Talk: Books/Discussion Archive 26

Bluestar's Prophecy/Chapter 44 - Silver Nomination

Worked on it this morning and it's now done! comments? -Duck sauce 17:15, July 22, 2014 (UTC)

Looks good Duck! Just check for spelling as usual though. Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 01:41, July 23, 2014 (UTC)

I did and I didn't see any, correct me if I'm wrong, though. -Duck sauce 02:53, July 23, 2014 (UTC)

I only noticed one in the second paragraph, second sentence. Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 03:27, July 23, 2014 (UTC)

fixed c: -Duck sauce 03:54, July 23, 2014 (UTC)

Some of the sentences seem sorta short and abrupt throughout the entire article. I'm not sure how to suggest fixing it, but maybe combining sentences and adding more descriptive words? —Jayce(16:22, 7/24/2014)

Also, as seen here, there should also be an important events section- which in this chapter would be Bluestar becoming leader, Redtail being deputy, Spottedleaf being the full-time medicine cat, ect. Also, if there are deaths mentioned, they should be listed too. I kept forgetting about this and this section is needed on all subpages- it was part of the original idea and I completely forgot about it. —Jayce(16:26, 7/24/2014)

done and Bluestar becoming leader wouldn't go in this chapter because she became leader before this chapter. -Duck sauce 19:37, July 26, 2014 (UTC)

CBV? Prussia:^{The Awesome Time Lord} 04:34, August 4, 2014 (UTC)

The Sun Trail/Chapter 5 - Silver Nomination

I started working on this a while ago and forgot about it until recently. Comments? Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 01:58, July 23, 2014 (UTC)

Check here, and follow the info that's given. If there are any important things regarding the chapter, it should be put here. One of those things for this chapter would probably be Jagged Peak's disappearance (linked with the chapter right before this, I think), and how it gets Gray Wing to leave the cave...and how he also finds him soon after leaving, along with anything you find important to the plot, characters, books, ect. Also births and deaths if there are any. —Jayce(16:31, 7/24/2014)

Done Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 17:17, July 24, 2014 (UTC)

CBV? Prussia:^{The Awesome Time Lord} 04:33, August 4, 2014 (UTC)

Thunder Rising/Chapter 13 - Silver Nomination

I like these short chapters. Comments? -Duck sauce 05:02, July 24, 2014 (UTC)

I don't see anything particularly wrong, just check for spelling as usual. Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 15:28, July 24, 2014 (UTC)

As I've been saying, look here and follow the formatting I used. If there's anything of any importance to the books, characters, plot, ect. Basically if you think it's important, go ahead and put it there, with births, deaths, ect. —Jayce(16:33, 7/24/2014)

done -Duck sauce 19:31, July 26, 2014 (UTC)

CBV? Prussia:^{The Awesome Time Lord} 04:33, August 4, 2014 (UTC)

Rising Storm/Chapter 6 - Silver Nomination

Comments? Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 17:12, July 26, 2014 (UTC)

add the events/births/deaths thingy if applicable -Duck sauce 21:46, July 26, 2014 (UTC)

It's not applicable, unless WindClan not letting them go to Moonstone is a big enough event. Bluestar doesn't loose her faith in StarClan until later on in the book. Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 22:21, July 26, 2014 (UTC)

It's for any major event that happens in the chapter. WindClan denying ThunderClan access to the Moonstone is pretty major. —Jayce(21:24, 7/27/2014)

It's there now. Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 01:47, July 28, 2014 (UTC)

CBV? Prussia:^{The Awesome Time Lord} 19:39, August 7, 2014 (UTC)

Vote's up Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 17:10, August 10, 2014 (UTC)

September/October FA

Ideas? I was thinking an adventure game, since Fever Dreams and The Plaintive Howls both look pretty good. Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 00:59, August 15, 2014 (UTC)

Fever Dreams looks good. Writing summaries for those are so much fun lmao. —Jayce(01:04, 8/16/2014)

Fever Dreams looks amazing. I love those adventure games. -Duck sauce 02:24, August 16, 2014 (UTC)

Fever Dreams it is! I'll put up the vote momentarily. Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 16:48, August 23, 2014 (UTC)

Vote's up! Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 16:55, August 23, 2014 (UTC)

Fire and Ice/Chapter 8 - Silver Nomination

I sense a chapter summary editing spree once I feel better. Prussia:^{The Awesome Time Lord} 16:24, July 22, 2014 (UTC)

Check for spelling mistakes and can you use the mclist template on the minor/mentioned character lists? It makes them look nicer. Nice job! Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 16:52, July 22, 2014 (UTC)

I checked for spelling mistakes and didn't see any, however, about the mclist, I did use it, I kind of like the way it looks 3 columns with 4 names each, but I'll wait for other people's opinions on it.Prussia:^{The Awesome Time Lord} 17:48, July 22, 2014 (UTC)

I changed the mclist from 3 to 2 on the Mentioned section though Prussia:^{The Awesome Time Lord} 17:49, July 22, 2014 (UTC)

As seen here, you're kinda missing some info on the article. This chapter is kinda vital since not only is this around the time where Whiteclaw is killed, I do believe Fireheart and Graystripe also obtain their first apprentices during this chapter as well. Basically, go through, and if there's anything important (to the overall plot, a character, the books, ect), then it should be listed there. —Jayce(16:29, 7/24/2014)

Done~ Prussia:^{The Awesome Time Lord} 18:49, July 24, 2014 (UTC)

The tense changes in the 6th paragraph and the first sentence of the 9th paragraph could be worded a bit more clearly. Maybe break it into two sentences? Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 22:56, August 3, 2014 (UTC)

I fixed the tense int he 6th paraagraph, and tried to word the 9th paragraph differently. Prussia:^{The Awesome Time Lord} 04:36, August 4, 2014 (UTC)

-nudges- Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 00:46, August 15, 2014 (UTC)

-moar nudges- I don't CBA my own stuff lol Prussia:^{The Awesome Time Lord} 00:37, August 16, 2014 (UTC)

Important events also include the apprenticeships of Brackenpaw and Cinderpaw, you egg. =P —Jayce(01:06, 8/16/2014)

i'm an egg yey (the ceremonies were already there so I just added they became apprentices lol) Prussia:^{The Awesome Time Lord} 01:34, August 16, 2014 (UTC)

Just gonna poke this again. Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 02:07, August 30, 2014 (UTC)

CBV? Sorry, I forgot ;-; —Jayce(02:46, 9/1/2014)

Vote's up! Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 03:01, September 4, 2014 (UTC)

Reminder

Hi all! I decided to post this on project talk pages to get a bit more exposure. As some of you might have seen, Skye and I are now the co-head administrators on the wiki, and I'd like to remind everyone of the staff openings. We have quite a few and we need more people to step up and apply, either for chat moderator or rollbacker spots. Have a great day! -Duck sauce 04:21, July 2, 2014 (UTC)

Rising Storm/Chapter 7 - Silver Nomination

Comments? Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 22:18, August 23, 2014 (UTC)

Looks Good! I couldn't see anything particulary wrong on my end (Then again I am half-asleep hehe) but check for grammar and spelling mistakes, those are sneaky. Prussia:^{The Awesome Time Lord} 01:59, September 1, 2014 (UTC)

Thanks :D Found a few mistakes and fixed them. Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 02:39, September 1, 2014 (UTC)

Minor thing, but can you cite the Fireheart/Gathering thing in the "other" section, and move all the cites so they're just like on other articles, with it right next to the name instead of with a space? —Jayce(02:48, 9/1/2014)

Added cite and fixed the others. Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 02:58, September 1, 2014 (UTC)

poke Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 00:08, September 15, 2014 (UTC)

CBV? Sorry I meant to do this the other day but Wikia isn't publishing my edits ;-; —Jayce(00:13, 9/15/2014)

Vote's up Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 03:26, September 17, 2014 (UTC)

Bramblestar's Storm/Prologue - Silver Nomination

Comments? Is there a "proper" way of doing the prophecy part under Important Events? I wasn't sure since I've seen it done different ways. Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 03:05, September 6, 2014 (UTC)

I don't believe so >3< I'll see if there is, but idk. Prussia:^{The Awesome Time Lord} 19:11, September 6, 2014 (UTC)

possibly remove the prophecy fromt he history because it's a direct quote and those shouldn't be in the summary, it also makes that area of the summary a bit choppy. -Duck sauce 21:18, September 10, 2014 (UTC)

Taken out. Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 00:50, September 15, 2014 (UTC)

The prophecy part looks pretty good to me, and I think you can keep it that way. As for the rest of the article, is there a way you could expand the history? I know it's only a couple pages, but maybe you could give a little more descriptions for the events and things like that? Firestar is a huge dork in this chapter. —Jayce(01:01, 9/15/2014)

Expanded the summary and split the paragraphs up a bit. Ikr! And he's still not over Spottedleaf. Even Bluestar is annoyed with his moping Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 03:13, September 17, 2014 (UTC)

CBV? (college has taken over my brain help ;3;) Prussia:^{The Awesome Time Lord} 20:55, September 25, 2014 (UTC)

Vote's up! I can only imagine... Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 00:33, September 27, 2014 (UTC)

Bramblestar's Storm ~ Quote Nomination

I know I’m not a member of the Project anymore, and I don’t think I will be able to rejoin and be able to stay active, but I was a member once and I want to help out. I have some quotes for the book Bramblestar’s Storm since I saw there wasn’t one up yet, so here goes:

1) “Cats of all Clans… we cannot let the fallen go unrecognized, and that includes ensuring the future of all four Clans together. In times of peace, we stand alone, hunt alone, fight with one another over our boundaries. But more than that, StarClan has shown us that there must always be four Clans beside the lake, and in times of trouble, Clan borders are meaningless.” – Bramblestar Pg 472

2) “No Clan was left behind on the Great Journey to find the lake. No Clan was abandoned to fight alone against the Dark Forest. No Clan will be allowed to fall now, not if the rest of us can protect them… The strength of many preserves all!” –Bramblestar pg 472-473

3) “Under StarClan four Clans will be one, to preserve the four.” –Bramblestar pg 473

If none of these are suitable, I have a hardcopy of the book so I can get new ones anytime. Thanks :) --Cinder ^{Real or Not Real?}20:14, September 1, 2014 (UTC)

I like 3 personally, but could you find a few more? Just for a few more options. Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 03:01, September 4, 2014 (UTC)

I like 1, but ya, find a couple more to get more of a variety (?) Prussia:^{The Awesome Time Lord} 19:10, September 6, 2014 (UTC)

Here's a compiled list of all of the quotes, even the ones above. Sorry it took me so long to reply, school is a pain. Hope these are better:

1) “Cats of all Clans… we cannot let the fallen go unrecognized, and that includes ensuring the future of all four Clans together. In times of peace, we stand alone, hunt alone, fight with one another over our boundaries. But more than that, StarClan has shown us that there must always be four Clans beside the lake, and in times of trouble, Clan borders are meaningless.” – Bramblestar Pg 472

2) “No Clan was left behind on the Great Journey to find the lake. No Clan was abandoned to fight alone against the Dark Forest. No Clan will be allowed to fall now, not if the rest of us can protect them… The strength of many preserves all!” –Bramblestar pg 472-473

3) “Under StarClan four Clans will be one, to preserve the four.” –Bramblestar pg 473

4) “Nothing will destroy ThunderClan.” –Bramblestar pg 8

5) “But the scars we can’t see will be harder to heal.” –Bramblestar pg 17 about the effects of the Great Battle

6) “Enemies can’t sneak up on us, and neither can the flood!” –Bramblestar pg 150

7) “Will the water ever recede? Will the Clans be forced to look for yet another home? What would Firestar have done?” –Bramblestar’s thoughts pg 240

8) “It takes more than a storm to destroy ThunderClan.” –Bramblestar pg 264

9) “Trust your instincts, Bramblestar. That’s why StarClan made you leader, because they had faith in you.” –Jayfeather to Bramblestar pg 387

10) “Cats of ThunderClan, I know what I’m asking of you, and I want you to know that I trust every one of you… We defeated the Dark Forest cats… StarClan fought alongside us then and they might not be with us in the same way now, but they’ll be watching over us, just as they always have. ThunderClan warriors, to victory!” –Bramblestar pg 410

11) “StarClan knew you would be a good leader in your own right. That’s why they led your paws along this path. Firestar didn’t appoint you to be his echo, but to be yourself. He trusted you to protect ThunderClan, to make decisions for them based on your own judgment and instincts… You are the leader of ThunderClan now, Bramblestar. Not Firestar. Be the leader that you want to be. No cat expects anything else.” –Sandstorm to Bramblestar pg 444

I personally like number 11 :) --Cinder ^{Real or Not Real?}19:22, September 10, 2014 (UTC)

Changing my vote to 11, I really like that one. Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 21:06, September 10, 2014 (UTC)

I like 1 and 11 -Duck sauce 21:14, September 10, 2014 (UTC)

Personally, I think nine is a good choice. It shows that Bramblestar needs faith in himself, and that's the entire point of the book. —Jayce(00:12, 9/15/2014)

Anyone else want to put in their opinion? Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 17:31, October 4, 2014 (UTC)

I don't think anyone else is- it's been two weeks since a comment, so I'll CBV this and place the vote up soon. —Jayce(20:01, 10/19/2014)

Votes up (late reaction herp) Prussia:^{The Awesome Time Lord} 15:52, November 5, 2014 (UTC)

November/December FA

There's plenty of graphic novels (such as Warrior's Refuge) and field guides (Secrets of the Clans maybe?) that are finished, and there's always the option of another adventure game. So ideas? Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 21:22, October 19, 2014 (UTC)

Oh, please no adventure games. I really do not like them. <sobs> I think The Heart of a Warrior would be a good choice, and it's the only one out of the Ravenpaw's Path arc to still be graded silver. Or, perhaps we could do Midnight, since that's the only New Prophecy book to be silver. —Jayce(21:29, 10/19/2014)

Adventure games are last resort. They are painful to write *shudders* Can articles be featured twice? Midnight has already been an FA. I like Heart of a Warrior though. Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 21:37, October 19, 2014 (UTC)

Nevermind, I keep forgetting that didn't get a vote and was a majority rule one due to lack of user input and voting time. That needs to be nominated to gold ranking sometime eventually. lol —Jayce(21:40, 10/19/2014)

I like the The Heart of a Warrior as a choice, I mean, I woudn't mind an adventure game, (but I haven't actually looked at them, I always skimmed them, herp.) Prussia:^{The Awesome Time Lord} 00:48, October 20, 2014 (UTC)

Pssssh Adventure Games are kinda cool I like Heart of a Warrior, too. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Ducksplash (talk • contribs) 21:28, November 9, 2014 (UTC)

Well, since The Heart of a Warrior seems to be agreed upon, shall we go with that? If there aren't anymore comments, I'll put the vote up for that in 24 hours. —Jayce(21:31, 11/9/2014)

Sorry, got called in for orientation at a new job yesterday and couldn't put this up. Vote is here ^^ —Jayce(21:09, 11/12/2014)

I am very sorry for not posting this sooner. Life has been crazy and I'll do my best to get this up tomorrow. Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 23:31, November 24, 2014 (UTC)

Leafpool's Wish - Silver Nomination

well this is just sitting there and it looks amazing to me, I'm willing to do anything, though. this book was amazing, probably my favorite novella. Comments? -Duck sauce 02:35, September 18, 2014 (UTC)

Nothing stands out to me in particular, just check for spelling/grammar and the like. Warning you though, I don't own and haven't read this novella, so if stuff is missing from the summary, I'm clueless. If you have the time, could you possibly do the cliffnotes? If you don't want to, that perfectly fine, but this one is only ten chapters long. Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 02:45, September 22, 2014 (UTC)

It needs a summary in the book template box, and expand it only if you feel like it. I love larger book articles- there's so much detail in these and a couple paragraphs doesn't do it justice. After all, it's called a Detailed Plot Summary for a reason. —Jayce(03:02, 9/22/2014)

Still working on this Duck? Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 17:31, October 4, 2014 (UTC)

If Duck's not working on this, I'd be willing to take over since I'm already working on the cliffnotes as I type this. ^^ —Jayce(20:00, 10/19/2014)

feel free to have this, skye, I don't really have much time right now and i totally forgot about this -Duck sauce 20:35, October 19, 2014 (UTC)

Are you still working on this Skye? Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 19:30, November 15, 2014 (UTC)

Fading Echoes/Chapter 2- Silver Nomination

I think that this article qualifies for a silver grade. Thoughts?^{^B}^{^{^{^L}}}^{^{A^Z^{^E}^F^{^{i^{^{rE 09:57, December 15, 2014 (UTC)}}}}}}

At the beginning, the intro needs the two templates to be filled out (see here to see how to fill them out). The summary looks pretty good, though you should double check for spelling. The character section needs to have the name list split into columns (using this template). And at the bottom of the page add an Important Events template (if you don't know what that is, here explains it). This looks quite good for your first nomination :D Just fix the few things I mentioned and this should be ready! Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...}

Still working? Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 02:07, January 3, 2015 (UTC)

January/February FA

So, ideas? There are guide books and a few graphic novels that are done, but no full books or novellas. Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 20:21, December 22, 2014 (UTC)

How about Beyond the Code or Mistystar's Omen? (I'm pretty sure these haven't been FA's yet.) Prussia:^{The Awesome Time Lord} 19:00, December 28, 2014 (UTC)

Mistystar's Omen doesn't have its cliffnotes done (it should really go back to bronze or get those finished, but that is another discussion), but yeah Beyond the Code looks good. Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 20:30, December 28, 2014 (UTC)

Alrighty then, with no other suggestions, I'll put up the vote. Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 01:55, January 3, 2015 (UTC)

Vote's up! Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 15:56, January 3, 2015 (UTC)

Thunder Rising/Chapter 1 ~ Silver Nomination

aka the worst summary I've ever written. Comments? ~ Foxy ^{Don't eat my food} 06:22, January 3, 2015 (UTC)

The tenses in each paragraph are inconsistent. It switches back and forth from present to past tense over and over. I think that's mainly the biggest issue. ^^ ♠Pinely ~Anything Is Possible 07:27, January 3, 2015 (UTC)

Whew, I just fixed it before it became an embarrassment to me ^^ ~ Foxy ^{Don't eat my food} 07:35, January 3, 2015 (UTC)

Better, but the tense is still a little off in places, so just make sure everything is in the present tense. And take out the last sentence in the summary, as we try not to use sentences in these like "The chapter starts..." or "The chapter ends..". Then, just add the Important Events section (that was just recently decided on as a required section). This looks good for your fist nomination :) Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 15:46, January 3, 2015 (UTC)

Fixed ^^ I really can't write in present tense, I prefer past but whatever. ~ Foxy ^{Don't eat my food} 09:42, January 4, 2015 (UTC)

Any more comments? ~ Foxy ^{Don't eat my food} 08:59, January 6, 2015 (UTC)

Not being impatient... But Is there going to be any more comments on this? It's been like... 3 weeks without comments. ~ Foxy ^{Don't eat my food} 07:41, January 25, 2015 (UTC)

This looks good! I can't actually ask for last comments, which is the step before putting up a vote, so Birdpaw and Skye? Could you comment on/CBV this? Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 19:58, February 1, 2015 (UTC)

CBV? (alsoo soundslikei'mintroublewhenpeepzcallmeBirdpaww) Prussia:^{The Awesome Time Lord} 22:22, February 1, 2015 (UTC)

pssh you're not in trouble i just totally blanked on what to call you :P Vote's up! Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 01:11, February 5, 2015 (UTC)

Fire and Ice/Chapter 9 ~ Silver Nomination

Welp, college has made me kind of spacey, oh well, here's a subpage silver nomination, I'm very slowly getting more active. So yayy Prussia:^{The Awesome Time Lord} 00:55, October 20, 2014 (UTC)

oh my gosh this is so late i'm sorry You have some run-on sentences in the first half of the summary, and you also need to add the Important Events section. Other than that, this looks nice, but double-check for spelling just in case. Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 20:28, November 30, 2014 (UTC)

Hopefully fixed the run-on sentences, I added the Important Events section (Although I couldn't find any events taht could constitute as majorly important) Looked through, found no spelling (although I am half asleep so I could have missed like one or two) Prussia:^{The Awesome Time Lord} 18:33, December 3, 2014 (UTC)

All the sentences look good now. As I understand it, Important Events are important things that happened in the actual chapter, not necessarily in the whole book. Here is an example of an event that isn't crucial to the plot, but is important to the chapter Does that make sense? I'm not good at explaining stuff You've formatted the section slightly incorrectly as well, so just fix that and this will be all good :D Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 21:41, December 3, 2014 (UTC)

Ok, fixed it, although I couldn't find anything crucial the the chapter other than maybe Firestar catching his sister's scent. Prussia:^{The Awesome Time Lord} 18:46, December 6, 2014 (UTC)

-poke- Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 20:21, December 22, 2014 (UTC)

Could we have another comment/CBV? Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 19:59, February 1, 2015 (UTC)

I just put up votes for everything that went without comments for like ten days. —Jayce(13:28, 2/25/2015)

The Forgotten Warrior/Chapter 24 silver nomination

Had some fun typing this. The major/minor list was annoying to do though. Comments? ~ Burntclaw ^{Yolo ♫ ♪} 07:56, January 3, 2015 (UTC)

Yeah, those lists can go on forever :P This looks very good, just double check for spelling/grammar and add the Important Events section (it is a required section now, and if you need help, the chapter subpage tutorial explains how to use it, or you can ask here). Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 15:38, January 3, 2015 (UTC)

Done. ~ Burntclaw ^{Yolo ♫ ♪} 09:37, January 4, 2015 (UTC)

Comments? It's been a month. ~ Burntclaw ^{Yolo ♫ ♪} 00:16, February 2, 2015 (UTC)

pokes Sorry about that Burntclaw, this looks great! Anything anyone would like to add?Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 01:17, February 5, 2015 (UTC)

I just picked up on a couple run-on sentences and a spelling error here or there (sorry I just fixed all the ones that I noticed since they were really minor). Other than that, looks good! Daz zy 11:34, February 7, 2015 (UTC)

Any comments? User:Burntclaw/Sig 09:13, February 16, 2015 (UTC)

Fire and Ice/Chapter 20 ~ Silver Nomination

This was fun to write. I think everything is there, but I'd like someone to check the page numbers. I don't have a physical copy of the book, only a PDF. I looked at the book store today, and it was the only one they didn't have. So, comments? ^^ ♎ giaria ^{time on my side} 21:15 Sat Jan 17

I fixed up the cites for you. Just add in Brackenpaw to the characters lists, but otherwise this looks quite good :D Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 01:35, February 5, 2015 (UTC)

done~ ♎ giaria ^{time on my side} 01:48 Thu Feb 5

There's a few bits with inconsistent tenses, could you fix those? Daz zy 11:30, February 7, 2015 (UTC)

Could you point out any specific places? ♎ giaria ^{time on my side} 16:46 Sat Feb 7

Around the end of the second paragraph, the start of the third, and start of the last. Daz zy 00:12, February 8, 2015 (UTC)

done ♎ giaria ^{time on my side} 01:11 Sun Feb 8

any more comments? ♎ giaria ^{time on my side} 02:13 Mon Feb 16

Rising Storm/Chapter 8 - Silver Nomination

Comments? Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 16:27, December 29, 2014 (UTC)

Comments anyone? Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 01:23, February 5, 2015 (UTC)

There's just a few minor instances of weird phrasing/awkward tense, could you go through and maybe reword them (ex. using "were" in a spot where maybe "are" would be a better choice ~~sorry this sounds so nitpicky~~)? Daz zy 11:37, February 7, 2015 (UTC)

Nitpicky is fine, it did need some rewording :) Anyway, sorry this took so long, school has been pretty hectic. I reworded some sentences, so hopefully that took care of it. Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 04:06, February 26, 2015 (UTC)

CBV? —Jayce(01:46, 3/9/2015)

Vote's up Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 01:40, March 12, 2015 (UTC)

Tigerclaw's Fury/Cliffnotes ~ Silver Nomination

I think this article is ready to be graded silver. Comments? ♠Pinely ~Anything Is Possible 03:02, January 3, 2015 (UTC)

This looks really good :D Nothing to change stands out to me, but just double check for those sneaky grammar/spelling errors. They can slip by the best of us :) Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 15:49, January 3, 2015 (UTC)

Alright, thank you. ^^ ♠Pinely ~Anything Is Possible 05:59, January 4, 2015 (UTC)

pokety poke Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 01:24, February 5, 2015 (UTC)

Only thing I can see is the 3rd-last line under chapter 10 for awkward tenses (fear me I am the tense nitpicker of the century) Daz zy 13:28, February 8, 2015 (UTC)

I'm not sure if they're still working on this, so I fixed the tense (hopefully :P) Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 02:31, March 9, 2015 (UTC)

~poke~ Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 02:25, March 25, 2015 (UTC)

Yeah, I don't think Pinely's still working on this. Bird, would you like to take over, since you already fixed the tense? Tbh, I think some of the chapters could be expanded a bit. —Jayce(10:18, 3/25/2015)

Sure I'd be happy too! I'll start working on that this weekend. Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 12:55, March 25, 2015 (UTC)

In the next two weeks, I have about 10-12 tests I have to take, so I won't be able to work on this until afterwards. I'm sorry, but those take priority and I'll try my best to get to this after. Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 03:48, April 13, 2015 (UTC)

Hey, Bird, was this ever worked on? If not, you can always repost it later, or someone else can get to it. —Jayce(19:49, 5/27/2015)

Yes I started expanding, but school took up more time than I was expecting, so if I could repost this later that would be great Bird ^{Squash one, squash two, squash three...} 20:16, May 27, 2015 (UTC)

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