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The Apprentice's Quest/Chapter 6 ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? Song  heart  20:29, August 23, 2016 (UTC)


 * Is there a quote you can add?
 * 'He' sounds slightly redundant at the end of the last paragraph.

Added quote and fixed paragraph. Song  heart  20:44, August 23, 2016 (UTC)

Correct me if I'm wrong, but the chapter is from pages 77-89 and the quote is from page 70. Was that a typo or is the quote not from the right chapter? Also put quote marks around the quote

Fixed. Song   heart  01:47, August 25, 2016 (UTC)

Would Leafpool be classified as a major character or can we bump her down to minor? 06:05, August 25, 2016 (UTC)

I personally think Leafpool should stay a major character as she took Alderpaw to Twolegplace and introduced him to StarClan. Song  heart  01:12, August 27, 2016 (UTC)

I think you're right. Comments before vote? 01:29, August 27, 2016 (UTC)

I'm really sorry to interrupt your CBV but:


 * Can you link 'the prophecy' in the 2nd paragraph to Prophecies_and_Omens instead, since that is the specific prophecy Needlepaw is talking about?
 * Can you link territory in the second paragraph to The Lake Territories or to ThunderClan
 * Can you add a transition for the 3rd paragraph? It suddenly goes from Alderpaw being in ShadowClan to him going to the Moonpool.
 * In the last paragraph, "Alderpaw realizes this must be Firestar and thinks he seemed familiar and wonders if this was the same cat he saw in his weird dream before." Could you split this into 2 sentences? Right now it's a bit too long imo.
 * Also in the last paragraph, "The young cat sees a group of cats in a gorge, such as a mottled brown-and-cream she-cat, a ginger tom, and a black-and-white she-cat partaking in a warrior ceremony." I think it would be more fitting if 'such as' would be replaced with 'including', since that word just seems like it would make more sense for the context. That might just be me though, so if you disagree then you don't have to. 01:09 Sat Sep 3

Edited Song   heart  20:24, September 3, 2016 (UTC)

Re-CBV? 20:27 Sat Sep 3

Vote's up! 18:57 Mon Sep 5

A Dangerous Path/Chapter 5 - Silver Nomination
01:20, August 27, 2016 (UTC)
 * In the 3rd paragraph, maybe link 'carrionplace disease' or just 'disease' as Diseases_and_Injuries, since that is the specific disease that the SC cats had?
 * In the 4th pagraph, "Runningnose explains that the reason why he believes this is beyond the omen mentioned by Tigerstar at the Gathering. It is because ShadowClan's previous leader, Nightstar, had not been accepted by StarClan and had not received his nine lives, which is why he died so quickly from the rat sickness." I think there is a grammar error in the first sentnce, since it says "Runningnose explains that the reason why..." but it explains why in the next sentence.
 * In the last paragraph, maybe link 'territory' as The_Forest_Territories instead, since it is talking about specifically windclan's territory? 19:19 Wed Aug 31

Updated. 20:25, August 31, 2016 (UTC)

Comments before vote? 00:53 Sat Sep 3

Vote's up! 18:57 Mon Sep 5