Warriors Wiki talk:Books

Mistakes page review
HI PB HOW ARE YOU

Anyways, I was looking through the mistakes page and I'm kinda curious as to why we have grammar mistakes and things like that listed? I understand description mistakes, major errors, things like that. But something like a grammar error (such as TigerClaw instead of Tigerclaw, or missing a word in a sentence) isn't really a mistake itself.. it's more of just a editorial oversight that doesn't really have anything to do with the series itself.

Grammar mistakes are everywhere, even in other franchises. I'm not sure we need to document every grammar error in this series, because the authors and editors are human and no one has perfect grammar. tldr, I think we should remove some of these and refocus the page to actual errors in the series, not typos or something that could be chalked up to an honest oversight.

I agree, typos are really minor and easily happen, and can be easily fixed. I don't thing it's major enough to include these in the mistakes. 22:17, June 20, 2019 (UTC)

YAY the talk page isn't blank anymore. Anyways, I agree that small grammatical errors shouldn't be listed - only the more prominent ones that result in something else being incorrect. We should also take care to see if these have been fixed in the new editions, which in some cases, they have been. Typos, too, if they're just a letter or two - but if it's more then case-by-case I suppose?

It's pointless to list small inconspicuous grammar mistakes and typos. I agree those can be removed, while we have the page focus on more significant mistakes. 03:33, June 23, 2019 (UTC)

Any other comments? 15:45, July 1, 2019 (UTC)

Hawkwing's Journey/Chapter 27 - Silver Nomination
22:39, July 8, 2019 (UTC)

Given the chapter's length, I do think little more detail wouldn't be remiss to make it longer, and you're missing links to a some like leader, patrol, Clan, apprentice, etc. so just give it a read-over

Updated  22:38, July 9, 2019 (UTC)

CBV? 00:34, July 12, 2019 (UTC)

Hawkwing's Journey/Chapter 30 - Silver Nomination
--Wolfy10 (talk) 20:56, July 9, 2019 (UTC)

The character section needs to be in a Mclist. 21:50, July 9, 2019 (UTC)

Add a main quote^

On it.

--Wolfy10 (talk) 22:40, July 9, 2019 (UTC)

Remove the all the dulplicate spoiler tags, restore the Chapintro and book infobox, and link things such as "dog", animal terms, Clan terms, and Clan ranks. And use the Mclist template to sort the character lists. 22:51, July 9, 2019 (UTC)

Kay. Working on it.

--Wolfy10 (talk) 23:21, July 9, 2019 (UTC)

Updated

--Wolfy10 (talk) 23:54, July 9, 2019 (UTC)

Long list, I know, but this will help to improve the article. 01:34, July 10, 2019 (UTC)
 * Chapintro template is still missing
 * Cut some details from the paragraphs, read over to change some words so it's not sounding like it's copied from the whole book
 * Cut some indents to shorten up the paragraphs
 * "Dog" should not be capitalized
 * Read over for some past tense and rewrite in present tense
 * Some names should also be changed to reduce redundancy, for ex "Fidgetpaw" shouldn't be repeated many times, change it up to "Him, the tom, the black-and-white tom, the medicine cat, etc

Okay. On it.

--Wolfy10 (talk) 19:34, July 10, 2019 (UTC)

Updated

--Wolfy10 (talk) 19:57, July 10, 2019 (UTC)

There are a few areas that repeat the characters names quite a bit, some sentences are very short and could be combined, and a few a few areas could be simplified:

"Hawkwing and Plumwillow hide the kits deep in a thornbush, and hide in it themselves too. The dog tries to follow Hawkwing and Plumwillow deep into the thorns." Could be simplified to "The cats hide in a thornbush and the dog tries to follow them."

"Plumwillow thanks Hawkwing for saving the kits. Plumwillow holds the kits close to her and Hawkwing." Could be changed to "Plumwillow thanks the tom for saving the kits, and she holds them close to herself and Hawkwing."

"He explains what happened to him and Plumwillow. Hawkwing asks if they are okay." You could replace the period and replace it with a comma and add "then asks", which I think would help it flow better.

"Hawkwing then goes to join his Clanmates. Birdwing says that the dogs are a serious problem." you can once again replace the period with a comma and change it to "and hears Birdwing say the dogs are a serious problem." Same goes for the sentence after it. They're very short and would flow better if combined. You can combine Leafstar's and Sparrowpelt's into one, replacing the period with a comma and adding "but Sparrowpelt argues..." Can also combine Firefern's and Macgyver's.

"Leafstar asks who will look after SkyClan. Echosong replies that Fidgetpaw will." those two can be combined.

"She asks Leafstar if some cats can come with her. Leafstar says yes. Bellaleaf and Harrybrook volunteer to come." - "She asks Leafstar if some cats can come with her, and the Clan leader agrees, then Bellaleaf and Harrybrook volunteer to go."

"All of Hawkwing's instincts are telling him to go with Echosong. But he knows there are to many arguments against it." these two can be combined.

"Leafstar says that she understands what they pushed to go, but that it grieves her to see them go." "Go" is a bit repetitive here, perhaps remove the first go and replace with "what pushed them,"

"Hawkwing wonders if the cats by the gorge are okay. He wonders if that maybe one day he'll see them again." combine these and remove the second wonder, as it's a little repetitive. Maybe change it to "...are okay, and if maybe one day..."

Reread to make sure everything is in present tense as well, I noticed a few parts that are in past. Parsleyseed is also mistakenly called a "her" in paragraph 5... unless it's referring to someone else? If it is, could you make it clear who that cat is?

You did a very good job on this! I'm sorry for this huge wall of a comment. If anything is confusing or you need help at all, let me know! 01:14, July 12, 2019 (UTC)

Thanks! I'll work on it, when I get the chance! Probably later today.

--Wolfy10 (talk) 16:22, July 12, 2019 (UTC)

Updated

--Wolfy10 (talk) 17:17, July 12, 2019 (UTC)

Looks good! "Says" is a bit repetitive, mostly with Echosong. Could you change a few to mews/meows perhaps? 19:46, July 13, 2019 (UTC)

Yeah!

--Wolfy10 (talk) 19:54, July 13, 2019 (UTC)

Updated

--Wolfy10 (talk) 19:57, July 13, 2019 (UTC)

CBV? 00:50, July 14, 2019 (UTC)

SkyClan and the Stranger (book) ~ Gold Nomination
+ gallery, same thing as the last manga compiling, just re-nominating to get that gold

CBV? 01:15, July 12, 2019 (UTC)

The Last Hope/Chapter 11 - Silver Nomination
01:03, July 10, 2019 (UTC)

Good to see you back, Mei. ^^ I believe the subpages should be written in present tense, but I'm seeing a lot of past tense mixed into the summary. ​​​

reup Great to be back, thanks Skye! Fixed that right up; got used to writing papers in past tense lmao 01:21, July 10, 2019 (UTC)

CBV? 19:57, July 13, 2019 (UTC)

Idk if this matters very much, but I noticed that Lionblaze's name is linked twice both in paragraph 2 and 5.

--Wolfy10 (talk) 20:03, July 13, 2019 (UTC)

The Last Hope/Chapter 9 - Silver Nomination
ngl my least favorite couple of all time 02:08, July 10, 2019 (UTC)

CBV? 19:47, July 13, 2019 (UTC)

Join
Can I please join the project? .EchoMaple (talk) 18:40, July 13, 2019 (UTC)

Sure, I'll add you in. Please read the guidelines to the project and welcome! 19:28, July 13, 2019 (UTC)

Hawkwing's Journey/Chapter 28 - Silver Nomination
22:24, July 13, 2019 (UTC)

Hawkwing's Journey/Chapter 29 - Silver Nomination
22:25, July 13, 2019 (UTC)

Hawkwing's Journey/Chapter 31 - Silver Nomination
03:49, July 14, 2019 (UTC)

Crowfeather's Trial/Chapter 19 - Silver Nomination
-- Fight Like  All of LionClan 18:11, July 14, 2019 (UTC)

Btw, idk why the refrences are to Hawkwing's Journey.

17:59, July 14, 2019 (UTC)
 * Use the Mclist for the characters
 * Reduce character redundancy by changing up names to tom, she-cat, the warrior, etc
 * Cut some indents a bit and rephrase detail so it doesn't sound like it's book-copied
 * For the references, it's ct, not hj. ct is the correct one to use
 * Add a main quote
 * Heading should have - Silver Nomination, just so people know what you nominated it for

Okay -- 18:11, July 14, 2019 (UTC)