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Leafpool's Wish/Chapter 1 ~ Silver Nomination
Here's another, I should probably go edit something other than chap. subpages though now... ;3   20:05, February 23, 2016 (UTC)

In the second paragraph, it says 'remembers' a lot of times and sounds redundant, can you change those remembers to other similar words? 17:42 Sat Feb 27

Updated " 18:19 Sat Feb 27 "

Comments before vote? 03:05, March 4, 2016 (UTC)

Actually this was actually nominated by me. I just never got around to putting the grade on the article. Sorry but I'm not gonna put the vote up for this. 22:45, March 4, 2016 (UTC)

April FA
Maybe Yellowfang's Secret this month? Or we could go back to Goosefeather's Curse. 00:34, February 25, 2016 (UTC)

I think Goosefeather's Curse would make a good FA, although I'd be fine with either. 00:37, February 25, 2016 (UTC)

Wait I thought that YS was already the February FA? And wasn't the march FA decided to be Mapleshade's Vengenace already? Unless this is for April? 00:57 Thu Feb 25

Wait, it's February now so why is Path of Stars up as the Books feature on the main page? I'm lost. 01:03, February 25, 2016 (UTC)

Hold on, no, MV was February's FA but since I am horrible I totally forgot about that and that's kinda the February FA for now. I edited the template - it's just taking a bit to show up. And we need a new one for March, right? I don't think YS was February's ... 01:08, February 25, 2016 (UTC)

Wait. I'm awful. MV is March's. Okay I totally apologize. This is April's. 01:09, February 25, 2016 (UTC)

I hope this is okay, but I changed the header to say April, just so it's accurate. 16:16, February 26, 2016 (UTC)

It's fine. When I posted this I was like 24 horus without sleep so like we shouldn't blame me for being dumb :P 19:49, February 26, 2016 (UTC)

Eclipse/Chapter 5 ~ Silver Nomination
Not a very good quote, let me know if I should change it cause I've a couple others. 00:09, February 27, 2016 (UTC)

Small things:

1. In the third paragraph, the sentence, 'Mousewhisker is saying many things with excitement, such as catching a squirrel." Idk, it just sounds a bit odd, could you rephrase it? Also, "He wonders if this meant that all the Clans, Tribes were somehow linked." is gramatically incorrect, could you somehow rephrase this too? And "Sorreltail, sensing Jaypaw's hunger, mews that they should get back to camp, darting up the grassy hillside, back towards the forest." is a run-on I think.

2. I know I sometimes mistake present-tense for past, but I think these might be in past-tense: In the second paragraph, "saying they were going on a hunting patrol". In the 4th paragraph: "...where the forest ended and opened up to the grassland leading to the lake." Is this past tense also? And in the 8th paragraph, "he didn't know which Clan or Tribe had used these tunnels to test apprentices to become warriors.." also might be past-tense. But I'm not sure I might be wrong.

3. In the 6th paragraph: "Mousewhisker reluctantly agrees, but then brightens as he says that if they're near water, he might catch a fish. Jaypaw doubts it, thinking that unless he had a RiverClan mentor, he wouldn't catch a fish." 'Fish' sounds kinda redundant in these two sentences.

Also, the character list isn't complete... :P For example, Poppypaw and Thornclaw aren't listed.

00:59 Wed Mar 2

Updated Fixed everything I think. " 23:11 Wed Mar 2 "

Okay I hate to make you do this, but the summary itself isn't complete. I'm rereading the book right now, and there's still more in the chapter that hasn't been written... 03:50 Thu Mar 3

Added " 03:23 Sat Mar 5 "

Eclipse/Chapter 6 ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? 00:35, February 27, 2016 (UTC)

Can you make an important events section and put honeypaw and poppypaw's warrior ceremony there? 18:16 Sat Feb 27

Sure, but how do you make one of those blue dropdown 'ceremony' things? I haven't quite figured them out, but I'll try. " 18:18 Sat Feb 27 "

There are some run-on sentences (or at least grammatically incorrect sentences_ in the first two paragraphs. Also, there are some spots in paste-tense. 04:13 Sun Feb 28

Fixed Also thanks for adding the ceremony dropdowns Maple! " 13:33 Sun Feb 28 "

No problem. Also, in I think the first paragraph, "She bumps into Jaypaw, who is noted to be mad at his mentor, and Hollypaw wonders how he could've fallen out with his mentor." Could you replace one of these 'his mentors' with 'Leafpool' or 'her' or something, it sounds redundant.

Also, in the third paragraph, there is lots of repetition for a type of sentence, such as "Honeyfern is noted to glance shyly at Berrynose", or "Lionpaw is shown to be scornful,". If that makes sense? So the (character) is (shown/noted/mentioned/etc.) to be (adjective). It just sounds odd because that appears like 3 times within a paragraph, so could you change a few of these? For example, like making the Lionpaw one be, Lionpaw is scornful, or something like that. 03:03 Tue Mar 1

Fixed " 12:16 Tue Mar 1 "

Comments before vote? 22:49, March 4, 2016 (UTC)

Eclipse/Chapter 2 ~Silver Nomination
It's short, but there's not much I can add to it. 16:58, February 27, 2016 (UTC)

There's nothing wrong with a short subpage! :3 Anyways, there is a section in the first paragraph, "Tawnypelt announces the apprentices' return." Could you specify where the apprentices returned from? Also in the first paragraph, " Stormfur and Brook thank them for it, though Jaypaw can sense discomfort being the two, " The 'the two' part is kind of confusing, maybe say 'the two who won't be continuing to the lake' or something like that? Also, I don't think it should be linked to mates because it doesn't really have anything to do with mates. 04:04 Sun Feb 28

Fixed " 13:29 Sun Feb 28 "

Comments before vote? ` 22:49, March 4, 2016 (UTC)

The Fourth Apprentice/Chapter 1 - Silver Nomination
Comments? 17:57, February 27, 2016 (UTC)

Could you fix the very last sentence? It's a bit of a run-on. Also, in the first paragraph there are some past tense areas. " 22:54 Sat Feb 27 "

Actually, I didn't see any past-tense sections in the first paragraph... but,

1. In the first paragraph, when it says, "As the cats cheer for them, they look proud, as do their mentors, Squirrelflight and Cloudtail." Could you change 'them' with 'the new warriors' or 'the young cats' or something? Since it says 'the cats' it makes it a little bit confusing on who 'they' is.

2. In the 2nd paragraph, "Lionblaze looks around, realizing how thin the RiverClan cats look, and noting that they are starving. Graystripe points out that they are all starving, which Lionblaze realizes is also true." The 'they are starving' part seems redundant, could you somehow fix this?

In the 6th paragraph, maybe link 'lives' to 'Leadership Ceremony', since 'Nine Lives' is redirected toward there? Although you might not think it's fitting, so it's really up to you.

Also, this is really picky, but for all other subpages the chapters template comes before the cliffnotes template, so could you switch the order?

<span style="">02:45 Fri Mar 4

Updated. Sorry, I forgot about this. I fixed what was suggested. There are a few past tense words in paragraph 1 but they're intentional (they're used to refer to events that happened before the book). 03:06, March 4, 2016 (UTC)

Comments before vote? 22:49, March 4, 2016 (UTC)

The Ultimate Guide ~ Silver Nomination
Credit to the people who did basically everything... I fixed some spelling errors. :3 " <span style="">19:59 Sun Feb 28 "

O.o also there's not much on there, but I think that's the way the other field guides were done so correct me if I'm wrong. " <span style="">19:59 Sun Feb 28 "

I feel /really/ stupid right now. I found this: Silver Nomination - The Ultimate Guide so this nominaton is not needed. However, the cliffnotes, gallery, and main article of The Ultimate Guide are still graded bronze so... Can a lead add the silver template to all 3 of these? Thanks. " <span style="">18:33 Thu Mar 3 "

Yep I'll do that right now. 22:49, March 4, 2016 (UTC)

The Lost Warrior/Chapter 3 ~ Silver Nomination
I am amused that I had literally put a bunch of links in main quote. Comments? <span style="">02:57 Tue Mar 1

There's a redlink.Pehaps rephrase the last sentence of the 2nd paragraph? It's a little fragment. Also, could you perhaps split the first paragraph into two paragraphs? It's awfully long for just one imo.. " <span style="">01:20 Wed Mar 2 "

Updated <span style="">01:44 Wed Mar 2

Comments before vote? 22:49, March 4, 2016 (UTC)

The Lost Warrior/Chapter 4 ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? <span style="">02:57 Tue Mar 1

Minor things: Pov should probably be "PoV", it's like that on all he other subpages. There's a redlink for forest? (on my computer) Under errors, it should probably be bullet-pointed. " <span style="">01:18 Wed Mar 2 "

Done Uh I really need to learn how to spell 'territories' <span style="">01:44 Wed Mar 2

Comments before vote? 22:49, March 4, 2016 (UTC)

Warrior's Refuge/Chapter 1 ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? <span style="">02:57 Tue Mar 1

I don't know if there's anything you can do, but the chapter dropdown thing says "Not Applicable Yet" on my screen. Perhaps it's an error in the coding? " <span style="">01:23 Wed Mar 2 "

Fixed <span style="">01:44 Wed Mar 2

Comments before vote? 22:49, March 4, 2016 (UTC)

Fire and Ice/Chapter 13 ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? " <span style="">23:11 Wed Mar 2 "

In the third-to-last paragraph, the word 'Fireheart' sounds a bit redundant... <span style="">02:06 Fri Mar 4

Fixed " <span style="">02:48 Sat Mar 5 "

Warrior's Refuge/Chapter 2 ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? <span style="">03:29 Thu Mar 3

In the 6th paragraph, could you tweak the first sentence? It says something like, 'though he thought' which looks a little weird to me. imo " <span style="">13:49 Thu Mar 3 "

updated <span style="">22:42 Thu Mar 3

Warrior's Refuge/Chapter 3 ~ Silver Nomination
Looks like I've forgotten a quote for this one, so it would be great if someone could add one for me, as I don't have the book. Comments? <span style="">03:29 Thu Mar 3

Could you fix the last paragraph? Is says 'barn' a lot of times and seems redundant. " <span style="">13:48 Thu Mar 3 "

Updated <span style="">22:40 Thu Mar 3

Request to join
I'd like to join this project -- 19:15, March 4, 2016 (UTC)

Added. 22:54, March 4, 2016 (UTC)

The Lost Warrior/Chapter 4 ~ Silver Nomination
Whew, finally done with all the manga subpages I wrote. Comments? <span style="">02:11 Sat Mar 5

Dawn/Chapter 2 ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? " <span style="">03:37 Sat Mar 5 "

Fire and Ice/Chapter 14 ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? " <span style="">13:48 Sat Mar 5 "