><font face="Elephant">4LIFE..    The colors of fall 00:31, October 5, 2011 (UTC) It looks really, really good so far, but could you change it where they said that they "slipped into the water" at the end of the third paragraph? It sounds like they, well, slipped into the gorge. Holly dapple798  21:32, October 6, 2011 (UTC)

Done! 08:45, October 8, 2011 (UTC)

CBV? 22:02, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Firekit ~ Silver Nomination
The article looked ready, so I fixed the history a bit, and I don't think she says anything that I can use as a quote, and I don't think Leafstar naming her after Firestar has anything to do with her personality, so I'm not adding that. Comments? 23:11, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

Shouldn't we wait until the other books come out before nominating Firekit and her siblings? I think for now though, the quote about Firekit being named after Firestar would work, because at least it's something to work with. 23:59, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

No, we can nominate things before all the books come out; many Tribe characters were nominated only a few weeks before SotM came out. I don't have the book for the rescue, so the only thing I actually did for the article was grammar/spelling/punctuation fixing. Can you add the quote, if you have the book? 00:10, September 30, 2011 (UTC)

Ah, okay. And yes, I'll add the quote. I have the book right in front of me, actually. 00:11, September 30, 2011 (UTC)

Thanks! Lucky you. :3 I reserved it from the library a long time before it came out, and I still don't have it. 00:13, September 30, 2011 (UTC)

As I said in the summary, it makes a lot more sense to have it as a regular quote, because if you didn't, it would look really odd. I hope that works for you. 00:24, September 30, 2011 (UTC)

Thank you! It looks great! =D 00:26, September 30, 2011 (UTC)

CBV list. 21:46, October 9, 2011 (UTC)

CBV? 22:02, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Snipe ~ Silver Nomination
He is a very minor character, since, of course, he was only mentioned/seen in one or two books. So I thought it would be okay for a Silver Nomination. ^-^ Thoughts? M i  s  t  y  p  e b  b  l  e   00:01, October 2, 2011 (UTC)

Expand A Clan In Need if possible, other than that, it looks good. Maybe see if he is mentioned in any other books? S w  E  e  T  f  L  o  W  e  R  I'm SwEeTeR tH  aN yOu ThInK! 17:31, October 2, 2011 (UTC)

I'll get on to that, but to answer your question, no he is not mentioned or seen in any other books. :)  M  i  s  t  y  p  e b  b  l  e   00:38, October 3, 2011 (UTC)

Since he is a very minor character, I added just a bit more. I then kind of fixed the paragraph to make it kind of flow more. M i  s  t  y  p  e b  b  l  e   01:00, October 3, 2011 (UTC)

Could you add more of a description to the quotes. Looking good! 03:46, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

Done. How is it? 19:48, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

Is it possible for you to break up the first paragraph in the History? <font color="#CC9900"><font face="Elephant"> Owl  <font color="#CC0000"><font face="Elephant"> X   <font color="#CC9933"><font face="Elephant"> G   <font color="#CC6633"><font face="Elephant"> l   <font color="#CC3300"><font face="Elephant"> itt   <font color="#CC3333"><font face="Elephant"> er   <font color="#993300"><font face="Elephant">4LIFE..    The colors of fall 00:37, October 5, 2011 (UTC)

Done, is that what you mean? Sorry if its not. xD 19:08, October 5, 2011 (UTC)

Looks nice so far, but to me, it seems like "he/his/him" is used too much, so maybe change it to "Snipe" at least once or twice in each paragraph? Holly dapple798  21:42, October 6, 2011 (UTC)

It looks good, and that was a good comment Hollydapple! S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r  Calling all  the monsters! 23:12, October 6, 2011 (UTC)

Changed it a bit, but I didn't want to overuse Snipe either. How does it look? :3 00:06, October 7, 2011 (UTC)

Can you take out the: "he is mentioned when" 's?  S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r  Calling all  the monsters! 02:45, October 8, 2011 (UTC)

Alright, fixed that. :^-^ 14:48, October 8, 2011 (UTC)

Good, that looks better :)   S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 18:27, October 8, 2011 (UTC)

Could you change it where it says, "Snipe is used to be one of Scourge's closest guards" please? Sorry, I just noticed that. :3 <font color="orange" style="background:Black">Hollydapple798 Life's no fun without a good scare... 21:07, October 10, 2011 (UTC)

Fixed! Thanks for pointing that out, Hollydapple! ^-^  M  i  s  t  y  p  e b  b  l  e   21:17, October 10, 2011 (UTC)

Can you expand A Clan in Need anymore? S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 21:24, October 17, 2011 (UTC)

Rain That Passes Quickly ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? 22:35, October 3, 2011 (UTC)

Can you possibly find a main quote instead of the narrator (bad spelling xD) talking, to something she says? If not looks good. S w  E  e  T  f  L  o  W  e  R  I'm SwEeTeR tH  aN yOu ThInK! 23:34, October 3, 2011 (UTC)

Sorry, but thats the only non-dialogue quote that relates to her, and it shows her personality, so its fine. 22:38, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

Ok, that's fine, just thought I'd check :D  S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r  Calling all  the monsters! 23:22, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

I would like to mention that as long as the quote shows the characters personality, it doesn't matter who the quote was coming from. Adding to CBV list.

CBV? 22:02, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Dewstar ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? S w  E  e  T  f  L  o  W  e  R  I'm SwEeTeR tH  aN yOu ThInK! 23:29, October 3, 2011 (UTC)

Can you add any quotes? Like when he was mentioned by the other cats? 23:57, October 3, 2011 (UTC)

Can you elaborate on the Code of the Clans section? If not, I understand. 00:00, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

Um sure Misty if I find what chapter he's in xD And Cloudy, sorry I really don't think I can xD he's just mentioned that he dies in a battle. I think *Goes to check book*  S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r  Calling all  the monsters! 00:23, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

It's fine if you can't. I don't mind. =) 03:49, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

I did, like by 5 or 6 words, but that's literally all I could expand the article xD  S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r  Calling all  the monsters! 23:20, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

Could you make The History flow better? Sorry if it's just me but it seems to choppy <font color="#CC9900"><font face="Elephant"> Owl  <font color="#CC0000"><font face="Elephant"> X   <font color="#CC9933"><font face="Elephant"> G   <font color="#CC6633"><font face="Elephant"> l   <font color="#CC3300"><font face="Elephant"> itt   <font color="#CC3333"><font face="Elephant"> er   <font color="#993300"><font face="Elephant">4LIFE..    The colors of fall 00:42, October 5, 2011 (UTC) Done. S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r  Calling all  the monsters! 21:20, October 6, 2011 (UTC)

Adding to CBV list. 21:46, October 9, 2011 (UTC)

Brightheart ~ Silver Nomination
I've been working on her and I think she's ready. Comments? 03:32, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

Could you expand Fire and Ice, Forest of Secrets, Moonrise, Sunset, and Secrets of the Clans? It's okay if you can't for some of them. :) 03:46, October 4, 2011 (UTC)S

Swap her name changing ceremony and warrior ceremony around. <font color="#CC9900"><font face="Elephant"> Owl  <font color="#CC0000"><font face="Elephant"> X   <font color="#CC9933"><font face="Elephant"> G   <font color="#CC6633"><font face="Elephant"> l   <font color="#CC3300"><font face="Elephant"> itt   <font color="#CC3333"><font face="Elephant"> er   <font color="#993300"><font face="Elephant">4LIFE..    The colors of fall 00:45, October 5, 2011 (UTC)

How come I should switch it around? And I'll have this done in a day or two. 13:59, October 5, 2011 (UTC)

Keep the ceremonies how they are, Ivy. Those are in the order in which they happened. Can you extend Dark River, if possible? 22:14, October 8, 2011 (UTC)

I thought the name of the ceremony had to have the name of the cats name before they got their new name, thats probally why I got confused. <font color="#CC9900"><font face="Elephant"> Owl  <font color="#CC0000"><font face="Elephant"> X   <font color="#CC9933"><font face="Elephant"> G   <font color="#CC6633"><font face="Elephant"> l   <font color="#CC3300"><font face="Elephant"> itt   <font color="#CC3333"><font face="Elephant"> er   <font color="#993300"><font face="Elephant">4LIFE..    The colors of fall 04:35, October 9, 2011 (UTC)

She was named Lostface by Bluestar. Then, later one, Firestar renamed her Brightheart. The order it's in now is just fine. =) 04:40, October 9, 2011 (UTC)

Got it. And I think I'm almost done, guys. 14:11, October 10, 2011 (UTC)

Can you expand Sign of the Moon? 16:43, October 10, 2011 (UTC)

Lilyfur ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r  Calling all  the monsters! 00:28, October 5, 2011 (UTC)

Could you add another quote? <font color="#CC9900"><font face="Elephant"> Owl  <font color="#CC0000"><font face="Elephant"> X   <font color="#CC9933"><font face="Elephant"> G   <font color="#CC6633"><font face="Elephant"> l   <font color="#CC3300"><font face="Elephant"> itt   <font color="#CC3333"><font face="Elephant"> er   <font color="#993300"><font face="Elephant">4LIFE..    The colors of fall 00:49, October 5, 2011 (UTC) Done, and I added descriptions for the second and third quote. S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r  Calling all  the monsters! 21:14, October 6, 2011 (UTC)

Is there a better main quote you could give her? Like something describing her personality, or something. Also, make a space between the two quotes in the section. 01:44, October 11, 2011 (UTC)

Could you add more detail to the last sentence of CotC? 17:27, October 11, 2011 (UTC)

Nope, those are the only things that are longer than 3 words she said. I added the space, and I'll detail in a sec. (Sorry if I sound confusing at on epoint, I can't think straight, casue someone ran over my kitty about an hour ago :/ )   S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 00:20, October 12, 2011 (UTC)

Detailed. S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 00:32, October 12, 2011 (UTC)

Anything else? S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 23:47, October 16, 2011 (UTC)

Jake ~ Silver Nomination
Comments <font color="#CC9900"><font face="Elephant"> Owl  <font color="#CC0000"><font face="Elephant"> X   <font color="#CC9933"><font face="Elephant"> G   <font color="#CC6633"><font face="Elephant"> l   <font color="#CC3300"><font face="Elephant"> itt   <font color="#CC3333"><font face="Elephant"> er   <font color="#993300"><font face="Elephant">4LIFE..    The colors of fall  01:25, October 5, 2011 (UTC)

Sorry, but you'll need to find more quotes. The last quote in the quote section is the same as the main quote, and the second-to-last quote doesn't show his personality. Also add a description to his first quote in the quote section. 22:12, October 5, 2011 (UTC)

Thats okay, but when I searched Bluestar's Prophecy harpercollins I could only see sentences when Bluefur was rememering Pinestar joining the kittypets and wondering if he was seeing Jake, and I'm not sure if those show his personality. I added a description for the first quote. <font color="#CC9900"><font face="Elephant"> Owl  <font color="#CC0000"><font face="Elephant"> X   <font color="#CC9933"><font face="Elephant"> G   <font color="#CC6633"><font face="Elephant"> l   <font color="#CC3300"><font face="Elephant"> itt   <font color="#CC3333"><font face="Elephant"> er   <font color="#993300"><font face="Elephant">4LIFE..    The colors of fall 06:37, October 7, 2011 (UTC) Would you mind adding spaces between the paragraphs in the Bluestar's Prophecy section? Thanks. <font color="orange" style="background:Black">Hollydapple798 Life's no fun without a good scare... 21:02, October 10, 2011 (UTC)

Did Bluestar's Prophecy spacing <font color="#CC9900"><font face="Elephant"> Owl  <font color="#CC0000"><font face="Elephant"> X   <font color="#CC9933"><font face="Elephant"> G   <font color="#CC6633"><font face="Elephant"> l   <font color="#CC3300"><font face="Elephant"> itt   <font color="#CC3333"><font face="Elephant"> er   <font color="#993300"><font face="Elephant">4LIFE..    The colors of fall 05:38, October 12, 2011 (UTC)

Stormkit (SC) ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? 21:41, October 11, 2011 (UTC)

Looks good. Although I think we should wait for Beyond the Code so her history is bigger. 21:45, October 11, 2011 (UTC)

Looks good. Maybe break up The Rescue <font color="#CC9900"><font face="Elephant"> Owl  <font color="#CC0000"><font face="Elephant"> X   <font color="#CC9933"><font face="Elephant"> G   <font color="#CC6633"><font face="Elephant"> l   <font color="#CC3300"><font face="Elephant"> itt   <font color="#CC3333"><font face="Elephant"> er   <font color="#993300"><font face="Elephant">4LIFE..    The colors of fall 05:32, October 12, 2011 (UTC)

There's no reason to wait. Firekit got nominated as well, Silver. xD 05:35, October 12, 2011 (UTC)

And guess who nominated them? xD Definitely not me. :P jk. I broke up the Rescue, and expanded it, since I've actually read the book now. Any other comments? 21:36, October 13, 2011 (UTC)

It looks great to me so far. Maybe say "she was nameless" or something along the lines of that at the beginning of the The Rescue section instead of "Stormkit was nameless". It seems a little self-contradictory the way it is. :P <font color="orange" style="background:Black">Hollydapple798 Happy Halloween! 19:45, October 16, 2011 (UTC)

Ivystar ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 13:48, October 15, 2011 (UTC)

Find another quote if possible, and see if you can elaborate on Code of the Clans a bit. 03:26, October 16, 2011 (UTC)

Could you change "some WindClan kits that fell into the gorge" to "the three WindClan kits that fell into the gorge", or something like that? And could you say "...she wondered if some cat has fallen ill", to "Ivystar wondered if some cat had fallen ill", in the second paragraph? I thought you meant Graywing the first time I read that. XD But really, good job so far. :) <font color="orange" style="background:Black">Hollydapple798 Happy Halloween! 19:40, October 16, 2011 (UTC)

Done   S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 20:38, October 17, 2011 (UTC)

Rowanfur~Silver nomination
Excuse me. I may be somehow doing this wrong. xD I'm nominating him because his page isn't a stub and it seems all the info that can be added on him is added. I cna't find any good quotes for him, but his main quote looks good. . 01:24, October 17, 2011 (UTC)

Bahaha your not doing it wrong ;) Can you expand SkyClan's Destiny at all?   S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 22:58, October 17, 2011 (UTC)

I'll see if i can. :) . 22:59, October 17, 2011 (UTC)

Ok! S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 23:09, October 17, 2011 (UTC)

Hm, I've fixed some sentences and at elast attemped to expand, but there isn't much to expand, he doesn't appear very often. :3 . 23:10, October 17, 2011 (UTC)

That's better ;)   S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 23:42, October 17, 2011 (UTC)

Looks great! Can you find one or two more quotes? 19:28, October 18, 2011 (UTC)

Hm, I looked through the pages where he talk and appears, but nothing is good enough for a quote. Unless, "Of course." Is a good quote. O.o. 22:14, October 18, 2011 (UTC)

Well, the quotes don't have to be spoken by him. They can always be from a narrator or a dialogue quote. The transitions between paragraphs, like "He is not seen for a while" or "he first appears". Could you possibly rephrase those sentences so you don't include those words? If not, it's fine. Nice work! 00:40, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Other than that it looks a lot better than when you started! S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 23:03, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Thanks guys! And I've fixed everything you stated, Atelda. . 23:36, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Your welcome, I think there's basically nothing wrong with it. S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 23:43, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Brightspirit ~ Silver Nomination
A special character such as Brightspirit shouldn't be left unnoticed. Comments? 23:20, October 17, 2011 (UTC)

Very true Cloudy. Can you expand Brightspirit's Mercy at all? It looks kinda ... stubby :P If not than it looks really good. Very good choice. S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 23:49, October 17, 2011 (UTC)

I'm going to rewrite that entire section, actually. 23:54, October 17, 2011 (UTC)

Done, and now I'm going to add quotes. I just noticed the article was missing them. I'm blind, I tell you. 01:06, October 18, 2011 (UTC)

Quotes have been added. There isn't much from Long Shadows to put, so most of mine came from Brightspirit's Mercy. 01:30, October 18, 2011 (UTC)

You don't have to, but I think the article would be better off without the last quote as it doesn' t tell much if anything at all about Brightspirit's personality. Also, could you possibly lead into Long Shadows a bit better rather than "first seen". It's okay if you can't, sometimes it's unavoidable. :P Hehe, epic work! 23:23, October 18, 2011 (UTC)

Well, the only reason the last quote is in there is because it plays a key part in Long Shadows. If you feel I should remove it, then I shall. Also, I fixed the first sentence, although I think I made it worse. 23:28, October 18, 2011 (UTC)

I think it looks fine like that ;) Very good job Cloudskye.   S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 23:33, October 18, 2011 (UTC)

Leopardfoot ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? Dew st  ar  Don't judge me!   23:07, October 18, 2011 (UTC)

Expand Crookedstar's Promise.   S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 23:32, October 18, 2011 (UTC)

Could you also expand Code of the Clans? 18:09, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Ok guys. How do i do that?? Sorry! Dew st  ar  Don't judge me!   21:35, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

You either add more detail or more history. Also, could you possibly find a better main quote? Awesome. 21:45, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

No, you switch out the main quote for something else. Preferably a quote that shows her personality. 22:02, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Basically what Atelda said. ;)   S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 22:12, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Well i don`t have Bluestar`s prophecy and Crookedstar`s promise and i don`t no if Leopardfoot is even in Code of the clans -_- Im trying my best but still i no that Leopardfoot has Pinestar`s kits but i don`t no what Leopardfoot is like nothing explains it???????? And i dont no what expand means like do i take parts from the book? -_-  Dew  st  ar  Don't judge me!   22:43, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Woah, ok, let's slow down. First, it doesn't matter if you have neither of the books, that's what Harper Collins Browse Inside is for ;). Second, If she is mentioned in Code of the Clans, it would be mentioned in her article. Third, If you want to know what she is like, just read her article, most of the time, the stuff in an article, shows her personality, by her actions and words. Fourth, Expand means to make it bigger, so basically, it's detailing it ;) Fifth, you can take parts from the book, and add it too her article if it's nessicary. You try to avoid taking direct quotes, meaning typing word for word of what she says. I hope this helped. S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 22:54, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Molepaw ~Silver Nomination
Anybody know some places he appears? I looked int he books he was in, but I dont know the page numbers, so I cant look into great detail at the moment. Also, if I knew there might be a chance I can add a quote or two. Other than that, his page looks good. . 00:10, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Could you really elaborate on when it's said "he makes minor appearences"? Or possibly add more detail and rephrase the sentence to avoid those phrases^. Awesome so far! 00:43, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Could you add a few quotes (including a main one). 21:30, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Arg. *Facepalm* :3 Did you read my paragrpah up there? I quote: "I dont know the page numbers, so I cant look into great detail at the moment. Also, if I knew there might be a chance I can add a quote or two." I don't know so i can't at the moment. . 22:27, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Hmm, maybe you can detail it with words, instead of stuff used exactly in the book. Like changing the words around, thus expanding the sentence. S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 22:43, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

I tried doing that once or twice, but users kept reverting it. . 22:48, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Oh, well it was worth a try. Maybe they think it was unnessicary, which means you might as well wait to get the book(s) before you expand or detail it. So that your not wasting your time adding and undoing what they are doing. Thanks, for trying! S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 22:58, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

I have the books, I have the whole series, in fact. -- I just don't know the pages where Molekit/paw is exacily mentioned. :3 . 23:17, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Oh, silly me :3. Maybe you could skim through the book? S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 23:27, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

I've already tried that, but if he appears minorly, I doubt i'd be able to spot it. :S. 23:35, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Hmm, true, we'll maybe when your not busy, you could re-read the whole book :P So you can find it :)   S  w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 23:41, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Fuzzypelt ~ Silver Nomination
Fuzzypelt's page is pretty good. Comments? 13:28, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Looks great! But the last paragraph in BP could use a little more deatail if possible. :) . 13:31, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Just if you can expand all of BP than your good. Other than that, it looks good! S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 23:06, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

I wanted to let you know
I have been nominated to be a SW! S w  e  e  t  f  l  o  w  e  r    Calling all the monsters! 20:16, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

Really Sweet! That is totally awesome :)  Dew  st  ar  Don't judge me!   21:42, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

That's wonderful, Sweetflower, but seriously, you don't need to announce it on the whole talk page beca. use people KNOW. So seriously. 01:10, October 20, 2011 (UTC)