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*First sentence: "It's barely dawn...." - the summary should be entirely written from the character's PoV, changing that to something more like, "Bramblestar notes it is nearly dawn as he and Jayfeather return...etc." |
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*"Dovewing hesitates, before going over to the fresh-kill pile Bramblestar tells his mate, Squirrelflight that he's worried about Dovewing." - try not to mention a cat's name more than once in the same sentence, instead replacing with 'the warrior' 'the gray she-cat' etc. of the sort; that's just an instance that popped out, but I'd appreciate if you went and checked the summary if there are more.{{User:Spookywilloww/Sig2|00:29, 8/12/2019}} |
*"Dovewing hesitates, before going over to the fresh-kill pile Bramblestar tells his mate, Squirrelflight that he's worried about Dovewing." - try not to mention a cat's name more than once in the same sentence, instead replacing with 'the warrior' 'the gray she-cat' etc. of the sort; that's just an instance that popped out, but I'd appreciate if you went and checked the summary if there are more.{{User:Spookywilloww/Sig2|00:29, 8/12/2019}} |
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The Last Hope/Chapter 13 - Silver Nomination
❀ mei ❀ GOGOBEBE 18:00, August 3, 2019 (UTC)
There are a few past tense sections.
--Fight Like All of LionClan 18:47, August 3, 2019 (UTC)
Add a main quote. --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 18:50, August 3, 2019 (UTC)
re-up❀ mei ❀ GOGOBEBE 23:59, August 3, 2019 (UTC)
CBV? —PatchfeatherHangar 18, I know too much 00:53, August 7, 2019 (UTC)
The Last Hope/Chapter 15 - Silver Nomination
so glad to be a little more active ❀ mei ❀ GOGOBEBE 17:09, August 4, 2019 (UTC)
Minor, but Mothwing is mistakenly shown as Mothflight in the main quote. --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 22:23, August 5, 2019 (UTC)
close enough lmao reup ❀ mei ❀ GOGOBEBE 01:52, August 6, 2019 (UTC)
CBV? —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 00:45, 8/11/2019
The Last Hope/Chapter 19 - Silver Nomination
--Wolfy 18:47, August 5, 2019 (UTC)
Add a main quote. --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 18:51, August 5, 2019 (UTC)
Okay.
--Wolfy 19:55, August 5, 2019 (UTC)
Updated
--Wolfy 20:01, August 5, 2019 (UTC)
CBV? —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 00:46, 8/11/2019
The Last Hope/Chapter 20 - Silver Nomination
--Wolfy 00:28, August 7, 2019 (UTC)
Split up the minor Mclist more. --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 00:34, August 7, 2019 (UTC)
How do I do that?
--Wolfy 00:59, August 7, 2019 (UTC)
You go into the template and in the top box, change the number from 2 to 4. --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 01:02, August 7, 2019 (UTC)
Updated
--Wolfy 01:03, August 7, 2019 (UTC)
CBV? —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 00:26, 8/12/2019
Bramblestar's Storm/Chapter 7 - Silver Nomination
--Wolfy 16:38, August 8, 2019 (UTC)
Remove the stub tag and add a main quote. --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 16:41, August 8, 2019 (UTC)
Updated
--Wolfy 17:30, August 8, 2019 (UTC)
- First sentence: "It's barely dawn...." - the summary should be entirely written from the character's PoV, changing that to something more like, "Bramblestar notes it is nearly dawn as he and Jayfeather return...etc."
- "Dovewing hesitates, before going over to the fresh-kill pile Bramblestar tells his mate, Squirrelflight that he's worried about Dovewing." - try not to mention a cat's name more than once in the same sentence, instead replacing with 'the warrior' 'the gray she-cat' etc. of the sort; that's just an instance that popped out, but I'd appreciate if you went and checked the summary if there are more.—spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 00:29, 8/12/2019
Updated