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Trivia
Forgive me if I make no sense because I'm. On my phone. I was stalking the wiki and I recalled that on a few book articles. We have a section for trivia, some of them list all the issues in the book, some of them list none, some of them list a little. I believe we should decide for the layout. Should we include. All trivia? None? The important ones? Appledash the light of honor 02:36, September 15, 2016 (UTC)
I noticed that before too and was actually going to bring it up but forgot :P I think that errors shouldn't be listed in the trivia, because in some books (like MFV) there are just so many of them that none of the other trivia would be noticeable in all of it. I don't think that mistakes are that important anyways, but we could link that book's section in Mistakes in the Warriors Series in the trivia and say that the mistakes in said book are listed there. I think that's what you are talking about? 🏵️ Maple 🏵️ 00:08 Fri Sep 16
I agree. But, there should be some trivia, imo. Just the stuff about the book itself, like what the working title was and other major things like that. —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 00:09, 9/16/2016
Anymore comments on this? Appledash the light of honor 03:30, September 22, 2016 (UTC)
I could understand if it's a major mistake, such as the issue with Graystripe and his kits in Bramblestar's Storm, since I think that warranted a reprint, but minor mistakes, such as description, gender, eye color errors, ect, shouldn't be mentioned in the trivia, but on the Mistakes page as well as a given character's article. Working titles, plot changes, and other tidbits about the books themselves are appropriate, while the Mistakes page is beneficial for the rest of said mistakes....
Although now that I think of it, that page is getting extremely long. Would there be a way to possibly shorten that with the use of subpages or something along those lines? —Jayce(03:34, 9/22/2016)
Good idea. Any ideas for it? Appledash the light of honor 01:15, October 2, 2016 (UTC)
I'd be good with separating it per arc, since having a page for each book might be a bit tedious. But yeah we should totally to that^ —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 01:16, 10/02/2016
Poke —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 21:19, 11/01/2016
I don't think anyone else is going to comment... but it does seem like Icy seems to be for separating it by arc, so I think we could go ahead and do that? I know she's avoiding the wiki until she's finished Hawkwing's Journey... But one person should do it, so we don't all jump on each other and edit conflict. —Jayce(00:12, 11/07/2016)
Let's go ahead and implement this. Appledash the light of honor 00:18, November 11, 2016 (UTC)
The First Battle/Chapter 1 ~ Silver Nomination
Comments? Songheart 21:54, November 22, 2016 (UTC)
CBV? —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 20:29, 11/25/2016
- In the 1st paragraph, "Clear Sky narrows his eyes at Thunder, who is climbing the slope to the moor with Frost, leaving the forest. Clear Sky feels a pang of regret gnawing in his belly." Clear Sky sounds redundant
- In the 2nd paragraph, "The two cats bicker over Stoneteller " I don't really understand what you mean by that.
- In the 3rd paragraph, "He glances at Fircone and Nettle, the two toms who have persuaded Thunder to convince him to not expand the territory." Is the 'him' (as in 'convince him') Clear Sky? Can you specificy that?
- In the 4th paragraph, "He decides to put their minds to rest about the territory." Who is the 'he'?
- Also in the 4th, "Clear Sky becomes furious when |his brother is mentioned." Since there isn't any detail about it this sentence just seems out of place. Could you either explain more about how Gray Wing is mentioned, or just get rid of the sentence, I feel like it just makes it confusing rn.
- Was Misty mentioned by name in the chapter, or was she just said to be Alder and Birch's mother? If she wasn't mentioned by name, it should say '(Unnamed)' after her name in the Mentioned characters list. Also, Gray Wing should be in the mentioned characters list. 🏵️ Maple 🏵️ 22:56 Fri Nov 25
Bramblestar's Storm/Chapter 3 ~ Silver Nomination
Alright, I have nothing to do and please tell me no one's nominating this already. My chemistry tests are over, and I need something to rant about. MinnowsWelcome toThomas Krestchmann! 15:32, November 27, 2016 (UTC)
- Add a quote
- Remove the important events section, imo, as per this from awhile back.
- Patrol is redundant in 1st paragraph
- Break up the first sentence of the summary; it's a bit of a run-on
- Towards the end of the first paragraph, Bramblestar and Brackenfur are redundant some
- Bramblestar is also redundant in other paragraphs as well
- Littlecloud is redundant in the last paragraph
- "says" is redundant too; perhaps swap a few with "meows" or something
- Link border and patrol —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 18:52, 11/27/2016
Updated MinnowsWelcome toThomas Krestchmann! 16:05, November 28, 2016 (UTC)
Maybe link 'Twoleg nest' to ThunderClan#In_The_Lake_Territories, since there is a section on it there? If not, I think you should link it to Twoleg Nest. 🏵️ Maple 🏵️ 19:46 Mon Nov 28
Updated MinnowsWelcome toThomas Krestchmann! 16:26, November 29, 2016 (UTC)
Crookedstar's Promise/Chapter 2 ~ Silver Nomination
Again, no one has been working on this so I stole it. Comments? MinnowsWelcome toThomas Krestchmann! 15:35, November 27, 2016 (UTC)
- Add a quote
- Hailstar is redundant in the second paragraph; perhaps replace a few with something different?
- As the kits watch the RiverClan patrol begin their retreat to camp, Oakkit cries out that the magpie has returned. Try to shorten the intro of this sentence; it's long and kinda wordy.
- Perhaps go through the summary in general and add a bit more detail to the events. Kinda bad at explaining but I'd go through and expand this in general. —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 20:32, 11/27/2016
Updated Okay, I have appeared to lost my Crookedstar's Promise copy on the subway and it will take me a day or so to get one from the library, praying that someone didn't already take it out. So I couldn't do the quotes or add details, but I'll do that soon enough. MinnowsWelcome toThomas Krestchmann! 16:21, November 28, 2016 (UTC)
Leafpool's Wish/Chapter 3 ~ Silver Nomination
—spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 22:03, 11/28/2016