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Poppyfrost (K) - Redone
Colors picked from Sorreltail's kit Moo (talk) 08:24, October 10, 2019 (UTC)
Could you dull the shading tint some, and maybe smudge the blotches a bit more? Vec I am Iron Man! 👾 19:04, October 10, 2019 (UTC)
Sure! I just cant get on my computer for a few hours! Moo (talk) 23:36, October 10, 2019 (UTC)
Reuploaded Moo (talk) 06:53, October 11, 2019 (UTC)
There should be more variation in the dapple size and shape, and the patches should be sharper than what you've currently got too - if you'd like I have sorreltail's warrior file handy (which is the master design/colours) — max it is the real thing, (22:47, 11/10/2019)
I dont think i know how to make them sharper and still looknatural... Moo (talk) 22:18, October 12, 2019 (UTC)
Just give it a go, it doesn't hurt to just just try it - after all, this place is for constructive criticism so we'll be able to help you to get it looking right if it needs it. Again, I can offer the file I mentioned above that might help getting it to look right. — max it is the real thing, (01:05, 13/10/2019)
Thanks! Reuploaded! Moo (talk) 08:42, October 13, 2019 (UTC)
The patch placements have some differences from Sorreltail's kit, notably on the face/bum etc —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 16:43, 10/13/2019
Frogtail (A) - Redone
OA is Icy; redone to remove mottles. --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 23:42, October 10, 2019 (UTC)
your source is a little confusing, maybe remove the section going across the flank, and it should be all good? maybe also define the depth just a little bit on the face, and neck area — max it is the real thing, (04:15, 11/10/2019)
Fixed --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 21:25, October 11, 2019 (UTC)
Until/if you can get that other nom to pass, this needs the texturing the rest of the set has.—spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 19:11, 10/12/2019
Fixed --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 22:15, October 12, 2019 (UTC)
Try to even out the texture - seems uneven with lines of it ending at somewhat random points, which results in it looking a little blotchy.—spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 17:10, 10/13/2019
Fixed Ahh, so much better. --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 18:15, October 13, 2019 (UTC)
Smooth and even out the shading - the varying opacities of it seem to make it also look blotchy.—spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 00:10, 10/14/2019
Fixed --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 00:17, October 14, 2019 (UTC)
Define the lightsource? I'm having trouble seeing it on the shoulder and forelegs. Vec I am Iron Man! 👾 02:35, October 15, 2019 (UTC)
The lightsource is this, without the crossing haunch shading. --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 02:43, October 15, 2019 (UTC)
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the base colour looks a little darker than the warrior on my current screen? also im not sure how that source works, but, is a little conflicting with/without the haunch shading - but now knowing what source you are using, define the light on the muzzle because in the pic you linked, its a lot clearer and same with the light on the legs. — max it is the real thing, (08:47, 15/10/2019)
Fixed I added back the crossing shading to make the source less confusing. --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 00:11, October 16, 2019 (UTC)
Tallstar (D) - Redone
color picked off the image directly Burntclaw 03:56, October 11, 2019 (UTC)
Should he have the white paws and tail-tip? I know the image doesn't have them, but he's still described with them. Bluestar Leaf flying in the wind 04:37, October 11, 2019 (UTC)
Also, he needs a long tail. Bluestar Leaf flying in the wind 04:39, October 11, 2019 (UTC)
Adding on - he's also cited with a white tail tip — max it is the real thing, (04:41, 11/10/2019)
Brighten up the white; he doesn’t look black-and-white at all. —Jayce(07:38, 10/11/2019)
reup will add long tail and fix other issues when i come back from class. also, this is what happens when you solely match his image and ignore his description... Burntclaw 12:24, October 11, 2019 (UTC)
Smooth the tail tip and new paw whites slightly; seem a bit sharp —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 23:31, 10/11/2019
reup Burntclaw 20:33, October 16, 2019 (UTC)
There's waste around the tail-tip. Bluestar Leaf flying in the wind 20:43, October 16, 2019 (UTC)
Maybe extend the canvas so the tail tip isn’t abruptly cut off? — max it is the real thing, (21:10, 16/10/2019)
Tallstar (Lo) - Withdrawn
OA is Skt; redone to match official art. --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 22:19, October 11, 2019 (UTC)
Maybe smooth out the lineart towards the tailtip, and brighten the white up to match the deputy above? — max it is the real thing, (22:32, 11/10/2019)
Fixed --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 22:42, October 11, 2019 (UTC)
The hind paw furthest from us needs to be white to match the deputy. Bluestar Leaf flying in the wind 23:14, October 11, 2019 (UTC)
Fixed --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 23:19, October 11, 2019 (UTC)
The patch style doesn't seem to have the same sharper/smudgy thing the deputy has going —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 23:31, 10/11/2019
Fixed *intense screaming in background* --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 03:32, October 12, 2019 (UTC)
The base colour here seems darker than the deputy, which has a more bluish/greenish tint from the colour pick. — max it is the real thing, (20:46, 12/10/2019)
Actually sorry I just can't read colour it seems, if you add highlights maybe, it might help match the base colour better — max it is the real thing, (20:46, 12/10/2019)
Fixed No need for highlights- just some hiding layers, colorpicking, and switching base colors appears to have done it. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Potato Flakin (talk • contribs)
So sorry for the amount of comments, but, the colour still seems off to my eyes? It might be worth asking Burnt for the deputy file, it might help? I was colouring picking the dep before it was giving me those green/blue blacks I mentioned in a previous comment that I said to disregard, but, I think it might actually be right? — max it is the real thing, (00:58, 13/10/2019)
Fixed There we go... --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 01:48, October 13, 2019 (UTC)
I have the deputy's file and there's no texture. there's only some on the white. also, there should be some white on his chest - Fox 僕たちはひとつの光 02:29,10/13/2019
Fixed --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 02:41, October 13, 2019 (UTC)
Sorry for more commenting, but the base should be much darker (0b1213) - Fox 僕たちはひとつの光 02:44,10/13/2019
Fixed --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 04:33, October 13, 2019 (UTC)
Smudge that white a little more? It's still a bit too soft. —Jayce(05:00, 10/13/2019)
Fixed --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 15:12, October 13, 2019 (UTC)
One of the back feet (look at the other images) is not white. He's got three white and one black.—spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 16:44, 10/13/2019
Fixed I think I got the right leg.. bad pun Potato bad pun --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 18:15, October 13, 2019 (UTC)
White amount on the tail patches is too small; see leader for how it looks on this side, since that also reflects the deputy/official art —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 19:07, 10/13/2019
Fixed --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 19:13, October 13, 2019 (UTC)
The white on the face goes too high up the forehead in comparison to the other images, and the white also seems a bit duller/grayer overall, and the patches too smoothly smudged.—spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 21:13, 10/14/2019
Fixed Those white patches are going to be the end of me. --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 22:59, October 14, 2019 (UTC)
I believe all the paws should be white? Vec I am Iron Man! 👾 02:36, October 15, 2019 (UTC)
I was told to remove the paw white on the back leg because it contradicted his artwork. --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 02:42, October 15, 2019 (UTC)
Yes that’s right. Paws means at least two, so three works, and that’s what the leader/dep have now. Otherwise - dull those texture lines on the white. I don’t think think it should even have it tbh. That’s probably what’s making it look gray.—spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 03:17, 10/15/2019
(smudging style is what it appears to be on the others, if minimal texture at all; stylized smudging) —spooky is that... a furry cat?!? 03:18, 10/15/2019
Fixed I just deleted the white texture layer. --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 00:11, October 16, 2019 (UTC)
I think the white on the hind leg closest to us needs to be on the other hind leg, to match the deputy. Bluestar Leaf flying in the wind 01:01, October 16, 2019 (UTC)
Fixed --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 01:28, October 16, 2019 (UTC)
The leader does also have a patch on the back leg closest to us too, near the knee. — max it is the real thing, (07:58, 16/10/2019)
this needs to have texture. im not seeing any and the patch smudge style still doesnt quite match the rest ✧Winter✧ 13:02, 10/16/2019
I think the patch on the back needs to be bigger too - Fox 僕たちはひとつの光 20:36,10/16/2019
Withdrawing I can't work with these patches and I don't want this anymore. Someone else may have him. --Av Out of sight and out of mind () 21:25, October 16, 2019 (UTC)
Sorreltail (Q) ~ Redone
All colors from other images. Comments? Bluestar Leaf flying in the wind 20:17, October 16, 2019 (UTC)
Poppyfrost (W) ~ Redone
All colors from other images. Comments? Bluestar Leaf flying in the wind 20:17, October 16, 2019 (UTC)
Tallstar (R) ~ Redone
OA was me. redone to match official art - Fox 僕たちはひとつの光 20:34,10/16/2019