Warriors Wiki talk:Characters/Archive 60

Splash When Fish Leaps ~ Silver Nomination
Comments?  ☮Owl      X      Glitter☮..    4EVER The Peace is Perfect☯  05:29, September 24, 2011 (UTC)

Sign of the Moon seems like it's just listing out the appearences/mentions Splash had in the book. Connect many of the short sentences together as they're quite abridged. As well as adding transitions and paragraph breaks where needed. 15:17, September 24, 2011 (UTC)

I agree with Atelda. Also, find another quote if possible. The main quote shouldn't be repeated in the "Quotes" section. Redundancy doesn't look good. =P 15:21, September 24, 2011 (UTC)

Just to let you know the main quote wasn't repeated in the Quotes section when I checked and I did add in another quote before. I'm not trying to sound stubborn or anything, it's just that I did and when I checked it wasn't there. Anyway I tried to smooth the Sign of the Moon section and added another 3 quotes. Although I'm not sure if the two last quotes should both be in there, or only one of them, or neither, or if they should be connected, because they're both on the same page.  ☮Owl      X      Glitter☮..    4EVER The Peace is Perfect☯  01:20, September 25, 2011 (UTC)

It looks pretty good. One thing that caught my eye is that the first paragraph of the SoTM didn't read smoothly. Try merging some of the first few sentences, like where Splash is mentioned going out on patrol and when she helps Dovewing out of the snow. Other than that, I think it looks pretty good! Holly dapple798  01:57, September 26, 2011 (UTC)

Done <font color="#9999FF"><font face="Rockwell Condensed"> ☮Owl    <font color="00FFFF"><font face="Rockwell Condensed">  X    <font color="9966CC"><font face="Rockwell Condensed">  Glitter☮..    <font color="FF66FF">4EVER <font color="FF33FF">The Peace is Perfect☯  05:26, September 26, 2011 (UTC)

You should only have three quotes. I think you should keep the first, second and last. However, it's up to you, since you're the one nominating her. 06:37, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

I think I agree with you Cloudy, and I did delete the third and fourth quote. <font color="#CC9900"><font face="Elephant"> Owl  <font color="#CC0000"><font face="Elephant"> X   <font color="#CC9933"><font face="Elephant"> G   <font color="#CC6633"><font face="Elephant"> l   <font color="#CC3300"><font face="Elephant"> itt   <font color="#CC3333"><font face="Elephant"> er   <font color="#993300"><font face="Elephant">4LIFE..    The colors of fall  01:17, September 30, 2011 (UTC)

Adding to CBV list... 02:56, October 8, 2011 (UTC)

CBV? 00:41, October 15, 2011 (UTC)

Vote is up! 03:17, October 16, 2011 (UTC)

Brackenfur ~ Silver Nomination
I have been working on him a little bit and I think its good! 04:02, September 25, 2011 (UTC)

Flesh out Firestar's Quest a little bit. 00:12, September 26, 2011 (UTC)

There's some trivia that needs to be cited. Could The Darkest Hour, The Sight, Outcast, Night Whispers, and Sign of the Moon be fleshed out/expanded? 00:14, September 26, 2011 (UTC)

Are you still working on this? 03:46, October 4, 2011 (UTC)

Tinycloud ~ Silver Nomination
Aside from a few minor things, I think she looks good. Comments? 00:13, September 26, 2011 (UTC)

Flesh out The Rescue. Is it possible that Firestar's Quest could be expanded? 00:31, September 26, 2011 (UTC)

I can't flesh out what she doesn't appear in, Icey. She's only mentioned on like, a page. 00:34, September 26, 2011 (UTC)

Seems pretty good, to me. ;) Though Tinycloud was mentioned again in The Rescue on page 45 by Sandypaw I think... Mi  st  y!  21:04, September 27, 2011 (UTC)

Yep. She was. I didn't catch it at first. I fixed it now. 22:08, September 27, 2011 (UTC)

Can you add a description for the second quote in the quote section? 22:20, September 27, 2011 (UTC)

Done. 22:25, September 27, 2011 (UTC)

Looks good! I'll add it to the CBV list. 23:16, September 29, 2011 (UTC)

CBV? 00:41, October 15, 2011 (UTC)

Vote is up! 03:17, October 16, 2011 (UTC)