Warriors Wiki talk:Books

Canon
Hey so I found this page floating around with no project on it, and it seemed more PB oriented than anything so I thought to pop it in here. Ik it's with the category of Role Play Phenomenon, and everything else from there has been deleted, but... couldn't it be revamped? I wanted to pose the question here of whether it should be deleted like the rest of the category, or made a part of PB and revamped/ add new stuff and such. Thoughts?

Yea, I agree with that. It is information for the reader and it should be in PB. 14:55, 4/22/2017 14:55, April 22, 2017 (UTC)ggC1ND3R_STR1P3

Me too. It does contain many PB-related articles. --  17:35, April 29, 2017 (UTC)

I think it should be revamped and made part of PB. 16:14 Sun May 7

It looks like everyone supports the page being revamped. Any other comments? 23:34 Sun May 14

Dark River/Chapter 5 - Silver Nomination
So this is my first nomination! This took forever to write! I also wasn't sure about the main quote...? 22:51, May 17, 2017 (UTC)

The majority of the summary is in past tense, so can you go through and make it present tense?

Done. I think I got it all. 21:26, May 18, 2017 (UTC)

There's still some: (and a few more I missed in this list too)
 * Hollypaw was watching for him to slip back into the apprentices' den.
 * She never watched him like a traitor, she knew they were just playing, not swapping Clan secrets.
 * The eyes lost their playful glint, fixing him with a vicious stare. This wasn't Hollypaw, Lionpaw realizes as a growl sounds up from the burrow. It was a fox.
 * He pauses as Lionpaw crosses camp and asks if Lionpaw was all right. Lionpaw grumbles to him it was just a nightmare.
 * Brambleclaw calls down to the returning patrol if everything was all right.
 * When Hollypaw returned, she was exuasted.

Also, this sentence: 'I wish that were true, Brambleclaw says' - we aren't supposed to write using I, so if you could fix that tense. And 'And if that means proving yourself to those who doubt you, then do it. You can't force Hollypaw to believe you. You have to show her you are worth believing in.' and also a few other spots in the summary. The tense should be in the form of 'He says' '[Character] meows' etc. and this seems still to be in the context of a book. So, for example, one stretch of dialogue would be '[Character says something]. He continues [says more stuff]. [The Deputy] finishes that [says something], and not broken up like that one fragment I noted above. So like; pronouns instead of just saying 'You have to' and assume a cat's speaking.

Also, there's a good bit of redundancy in the summary - in the form of names. If you could go in and swap out the names/pronouns just to switch it up. Usually do this when it's used twice in a row, to make it flow better, and to not start ever sentence with the same thing. Such as:
 * Lionpaw's blood turns to ice. Hollypaw's eyes are green, not amber. Lionpaw steps back.
 * Brackenfur promises a hunt after battle training. Brackenfur darts out the tunnel,
 * Lionpaw hisses he won't. Lionpaw feels Hollypaw dart underneath him, her teeth grazing his hind leg.

And I think you get the point. There's more, but I'm not going to list all of them, because they're easy to find.

There are also fragment sentences in this, ones that don't make sense as a stand alone. These should be removed or merged somehow to make them complete sentences. That, and there's just a lot of sentences that are sentences, but they're very short and choppy.(a few are fine, but a lot isn't great, if you know what I mean) Try and fix those, just to give the summary a better flow. Here's a few of both types, but there's more in the summary:
 * But he knew his Clanmates wouldn't see it like that.
 * Heatherpaw calls him.
 * Heatherpaw's eyes shine.
 * She is on guard.
 * He begins to dream.

Sorry for the long comment, but the summary should flow from a present tense, flowing summary of the book. Usually, as a summary, it doesn't include too many extranneous details that clutter up the flow of the article and make it harder to read, so idk.

Thanks, that helped a lot. Hopefully I got them all now. I apologize, my eyes aren't sharp with grammar. 23:37, May 18, 2017 (UTC)

There are a few more fragment sentences, spelling issues and only a couple of grammar issues. Sorry if that seems too much, but this is a good article otherwise. 18:14, May 20, 2017 (UTC)

All right, I went through and actually found them. Maybe I'm becoming a little sharper since I've been working on it more. Anyway, I think I got them all this time, hopefully. 21:44, May 22, 2017 (UTC)

CBV? 04:02 Thu May 25

The Sun Trail/Chapter 6 - Silver Nomination
wow this was way too long I can finally live again --

Lots of this is in past tense, especially the back half, but more so overall. Can you fix that?

That and add a quote^^

Fixed, also a chat archive

11:48 (aest) Neon Skylite tfw you need a page cite for a chapter's quote but you're using the PDF that has no page numbers and your Owen Richardson copy isn't accepted because you need the Wayne McLoughlin print

So if any saint can find a specific page cite for my quote that'd be great --

Your page numbers will be fine, Neon. There is no rule that says it has to be the original printing. If someone's forcing that on you, they are completely and totally wrong.

Thanks, Jayce. I added my print's number. --

There's a red link 06:01, May 25, 2017 (UTC)

I'm not trying to start something, I swear, but if you look in the guidelines, under General Considerations, it says: "In references, page numbers from the first US edition of the book shall be mentioned." It clearly says that we take the first US printing. Neon's numbers coincedentally happen to be okay in this case, so that's not an issue. However, Skye, that rule is very much there, and anyone in the project is within their right to have someone change page numbers as such if they happen to not be the same. And, they'd be in the right until that guideline is changed by proper discussion. So for everyone's future reference - we're not trying to force anything on anyone, but if we use a few of the pdfs out there, we're gonna have page 700s on pages p soon.

Fixed. And also, Spooky, I was using the reprinted Owen Richardson -- not the PDF. I think that was what gave me that "anything that is Owen Richardson is wrong and shouldn't be used for anything, kek?" thought when I needed to find a quote cite. --

Comments before vote? 19:05, May 27, 2017 (UTC)

Moth Flight's Vision/Manga - Silver Nomination
Credit to Shypaw for like 99.99% of this. Pretty sure all I did was space some stuff and link some words. 00:42, May 25, 2017 (UTC)

Ravenpaw's Farewell/Chapter 4 ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? Starling  spots  12:41, May 28, 2017 (UTC)