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The Apprentice's Quest/Chapter 4 ~ Silver Nomination
Comments?

There's quite a few fragmented sentences in the 1st paragraph, could you go through and fix them? Just a few more things, I'd also recommend going through and just combining a few sentences, which should help with some minor redundancy issues.
 * "He" sounds a little redundant in the 2nd paragraph towards the middle
 * There's also some fragments in the last 2 paragraphs of the summary
 * Would you mind detailing the last paragraph?
 * Might also wanna read through for some past-tense stuff too

Fixed

Could you go through one more time for fragmented sentences? There's quite a few particularly in the last paragraph, as well as spread through the summary

Fixed Hopefully, I didn't miss anything.

There are some short, 'choppy', sentences in the last paragraph, could you try combining some of those? Also, I don't know if Sparkpaw could be considered a major character for this chapter, since she didn't do much, but that's your choice. 21:00 Sun May 8

Still working? 01:05, May 22, 2016 (UTC)

Poking this. 21:13, May 31, 2016 (UTC)

Right, does anyone want to take over or shall I decline this? 04:02, June 12, 2016 (UTC)

Russian Cover
So there's this russian cover that's for both Into the Wild and Fire and Ice. Does it go on both gallery pages? Sorry that I'm so lost and don't know lol

If it's used for both books, then I would think it should be displayed on both pages, with some kind of note saying it's for both Into the Wild and Fire and Ice.

But there are lots of books like that that combine all the books in one of the series or something and they don't get covers? imo I think it shouldn't be in the gallery, but that's just what I think. 14:24 Fri May 6

Idk, I think it needs to go somewhere but I don't know where. I'm gonna go look into if there are any other ITW and FAI combos, to see if we could look into a section somewhere or something.

It could possibly go in the box set page. 17:43, May 6, 2016 (UTC)

There is a German combo too. And I think putting it in the box set is a good idea, and it could go in the book's publication history too. 18:00 Fri May 6

So what are we doing with this? Box set and publication page? 18:02, May 15, 2016 (UTC)

Comments? 01:09, May 22, 2016 (UTC)

I think that box set and publication history sounds good. 02:16 Sun May 22

So we're in agreement that the russian cover should go on the box set page, and it should go into both books' publication history? 13:57, June 4, 2016 (UTC)

Poking this again. 03:59, June 12, 2016 (UTC)

Forest of Secrets/Chapter 13 ~ Silver Nomination
Quite short though so is the chapter. It is also all that is there.

The summary is very short, choppy, and vague. Can you expand it a decent bit, because I've written chapters with shorter lengths than this and the summaries are still longer. I'd also say don't start the chapter with 'The chapter starts off'; it should start 'Fireheart wakes up Graystripe in the warriors' den' or something like that.

Okay, updated a bit, though it still seems somewhat short.

Still too short. Forest of Secret's  summary Chpater 10 is easily twice the length, even though it's a shorter chapter than this so the summary still needs to be expanded.

Updated (Do I need to add every single detail? -Just wondering-)

Nah, it looks fine in length now pretty much. Adding every single detail is quite tedious -- it only needs to have amply nore than the cliff notes and be descriptive

Any more comments?

"Fireheart also feels a stab of guilt as he knows, he is betraying his Clan." Can you get rid of the comma? It's not needed.

"The young, white furred kit pleads to them to allow him to come, upset when Graystripe refuses that he needs to be an apprentice in order to leave camp." Why not "The young, white furred kit pleads to them to allow him to come, becoming upset when Graystripe tells him that he needs to be an apprentice in order to leave camp." Right now it seems as if he's already upset when Graystripe didn't tell him anything.

"Cloudkit continues pestering them, until Fireheart finally convinces him by telling him they were on a private mission. The kit is astonished, and he agrees to leave, when Fireheart promises to give him hunting practice. Finally Fireheart and Graystripe leave camp. Graystripe wonders if Cloudkit will tell the whole clan, but Fireheart decides to worry about that later." Add what he's doing to pester them - I know that he doesn't sit there for an hour begging them. Also, capitalize Clan.

Maybe you can see if you can add a bit more detail? I think it could definitely use some more. 01:02, May 22, 2016 (UTC)

Is this subpage finished? It says 'more coming soon' at the bottom of the su mmary... 20:58 Sun May 22

I'm actually doing a redo, a more detailed one. So, no it's not finished.

Updated

There's still a few typos, and also sentences should never start with 'And' or 'But'. It's in books, but isn't really good for subpages... There's some fragments in the 3rd and 5th paragraphs also.

Updated

Some more detail in the 5th and 6th paragraphs would be good, and also do another check for typos and redundancy throughout the summary. I've fixed some, but there's still fragments in the 5th and 6th paragraphs

Updated

Forest of Secrets/Chapter 8 ~ Silver Nomination
Welp, that's another nomination and by far the looooooongest article I had to type out, think I did that...for an hour? Oh well. Comments? Also, the quote breaks my heart :P

There's some past tense in the 1st paragraph, and also 'He' is redundant in the second paragraph.

Reuploaded

There are a lot of typos, please fix them. 17:50, May 22, 2016 (UTC)

Updated

Sentences in subpages shouldn't start with 'And' or 'But', it doesn't flow well and seems improper, so could you fix that? Paragraphs also need more than one sentence, so can you combine a few of your shorter single liners? Also, there's fragments throughout the whole summary.

Updated

Actually, in your last edit all you did was combine the paragraphs, so there's still many fragments in the summary, a bit of past-tense, and many redundancy issues. I've fixed some in the first few paragraphs for you, but please don't comment 'Updated' when you really haven't addressed everything in the comment.

Updated

The Apprentice's Quest - Silver Nomination
Right, should I add the bonus scene as a section? It's only included in B&N books, but I do think it needs a section the page as all DOTC books have them. 14:43, June 10, 2016 (UTC)

Yeah I think you should add it, since it is part of the story

July FA
How does Goosefeather's Curse sound? 03:59, June 12, 2016 (UTC)