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Moonrise/Chapter 6 - Silver Nomination
Dawn 00:17, September 6, 2019 (UTC)
Very good! Make sure you indent the paragraphs, remove any past tense, and often move character names to she-cat, tom, apprentice, etc to reduce redundancy. --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 00:19, September 6, 2019 (UTC)
Try and go in and link some more^^ We've got pages for more than just the cats linked, stuff like RiverClan, medicine cat, fish etc, need it too.—spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 16:06, 9/07/2019
That should be better now, thank you for the help. Anyway sorry for the formatting issues, I had just forgotten to check over the guidelines again but I think I’m good with the right procedure now. -Dawn 18:57, September 7, 2019 (UTC)
Add a main quote? Then you should be good to go —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 01:03, 9/11/2019
CBV? —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 10:33, 9/12/2019
Moonrise/Chapter 5 - Silver Nomination
— Dawn 15:19, September 7, 2019 (UTC)
Same as the above nomination; more linkage needed.—spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 16:07, 9/07/2019
Redtail's Debt/Chapter 4 - Silver Nomination
— max it is the real thing, (22:17, 07/9/2019)
CBV? —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 01:06, 9/11/2019
Moonrise/Chapter 7 - Silver Nomination
-Dawn 02:37, September 8, 2019 (UTC)
CBV? —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 01:06, 9/11/2019
Moonrise/Chapter 10 - Silver Nomination
-Dawn 07:30, September 8, 2019 (UTC)
CBV? —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 01:06, 9/11/2019
I tried looking through the guidelines and polices of mostly all the projects but couldn’t find what “CBV?” means. It’s a good thing right? - Dawn 05:04, September 11, 2019 (UTC)
It just is shorthand for 'comments before vote' before we make the vote forum for the nomination —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 10:38, 9/11/2019
Shadowstar's Life/Chapter 1 - Silver Nomination
--Av Out of sight and out of mind () 23:40, September 8, 2019 (UTC)
In the events section, should note that she lost her second to last (8th) life —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 01:07, 9/11/2019
Updated --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 01:22, September 11, 2019 (UTC)
CBV? —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 00:44, 9/12/2019
Moonrise/Chapter 8 - Silver Nomination
-Dawn 04:23, September 9, 2019 (UTC)
CBV? —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 00:44, 9/12/2019
Moonrise/Chapter 9 - Silver Nomination
— Dawn 05:33, September 10, 2019 (UTC)
Perhaps flesh out the summary a bit more, and merge some of the smaller paragraphs? Just seems a little sparse for a 10p chapter —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 00:52, 9/12/2019
Is it alright now? - Dawn 03:07, September 12, 2019 (UTC)
All good. CBV? —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 10:33, 9/12/2019
Squirrelflight's Hope/Prologue - Silver Nomination
- Dawn 00:59, September 11, 2019 (UTC)
Could you add some more detail? I feel this is too short for the prologue. --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 00:57, September 12, 2019 (UTC)
I tried adding more but most of the prologue is pretty much 3 pages of dialogue between just Squirrelpaw, Leafpaw then them talking to Firestar and Sandstorm. I added things the things I thought gave some background to the book like Leafpaw and Squirrelpaw’s bond or Squirrelpaw’s desire to become leader, which is brought up later. - Dawn 03:30, September 12, 2019 (UTC)
Yeah, 4p limits that. However, in precedent, if something isn't mentioned explicitly within this chapter, whether it's true outside of that in the series or not, it can't be on this chapter subpage. So I'd nix any context of that brand. I also think redundancy can be cut back on; try using 'the medicine cat apprentice' 'the she-cat' 'her sister' and not use a cat's name every line, and especially not twice a sentence.—spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 10:32, 9/12/2019
Sorry I think I phrased that wrong. I mean the dialogue in the chapter that supports those things. I fixed up the redundancy I think, is it good to go? - Dawn 13:56, September 12, 2019 (UTC)
Link Dustpelt and Cinderpelt's names when you first mention them in the text. --Wolfy 02:11, September 13, 2019 (UTC)
Fixed -Dawn 04:19, September 13, 2019 (UTC)
All good. CBV? —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 17:55, 9/13/2019
Moonrise/Chapter 11 - Silver Nomination
- Dawn 05:13, September 11, 2019 (UTC)
Add a main quote^ —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 00:53, 9/12/2019
Updated - Dawn 03:13, September 12, 2019 (UTC)
Thunder and Shadow/Chapter 11 - Silver Nomination
--Wolfy 01:15, September 13, 2019 (UTC)
Squirrelflight's Hope/Chapter 1 - Silver Nomination
- Dawn 04:14, September 14, 2019 (UTC)