Warriors Wiki talk:Charart/Accepted 102

Dove's Wing (SP) ~ Approved
victory screech 04:26, March 22, 2013 (UTC)


 * dies* Darken the shading just a small tad? ouo . 04:51, March 22, 2013 (UTC)

Soften the texture just a little? 05:19, March 22, 2013 (UTC)

Re-uploaded. 06:41, March 22, 2013 (UTC)

Shall we go CBA? Wonderful image, Sheepy. 8D

Approved.

Snow Hare (E) - Approved
First white cat... Comments? 07:56, March 15, 2013 (UTC)

Blur the shading a lot, and lighten it a tad..although if you blur it, you may not /have/ to lighten it, and that's totally up to you. The shading makes parts of it look awfully gray. Not bad for your first white cat, and I can testify that they're often very difficult to shade properly so they still look white. x.x

Re-uploaded. I tried changing the color of the shading. Changes may not be showing. 08:24, March 15, 2013 (UTC)

Hmm...much better (I really like that tint .o.), but I think it needs to be blurred a bit more, especially along the back.

Re-uploaded  08:32, March 15, 2013 (UTC)

Add more shading, it looks that she had almost none. great job deree 23:17, March 15, 2013 (UTC)

Also, there's a blank pixel in the eye. Fill it in, please? =3 23:18, March 15, 2013 (UTC)

Re-uploaded 01:30, March 16, 2013 (UTC)

Lighten the shading a wee bit? It kinda looks dark for a white cat. Otherwise, excellent job! Be e   bs  01:31, March 16, 2013 (UTC)

You know, I think the shading that was there before Cloudwhisker commented was perfectly acceptable. I disagree with the improvement you made on the image. However, others may disagree with me, and changing it is entirely up to you.

I must agree with what cloudy has to say, it didn't need anymore shading and I preferred the image in the last upload. And Beebs, white cats can have dark shading just fine so long as the shading doesn't make the entire image look gray, which this doesn't at all.

So, I guess I can revert it back? 01:43, March 16, 2013 (UTC)

Yes, you're more than welcome to. Also, as a head's up, Bloo. If you don't want to do something another member requests, you're more than welcome to say no to a critique.

'''Re-uploaded. '''Thanks for the tip Cloud. 01:49, March 16, 2013 (UTC)

Blur the shading a tad. Wonderful image~ 17:11, March 17, 2013 (UTC)

I think the shading's blurred enough, actually.

Most of it is, but I think the haunch could be blurred just a tad.

Re-uploaded.  07:09, March 22, 2013 (UTC)

This is cool. .o. CBA?

Sorry, but blur the shading some, then we'll go CBA again. 04:28 Sat Mar 23

Re-uploaded. 08:19, March 23, 2013 (UTC)

Comments before approval? 19:44, March 23, 2013 (UTC)

Approved.

Snowstar (Star) - Approved
merpp. need help with the texture. 01:46, March 5, 2013 (UTC)

Lighten the shading. Yes, you can pick, but I think this is much too dark for it to really be artist's choice. Also, define the ear pink.

You may also want to consider smoothing it out some. Also, I wouldn't worry about the texture, but if you're willing to try it, you should try smudging the shading with a very small (1px) brush. I also suggest you duplicate the shading layer in case you dislike the texture. It'll take some time, but it should pay off in the end. ;) 23:15, March 5, 2013 (UTC)

My, this is pretty! There seems to be some empty pixels in the eye, along with a bit of brown that shouldn't be there. Last, could you also identify the depth of the eyes? This is really gorgeous in my opinion, Bramblewind! 23:52, March 5, 2013 (UTC)

^I'm pretty sure they aren't blank pixles, they're most likley reflections from the light. And I think the brown is okay, it gives it a bit of a realistic effect. But anyone can deny if they want. . 01:19, March 6, 2013 (UTC)

They're supposed to be stars cause he's in starclan :) by the way atelda by smooth it out do you mean, like, blur it more? 04:28, March 6, 2013 (UTC)

Erfka derf, sorry about that. But maybe still define eye depth? 23:54, March 6, 2013 (UTC)

Reuploaded Thats cause i hadnt reuploaded yet. well now i just did pwned wait what? anyway deepend eyes, blurred the shading alot, added another layer of earpink. the texture didnt turn out so hot thoughit was hot- a HOT MESS lightened the shading too, i personally think its a little too light. Anyoune agree? ;)   00:06, March 7, 2013 (UTC)

Define the unshaded parts of the tail. 03:56, March 8, 2013 (UTC)

This also looks well over 50% and 80% done. I'm changing the heading and I'll move you up to an apprentice. 21:58, March 8, 2013 (UTC)

Re-uppy :) yeyyy apprenticehood 02:22, March 10, 2013 (UTC)

Critique? Heelooo... *echo* *wind whistles by* 06:17, March 12, 2013 (UTC)

Bramblewind, please be patient with us. I don't know if changes are showing, but the shading still seems a tad bit dark to me. You could always try tinting it, but that's just a suggestion, I'm not telling you that you have to. 23:58, March 12, 2013 (UTC)

Ivy it was two whole days, they had plenty enough right and reason to ask for critique, they're fine. As for the image, it still needs to be textured, and the "highlights" seem really bright, whether that just being a bright base coat with dark shading or actual highlights, it just seems really... shiny.

Reupload. Sorry for teh inactivity, dang teachers need to stop giving so much hw... and also sorry for being stupid, i cudda waited a bit longer :/. anyway yah darkend highlights, lightened shading, redid texture. 16:26, March 16, 2013 (UTC)

Define the texture. x3 17:14, March 17, 2013 (UTC)

Re-Up 'yo 05:34, March 20, 2013 (UTC)

Lovely charart. CBA? 21:12, March 20, 2013 (UTC)

Sorry to interrupt, but the texture on the leader looks more...cloudy then the simple lines. Make it match more? Bb un   legs  21:58, March 20, 2013 (UTC)

Reup I think I've spent too much on this... I hope this doesn't seem like any sort of threat but if this isn't approved over this weekend I'm probably gonna withdraw and find something else. 16:07, March 22, 2013 (UTC)

CBA once more? 19:46, March 23, 2013 (UTC)

Sorry to interrupt, but the texture still doesn't match D:. Other than that, nice job! Bb un   legs  19:48, March 23, 2013 (UTC)

It's fine. It's not going to match completely since the cats aren't even in the same position. Continuing CBA. 19:52, March 23, 2013 (UTC)

Approved.

Silver Frost(E) - Approved
Based off of a mary-sue looking cat, comments? I kinda like this. =D

The shading's making it look a bit grey. Fix that? very nice 05:51 Sun Mar 10

Maybe smudge the grey a bit? Lovely Duck Bloo  and  Brokenstar~ 05:55, March 10, 2013 (UTC)

The grey can stay as it is - it's fine. 05:57 Sun Mar 10

Re-uploaded Thanks Bloo =) 06:02, March 10, 2013 (UTC)

Define the shading tons and make the white a little less grey lookin 06:47, March 10, 2013 (UTC)

Re-uploaded 19:22, March 10, 2013 (UTC)

Smooth the shading out a bit. 23:20, March 10, 2013 (UTC)

It might just be my screen or how you tinted it if you did, but the white looks creamy or pale red almost. Ca na  di  a~  Sirius is hiding... 19:43, March 11, 2013 (UTC)

Re-uploaded It was the red-tinted shading, Pad. 8D Blue and purple tints ftw~  Changes are not showing. 22:53, March 11, 2013 (UTC)

White's a bit gray, either lighten the base white or make the shading a bit thinner so it doesn't spread over so much of the white?

Re-uploaded asdfghjk;' This shading... 02:39, March 12, 2013 (UTC)

Can you define or darken the shading just a bit? 04:15, March 12, 2013 (UTC)

And blur it a touch, too? 04:24, March 12, 2013 (UTC)

Re-uploaded 12:27, March 12, 2013 (UTC)

Im not sure but I see some waste around. Or my monitor is dirty.. ._. 12:58, March 12, 2013 (UTC)

I see it too Leafy. Also blur the front leg's shading. 22:52, March 12, 2013 (UTC)

The patches on the face are fine, but on the patches on her back, they almost look motion blurred to me. I'm not sure if that's just me or not, but the blurring on them do look different from the face  00:05, March 13, 2013 (UTC)

Re-uploaded I think the patches are fine, the only layer that I used motion blur on was one of my shading layers, which is hidden because it looked bad, so I didn't change them. 00:54, March 13, 2013 (UTC)

Blur the front leg shading, and there's waste near the chest and bottom right corner. Be e   bs  00:57, March 13, 2013 (UTC)

There's a white pixel on the tip of the tail and on the gray paw. Could you blur the patches just a bit?

Blur the shading between the two legs facing us and stomach area (searching my cat vocabulary here...) 02:13, March 13, 2013 (UTC)

Also not sure but I still see some waste in front of the gray front paw.. Nice job though! 03:58, March 13, 2013 (UTC)

There is actually waste around the whole charart, I think you erased close to the body, but not a bit farther out. . 01:42, March 14, 2013 (UTC)

The best way to remove all the waste it to select outside of the lineart layer, then go on your shading layer and do the "cut" or "clear" option. This should be similar and work on all programs (though, Sai's select tool isn't my personal favorite, if'n you do it on that)  17:00, March 15, 2013 (UTC)

Re-uploaded 00:25, March 16, 2013 (UTC)

Define the shading.

Re-uploaded 02:47, March 16, 2013 (UTC)

Define the shading more-so on the gray. 14:19, March 17, 2013 (UTC)

Re-uploaded 17:12, March 17, 2013 (UTC)

The gray needs to be blurred, the shading needs to be blurred, and the entire shading needs to be defined. 19:41, March 19, 2013 (UTC)

Re-uploaded. The gray and shading are blurred enough, but I did darken the shading a bit. 23:16, March 19, 2013 (UTC)

No, I think Icy's right. Blur the gray just a little bit? The white's also looking a tad gray, but I think that's alright since shading white and gray is a pain.

Re-uploaded 02:36, March 20, 2013 (UTC)

Make the shading less blurred on the white.

I honestly think that it's fine, I'll just get told to blur it again if I unblur it, but if someone else agrees, then I'll do it. 02:19, March 21, 2013 (UTC)

I'm having a rough time seeing the shading in general. It needs to be defined a lot, as it's overblurred and making the white seem darker than it should be.

Re-uploaded Redid my primary shading layer, so hopefully it helped. 21:35, March 21, 2013 (UTC)

There is a tiny bit of waste on the neck :3. 06:17, March 22, 2013 (UTC)

Re-uploaded 22:44, March 22, 2013 (UTC)

Nice :D Define the shading a tad.

Thanks! =) Re-uploaded 04:56, March 23, 2013 (UTC)

This is lovely. CBA? 19:45, March 23, 2013 (UTC)

Approved.

Falling Feather (Ro) - Approved
Woo~ It's been a while since I did a rogue 01:40, March 21, 2013 (UTC)

Define the shading.

Re-uploaded 21:12, March 21, 2013 (UTC)

Darken the earpink and nose a bit? 22:41, March 21, 2013 (UTC)

Re-uploaded 01:18, March 22, 2013 (UTC)

CBA? 19:41, March 23, 2013 (UTC)

Approved.

Cloud Spots (Ro) ~ Approved
Comments? 15:19, March 19, 2013 (UTC)

Add shading to the ear furthest from us, whiten the white and define the shading a tad. Bb un   legs  15:21, March 19, 2013 (UTC)

The light source doesn't really make sense on the paws 15:32, March 19, 2013 (UTC)

Just a heads up. You don't have to match the style for Cloudspots, since we have no confirmation it's actually him.

The white on the chest seems to stretch a bit too far, so he has white shoulders now rather than just a white chest. Shrink it down a bit?

The white looks very gray. Not so sure about the general light source either... 02:13, March 20, 2013 (UTC)

I don't know if this belongs here or not, but if a character's name and description match that of an existing cat and for the time period, wouldn't it save some grief to match the pattern so it doesn't have to get redone later? I mean yeah, there's no proof, but it'd save tweaking it. 02:45, March 20, 2013 (UTC)

It's completely up to the artist, but yes, it'd save later tweaking if the character's confirmed, if the artist chooses to do so.

Reuploaded. I figured it most likely was Cloudspots, so I decided to save a possible tweak and try to match them. 20:26, March 21, 2013 (UTC)

The shading from the belly to the top of the torso looks so black that I cannot see the lineart. I don't know if this is just my computer or not though, and if it's just me then ignore this ^^ 03:27, March 22, 2013 (UTC)

Reuploaded. Changes might not be showing. 22:43, March 22, 2013 (UTC)

Looks good to me. CBA? 19:43, March 23, 2013 (UTC)

Approved.